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' He taught me '
He taught me how to love women .
He loved my mum with a passion .
He taught me how to care for women .
He cared for my mum with kid gloves .
He taught me how to feed for my family .
He fed us with diligence three meals .
He taught me how to respect women .
He respected my mum and revered her .
He taught me how to make my hands dirty .
He made his hands dirty to put food on the table .
He taught me how not to discipline a woman .
He never rebuked ,questioned or even demean mum in our presence .
He taught me how to win an argument .
He listened without interrupting .
He taught me how to pray .
He never was ashamed to humble himself before God :
to say "Thank you God .
He taught me how to be happy .
He smiled happily and habour no hate .
He taught me how to be a Man ;
A Man Loves his wife
Cares for her
Respects her
Honors her
Lays no hand on her
Feeds his family
And; that's what he made me to be
A Man ....
He loved my mum with a passion .
He taught me how to care for women .
He cared for my mum with kid gloves .
He taught me how to feed for my family .
He fed us with diligence three meals .
He taught me how to respect women .
He respected my mum and revered her .
He taught me how to make my hands dirty .
He made his hands dirty to put food on the table .
He taught me how not to discipline a woman .
He never rebuked ,questioned or even demean mum in our presence .
He taught me how to win an argument .
He listened without interrupting .
He taught me how to pray .
He never was ashamed to humble himself before God :
to say "Thank you God .
He taught me how to be happy .
He smiled happily and habour no hate .
He taught me how to be a Man ;
A Man Loves his wife
Cares for her
Respects her
Honors her
Lays no hand on her
Feeds his family
And; that's what he made me to be
A Man ....
Published 20th Jun 2014
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20th Jun 2014 2:06pm
This is absolutely wonderful...should be a written creed in every household especially those with sons! Enjoyed this!
20th Jun 2014 7:14pm
20th Jun 2014 2:50pm
Enjoyed the perspective so eloquently writ...expressing not only your beliefs in how to be a Man but the gratitude in learning such from a stellar Man as well... well done...with respect..domore
20th Jun 2014 7:16pm
domore ,thanks for enjoying and sparing few of you minutes to go through the piece .
Powerful ending. Thank you for writing this. Sometimes I wish I knew how to encourage a better society / culture, and this is a good example / approach. Reminds me of the simple mother's day saying, "It's true, I received the best kisses from another's man wife, thanks mum." My children are older, and I feel I have fallen short of the many simple truths expressed. Hope you are able to share more cultural insights.
A quick limerick out of respect ...
mojado123 took some time writing poem
Where truths are brought into the open
About better life
Together with wife
Changing a shared house into a home
But, you asked for honest critique, so I feel compelled to search for some weakness. The only weakness that I can see is the development. The poem starts with love of women, but that seems to be an advance concept in light of the subject matter. Here's a rewrite, with the concepts rearranged in order that a child would learn as growing, and I added one on playing.
He taught me how to be happy .
He smiled happily and habour no hate .
He taught me how to play
He laughed with friends .
He taught me how to pray .
He never was ashamed to humble himself before God :
to say "Thank you God .
He taught me how to win an argument .
He listened without interrupting .
He taught me how to make my hands dirty .
He made his hands dirty to put food on the table .
He taught me how to care for women .
He cared for my mum with kid gloves .
He taught me how to respect women .
He respected my mum and revered her .
He taught me how to love women .
He loved my mum with a passion .
He taught me how not to discipline a woman .
He never rebuked ,questioned or even demean mum in our presence .
He taught me how to feed for my family .
He fed us with diligence three meals .
He taught me how to be a Man ;
A Man Loves his wife
Cares for her
Respects her
Honors her
Lays no hand on her
Feeds his family
And; that's how I grew to be
A Man ....
A quick limerick out of respect ...
mojado123 took some time writing poem
Where truths are brought into the open
About better life
Together with wife
Changing a shared house into a home
But, you asked for honest critique, so I feel compelled to search for some weakness. The only weakness that I can see is the development. The poem starts with love of women, but that seems to be an advance concept in light of the subject matter. Here's a rewrite, with the concepts rearranged in order that a child would learn as growing, and I added one on playing.
He taught me how to be happy .
He smiled happily and habour no hate .
He taught me how to play
He laughed with friends .
He taught me how to pray .
He never was ashamed to humble himself before God :
to say "Thank you God .
He taught me how to win an argument .
He listened without interrupting .
He taught me how to make my hands dirty .
He made his hands dirty to put food on the table .
He taught me how to care for women .
He cared for my mum with kid gloves .
He taught me how to respect women .
He respected my mum and revered her .
He taught me how to love women .
He loved my mum with a passion .
He taught me how not to discipline a woman .
He never rebuked ,questioned or even demean mum in our presence .
He taught me how to feed for my family .
He fed us with diligence three meals .
He taught me how to be a Man ;
A Man Loves his wife
Cares for her
Respects her
Honors her
Lays no hand on her
Feeds his family
And; that's how I grew to be
A Man ....
22nd Jun 2014 5:00am
Thanks for passing by jvp .thanks for your kind words .thanks for your honesty .point taken .
