Kings and Queens

I really loved this. It hit a certain spot no one thing ever hits. I also loved the visual element of the falling.. how the letters are actually falling. As I said before, I love this soooo much. Amazing job.

Thank you, A.F. :) I'll have to check out your stuff when my courseworks done. Gimme a couple of hours =]

This is such an interesting perspective; I was actually just looking at a poem similarily styled on DeviantArt, but, unlike yours, I was considering scolding it for lack of interest. (Hah. It has about 20 'Favorites' and 100 comments.)

Anyways, this is brilliant. Loved everything from the format to the final metaphor.

Thanks, Cor' :) Glad it was okay. I could have developed on it so much but I thought actually for being empty it only needs that so I took out everything that wasn't really needed. Thanks again.

You COULD have developed more, but it wouldn't possess the same spontaneity that this has.
Plus, it's not empty, but each word has more weight.

Just my opinion, of course. :]

I concur :D Thank you

Well, that's two in a row from you I very much like. I love how this sets up so many thoughts. It's something I'm incapable of, writing a poem that can lead the mind anywhere... mine all say one thing.

Thank you, Mike :) I'm glad you liked it!

A gorgeous surrealist canvas. I adored this. Especially the arrangement of the letters in "fall" and the mysterious specificity with "twenty seven phone calls".

Thank you, JackJack! Finally feel like I've managed to impress you! *happy dance* :D

I love how you've mixed the the non-specific and ambiguous nature of 'somewhere in the bemuda triangle' with the concise feeling you get from the way the words are placed and how succinct the poem is. I think that works to give the poem a real dream-like feeling, like you're in between two things and you cant quite get a hold of either side.

Oh, Merda thank you. It was how I meant it to fall across the page. Glad it came across.