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Blade of Arkose
Dreams and screams sleep
hand in hand, as a murderous mist
creeps the land, killing and spilling
by blood and by sand
of The Hourglass Blade
made to be grand.
It fits the bill for his power
great, to love with a shove
for the sake of a hate
for angels and men, a desire
to sate, to conquer above
and destroy that Gate.
Rise to the skies with that Blade
of old, to slash and gash, to
make them cold by waves of graves
and souls to be sold,
cut them down
with that Blade of old.
6/10/15
05:47
hand in hand, as a murderous mist
creeps the land, killing and spilling
by blood and by sand
of The Hourglass Blade
made to be grand.
It fits the bill for his power
great, to love with a shove
for the sake of a hate
for angels and men, a desire
to sate, to conquer above
and destroy that Gate.
Rise to the skies with that Blade
of old, to slash and gash, to
make them cold by waves of graves
and souls to be sold,
cut them down
with that Blade of old.
6/10/15
05:47
Published 10th Jun 2015
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10th Jun 2015 5:57pm
This is very intriguing, feel there is more to it possibly? Would be lovely to see more it. Stimulating much.
10th Jun 2015 9:16pm
Thank you. I appreciate your words. With this poem, I was experimenting with a different stack of the lines in rhyme; instead of the rhyming word be towards the end in every line, I tried to mix it up at the same time attempting to keep the rhythm of the piece.
Please tell me if you think it worked. A fresh eye can do a poet good. Write on.
Please tell me if you think it worked. A fresh eye can do a poet good. Write on.
11th Jun 2015 5:44pm
Yes actually, I think it reads very smoothly & the rhythm/ rhyme is perfected as you wished. Either way lovely piece.
