Pretty Little Girl

There's a couple of somewhat effective lines here, but overall it's thin soup. The refrain is overly simple and tedious, creating a bad nursery rhyme feel, and some images are so inane they're comic. "Has no more fun", for instance. You have to ask yourself what each line means and how well it conveys your ultimate point. We already know that the little girl isn't having a fun time, so to suddenly state that after so much violence is funny, like a torture porn film where the guy getting his toes cut off suddenly turns to the camera and says "GodDAMN, this sucks!" That's merely my individual opinion, though. Please feel free to discard it.

I think the basic structure and obviousness of the statements actually made the poem as amazing as it was, though I do see the point you were making. Good observations

I like this poem :)

I love the ones that get me into that false sense of security with their nursery rhyme like flow..  than make me do a 360..look forward to more work:)