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Her Dance
So powerful
when she dances
and exposes her soul
as she listens to her heart
letting her inner voice speak
revealing her fire in every step
So beautiful
when she dances
following her rhythm
on the melody of passion
and the sound of her desire
reflecting her life in every step
So emotional
when she dances
through her barricades
with fragility and intensity
laying bare her broken heart
echoing her fear in every move
So vulnerable
when she dances
and still keeps moving
when tears blur her vision
and she has lost her strength
carrying her pain in every move
when she dances
and exposes her soul
as she listens to her heart
letting her inner voice speak
revealing her fire in every step
So beautiful
when she dances
following her rhythm
on the melody of passion
and the sound of her desire
reflecting her life in every step
So emotional
when she dances
through her barricades
with fragility and intensity
laying bare her broken heart
echoing her fear in every move
So vulnerable
when she dances
and still keeps moving
when tears blur her vision
and she has lost her strength
carrying her pain in every move
Author's Note
Agnes Obels - Riverside.
https://youtu.be/hFlF3YgGTek
https://youtu.be/hFlF3YgGTek
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Re. Her Dance
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27th Jul 2016 8:56am
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Re. Her Dance
28th Jul 2016 4:43pm
I love the way you make breathing pores tangible for us.
Welcome welcome
-Howlings
Welcome welcome
-Howlings
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29th Jul 2016 12:44pm
Wow... what an amazing comment, thank you so much!!!
And thanks for the welcome of course :-)
And thanks for the welcome of course :-)
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29th Jul 2016 3:12pm
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Re. Her Dance
Anonymous
3rd Aug 2016 4:59am
So heartfelt.. really dig this..
Dave
Dave
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4th Aug 2016 10:45am
Re. Her Dance
Anonymous
13th Aug 2016 7:48am
I like the gentle waves you've created with your words; the rhythm of her dance.
Thought I'd mention that I keep mentally reading the third line of your last stanza as "still she keeps moving." It flows a little better to my ear. Just a suggestion in case you hadn't considered the option.
Thought I'd mention that I keep mentally reading the third line of your last stanza as "still she keeps moving." It flows a little better to my ear. Just a suggestion in case you hadn't considered the option.
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Re: Re. Her Dance
7th Sep 2016 2:18am
Thank you for the compliment and your suggestion!
I hadn't considered the option... tried it a few times and though I like it, I like my version more ;-)
I hadn't considered the option... tried it a few times and though I like it, I like my version more ;-)
Re. Her Dance
6th Sep 2016 5:22pm
there's nothing more expressive
than a woman immersed in her dance..
so tragic yet so beautiful
you conveyed this ever so lovely
Duende!!
than a woman immersed in her dance..
so tragic yet so beautiful
you conveyed this ever so lovely
Duende!!
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Re: Re. Her Dance
7th Sep 2016 2:24am
Thank you so much, Naajir
Dancing is one of my passions and I agree with you that it is a beautiful way of expressing oneself! Your comments are so tremendeously treasured!
Duende
Dancing is one of my passions and I agree with you that it is a beautiful way of expressing oneself! Your comments are so tremendeously treasured!
Duende
Re. Her Dance
".......so vulnerable
when she dances
and still keeps moving
when tears blur her vision
and she has lost her strength
carrying her pain in every move" Breathtaking and beautiful
.....and yet she still keeps moving #imasurvivor
I can visualize your choreography inside of "Riverside" I love the melancholy tone of this song 😢
Your words are the best therapy for all of us passing through this place that is not our home : )
when she dances
and still keeps moving
when tears blur her vision
and she has lost her strength
carrying her pain in every move" Breathtaking and beautiful
.....and yet she still keeps moving #imasurvivor
I can visualize your choreography inside of "Riverside" I love the melancholy tone of this song 😢
Your words are the best therapy for all of us passing through this place that is not our home : )
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Therapy? I can't think of a more beautiful compliment :-)
Thank you so much for your comment and the reading list entries!
Above all... thank you for seeing the survivor in me! I so appreciate you!
Thank you so much for your comment and the reading list entries!
Above all... thank you for seeing the survivor in me! I so appreciate you!
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13th Nov 2016 5:29pm
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13th Nov 2016 5:51pm
Thank you so much, you make me blush :-)
I really appreciate it that you took the time to read some older writings... not a lot of people do that!
I really appreciate it that you took the time to read some older writings... not a lot of people do that!
Re: Re. Her Dance
13th Nov 2016 6:07pm
I like to live outside the norms of human behavior. Something told me, You'd appreciate a new fan seeking older writings. :)
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Anonymous
9th May 2017 8:04am
I have fallen in love with this one, you're notably and splendidly soothing here just as much.
thank you dear for sharing your voice, can't explain it
breathing now a little better
thank you dear for sharing your voice, can't explain it
breathing now a little better
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9th May 2017 1:30pm
Dearest, you have no idea how much your comments mean to me... again, I'm a little lost for words! I never thought of my writings being soothing, so that you think they are means a lot to me... thank you, love! Glad to hear you're breathing a bit beter... be well...
Re. Her Dance
25th Sep 2018 10:57pm
Eloquent and well-drawn, down to the sloping step set-up of each stanza. Brilliant
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26th Sep 2018 7:43am
You take me on a trip down memory lane :-)
Thank you so much for your comment and calling this piece brilliant... means a lot!
Thank you so much for your comment and calling this piece brilliant... means a lot!
Anonymous
- Edited 21st Oct 2019 5:45am
20th Apr 2019 3:09pm
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