The Eagle

If you get to witness this event in person, count yourself lucky. Most of the eagles I get to see are high above & fast in flight. A most majestic predator. I love observations in poetry concerning beast, bug, fish, or fowl. Good piece. Welcome.

Thank you so much I appreciate your comment! :)

No, I never witnessed anything like this but I wish I did!

This literally just came from the top of my head. I chose a random topic about something nature related, and this just naturally came to me like 10 minutes ago.

Again thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

well, i like the poem.  it..does seem a little bit bland to me.  it's about an eagle descending to snatch a meal...your intent is to capture the majesty of this great raptor deftly performing a necessary act of its existence?--wait--that could be good--pairing the majesty with the fact that it's a necessary thing, a thing the eagle may have to do all the time.  but anyway, i'm not feeling the majesty in this piece.

maybe that's not necessary.

maybe the actual descent could be painted more vividly.

maybe the descent is painted just fine.  actually it is, but it is possible to make it more vivid.

the last two lines are odd--wouldn't the eagle snatch its prey, and then fly away, not fly away and snatch it at the same time?  there would be at least a split milisecond of snatching involved before the eagle could actually leave with the fish in its clutches.

anyway, i do like the poem, though the natural world itself is not the most interesting of subjects for me in creative writing.

The blocky-barren approach is effective when writing riddles (I write a lot of vague riddles), however, as a story this doesn't reveal anything about a unique experience nor does it bestow any wisdom to the reader. The reader really doesn't benefit anything emotional, metaphysical, or otherwise that isn't already inside the reader's head before reading. All this poem does, is state that some unspecified eagle, somewhere, in some condition did embark the journey of eating something.

nice to know that its just ur imagination..I don't wanna repeat myself regarding your imagination n observation..I like this poem but it ends abruptly you could have added a bit more color by giving some more details of the exact scene that u had in ur head...



this is just my opinion.. keep writing my friend...I know ur talent I believe in it ..  I hope u do too.. cheers..


cyanide.

Some great constructive criticism going on here, Dreamer! It's more than can be said for some poetry sites...many of which will either ignore you or rudely troll you. I dig it when poets care. Some good points made here...poetry is a process, never a product. Like cyanide kid says above...keep writin', dude...it's all we can do.

Thank you for the comments everyone, I appreciate it very much.

I'll keep working on this poem to make it better.