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the ocean and the sand
he is
and i am
and i don't quite know if
he'll come crashing back
but i hope he does
i hope he
swallows
me
Published 12th Apr 2014
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15th Apr 2014 10:34am
I really like the first two lines where two distinct identities 'crash' and 'swallow' one another and become a unity.
well done Kameron!
well done Kameron!
Anonymous
17th Apr 2014 5:24pm
are interesting from an exclusively stylistic standpoint. the first two lines begin the poem as a pendulum, as unhurried as shore water. i like the simplicity and wholeness in this.
