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~Alive at Night~
As I walk into the night
my heart takes flight
the dark's comforting surrounds me
the stars open a secret dimension with a key
so you see
the night so opposite from day
it's my own secret world
in which I can play
oh how i wish I could stay
but when the dawn breaks
and the stars flicker out
I pout and go back into the house
to brave another day and live another night
my heart takes flight
the dark's comforting surrounds me
the stars open a secret dimension with a key
so you see
the night so opposite from day
it's my own secret world
in which I can play
oh how i wish I could stay
but when the dawn breaks
and the stars flicker out
I pout and go back into the house
to brave another day and live another night
Published 1st Mar 2011
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Anonymous
1st Mar 2011 3:44am
"but when the dawn breaks
and the stars flicker out
I pout and go back into the house
to brave another day and live another night"
I like that part. :]
But, in the third line... did you mean
"The dark *comfort* surrounds me"
or
"The *dark's* comforting surrounds me"
Either way would work.
I like the title, as well.
and the stars flicker out
I pout and go back into the house
to brave another day and live another night"
I like that part. :]
But, in the third line... did you mean
"The dark *comfort* surrounds me"
or
"The *dark's* comforting surrounds me"
Either way would work.
I like the title, as well.
1st Mar 2011 3:45am
1st Mar 2011 9:15am
I guess everybody has a private world where they can be alone. The lines "it's my own secret world, in which I can play"
1st Mar 2011 3:55pm
4th Mar 2011 5:39am
this just speaks to me on so many levels. i love it, the night time is amazing and gorgeous, i know because i can never sleep anyways, so i like to look at the stars. :) great job, keep it up
5th Mar 2011 1:55am
im the same way dalton. i love looking at the stars on a cloudless night :)
