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The girl I love...
La fille que j'aime est si jolie
That, I will never hurt her badly
Never would i like to see her sadly
And our love will always be lovely
And I will never hurt her badly
All my energy will be invested, madly
For our love will always be lovely
All our days together will be fondly
All my energy will be invested, madly
When we immerse in each other sweetly
All our days together will be fondly
Our energy will be in each other eternally
When we immerse in each other sweetly
An huge happiness submerges us fully
Our energy will be in each other eternally
I never felt such strong feelings within me
An huge happiness submerges us fully
I would always like to see you happy
I never felt such strong feelings within me
La fille que j'aime est très jolie
A comment : Petit_Minou made me discovering the Pantoum. I have tried here to make the beginning of a Pantoum, but just a little too short (five stanza, with help of Vee, where it needs six minimum)!
Hope to be successful for this form of poem very awesome, but in my mind, very close to the fugue in music
Published 27th Dec 2013
| Edited 28th Dec 2013
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Anonymous
27th Dec 2013 7:38am
It's a great beginning... Love the use of both languages... =)
27th Dec 2013 7:54am
Thank you so much, PM, to contribuate to discover this form of poem. What is really incredible is the musicality of the poem, just because of this structure. When I compare it to a fugue (I think to J.S.Bach with his "Kunst der Fuge"), it is one of the reason...
Thank you again, PM, for your support!
Thank you again, PM, for your support!
Anonymous
28th Dec 2013 7:33am
Excellent Malin!!! I really like how this is turning out to be, its very lyrical and I can't wait for you to work on the 6th stanza, it should turn out very good.
28th Dec 2013 7:48am
This form of poem is very lyrical and I love it, I must try to do some others! And mix more languages, as PM suggested me! Obviously, readers should be able to understand, even they don't know the language!
Thank you so much for your comment and your help!
Thank you so much for your comment and your help!
