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Diamond stars
Diamond stars in the sky shining down on you and I
Because your mine
The stars will always shine
The sun bursts down a ray of light transform to day from a dark night
Because your mine
The stars will always shine
I still see that twinkle in your eye like a diamond star in the sky
Because your mine
The stars will always shine
Because your mine
The stars will always shine
The sun bursts down a ray of light transform to day from a dark night
Because your mine
The stars will always shine
I still see that twinkle in your eye like a diamond star in the sky
Because your mine
The stars will always shine
Published 30th May 2016
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30th May 2016 2:38pm
Lovely ink ...
... Some corrections are needed however: your to "you're" through the poem; "ray of light" should end that line and "transforms" should start the next
... Some corrections are needed however: your to "you're" through the poem; "ray of light" should end that line and "transforms" should start the next
30th May 2016 4:34pm
3rd Jun 2016 11:50am
Lovely ink indeed bro- can feel the charm your poem evokes on a smitten heart - I believe poems are to be listened to more than read, but that's my personal/individual thing-hence I tend to overlook typos and spelling errors hence haven't pointed them out-that's the reason behind me not pointing them out on any poems I comment on. In short- an awesome ink indeed!
5th Jun 2016 1:33pm
Thanks bro I ignore typos an errors myself as I make plenty myself lol. An yh I hear wat u saying I think similar like a poem or music etc is something u feel not read or heae
