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Drowning
I'm drowning. I can't kick myself to the surface. My lungs burn
inside me. I don't want to go. I won't surrender, not like this. Your
words are poison, invading my veins and going straight to my heart.
I can't breath and know I won't be able to without you by my side again.
The very reason for my suffication is also the breath my lungs crave for.
Your killing me yet the only thing that can bring me back to life again. I lay before you
battered and broken awaiting my next fix. My fix of you. Before i'm thrown
back in head first to continue drowning from the side affects of you. As
soon as I hit the place of my drowning I have the urge to scream hating you
with every fiber of my being. Though I know its useless for as soon as you
pull me to the surface i'll want you again as I always do. Your suffocating
but also my love....How do I come back from this?
inside me. I don't want to go. I won't surrender, not like this. Your
words are poison, invading my veins and going straight to my heart.
I can't breath and know I won't be able to without you by my side again.
The very reason for my suffication is also the breath my lungs crave for.
Your killing me yet the only thing that can bring me back to life again. I lay before you
battered and broken awaiting my next fix. My fix of you. Before i'm thrown
back in head first to continue drowning from the side affects of you. As
soon as I hit the place of my drowning I have the urge to scream hating you
with every fiber of my being. Though I know its useless for as soon as you
pull me to the surface i'll want you again as I always do. Your suffocating
but also my love....How do I come back from this?
Published 9th Jul 2014
| Edited 15th May 2015
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10th Jul 2014 6:07pm
11th Jul 2014 3:23pm
The age old dilemma, love's a bitch isn't it.
The constant drowning metaphor is seriously well executed, managed to keep it just as prominent throughout, yet it doesn't feel full of pre-tense, really easy to understand and definitely to the point. really liked how you summed up the desire to hate them, contrasted by the need and love for them. Good write
Be Happy
The constant drowning metaphor is seriously well executed, managed to keep it just as prominent throughout, yet it doesn't feel full of pre-tense, really easy to understand and definitely to the point. really liked how you summed up the desire to hate them, contrasted by the need and love for them. Good write
Be Happy
11th Jul 2014 8:52pm
Thank you so much for enjoying the work and giving me good feed back I appreciate it :)
