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Man at the Bar
Hey
Hey you
Man at the
bar
Who has
told me three times how beautiful I am
Do you
think I don’t know that?
I do see
through you
And who is
sitting next to you
Striking
blue eyes
Piercing
mine with each glance
Hey
Hey you
Man at the
bar
Can I get
your friends number?
Hey you
Man at the
bar
Who has
told me three times how beautiful I am
Do you
think I don’t know that?
I do see
through you
And who is
sitting next to you
Striking
blue eyes
Piercing
mine with each glance
Hey
Hey you
Man at the
bar
Can I get
your friends number?
Published 2nd Jan 2011
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18th Oct 2012 4:04pm
Clever write! Expected the ending to refer to his companion giving you the stinkeye - nice change-up ;)
18th Oct 2012 4:20pm
22nd Oct 2012 3:44pm
Love the twist at the end. Also like the use of so few words for such perfect impact on the reader.
22nd Oct 2012 4:10pm
