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Things I Hate
I hate that I live,
each day with doubt.
I hate that I don’t know,
what will come out.
I hate that I live,
my life in such shame.
I hate that every day,
I cause all the pain.
I hate that I don’t know,
what will come each day.
I hate that I can’t,
decide to go which way.
I hate that I have,
no future ahead.
I hate that the truth is,
I’m better off dead.
I hate that I don’t,
know what to expect.
I hate that I’ve made,
everyone’s life a wreck.
I hate that to all,
I am just a disgrace.
I hate that every day,
they have to see my face.
each day with doubt.
I hate that I don’t know,
what will come out.
I hate that I live,
my life in such shame.
I hate that every day,
I cause all the pain.
I hate that I don’t know,
what will come each day.
I hate that I can’t,
decide to go which way.
I hate that I have,
no future ahead.
I hate that the truth is,
I’m better off dead.
I hate that I don’t,
know what to expect.
I hate that I’ve made,
everyone’s life a wreck.
I hate that to all,
I am just a disgrace.
I hate that every day,
they have to see my face.
Published 9th Jan 2011
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9th Jan 2011 4:29pm
Poem of despair, for sure, first the individual on his own pain and angst for where he is and what he doesn't know and then the self-loating for what he has done to others.
The first part, I think, comes across very well, and this should be a poem by itself--singular theme of the angst, confusion and the despair because of it all.
The theme of pain to other people and his own self-loating for what is has caused should be another poem, but I think it would help to explain, describe what he did to bring about their pain.
staying with one idea at a time, i think, is more powerful and has more clarity; by putting or adding another idea causes confusion unless both ideas are married to each other in a precise manner.
The first part, I think, comes across very well, and this should be a poem by itself--singular theme of the angst, confusion and the despair because of it all.
The theme of pain to other people and his own self-loating for what is has caused should be another poem, but I think it would help to explain, describe what he did to bring about their pain.
staying with one idea at a time, i think, is more powerful and has more clarity; by putting or adding another idea causes confusion unless both ideas are married to each other in a precise manner.
12th Jan 2011 4:04am
I know how this feels, I still get this feeling once in a while. But you've gotta remember that we can't control others, meaning they're responsible for their own choices. We can't cause anything. We're only as powerful as others let us be.
