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FOUR + ONE
Who is she? Who am I? Who are we? We are the deepest, purest form of insanity. We are an army of four + one. ICE runs in her veins, without mercy, this gatekeeper stands guard over all. KAT, graceful, silently stalking guarded whispers, she stands forever on guard. CHERRY are her cheeks, ripe with curiosity and flirtation. Able to out drink man or beast. Forever standing guard. SPOOK, Forever a child, holds all our pain within, easy to spook, he forever stands guard. SURVIVOR, our core, she's hauntingly, beautifully insane. We are an army of four + one . We are the damaged and shattered pieces. We have been known to accidentally scratch anyone getting to close. To survive, we've put our soul's upon the auction block. We are an army of four + one. Our spirit, the depraved heart could not control nor contain. Our spirit, forever dancing in the shadows light. Our spirit forever battles on, courageously fighting, forevermore. We are an army of four + one...
Published 3rd Dec 2015
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5th Dec 2015 10:12pm
this is beautiful - I hadn't thought to name mine but would suspect I am an army of six - I need to think and recount - thank you for making me think :-)
Their name's & existence, in my case, was discovered at 18 yrs., under hypnosis & my team of doc's., whose care I'm still under. My poem's chronicle my struggle survive in this cold world. Thanx always for you input😊, & your bravery for your survivorlism waving their flag, many prayers in your continual struggle, SURVIVOR➰
11th Dec 2015 7:27pm
I enjoyed the fractured nature of the piece, though I have to admit that I did find it a little distracting how the lines were laid out. I found it interesting, and I liked the fact, that all aspects remained at guard. It was an awesome way to subtley yet clearly articulate your guarded nature. Good job. I look forward to reading more, Survivor.
14th Dec 2015 1:16am
I only have a phone, not a computer, the way I submit turns out completely different! I'm glad you found it interesting! Thanx for the feedback & compliment!😊!
18th Dec 2015 8:10am
I love this piece. This is the best piece I've come across on this site. Thank you for the excellent and powerful read!
"she's hauntingly, beautifully insane" - intense line
"she's hauntingly, beautifully insane" - intense line
18th Dec 2015 9:07am
I'm such a nut! I replied to your compliment below this! I'm getting the hang of this yet 😊➰
18th Dec 2015 9:04am
Thank you. My doctor's gave us that phrase! Having multiplicity is the workings of an insane mind! It's simply our reality! Thank you for such an inspiring & glowing compliment, which I graciously accept. Also thank-you for the read list, to me it's an honor! SURVIVOR➰
