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Seashell hunting
Balancing in the sand
while seashell hunting.
That's my summer ending.
[Balancing in the sand
while summer's ending.
That's my seashell hunting.]
while seashell hunting.
That's my summer ending.
[Balancing in the sand
while summer's ending.
That's my seashell hunting.]
Published 1st Sep 2013
| Edited 12th Sep 2013
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Anonymous
2nd Sep 2013 3:35am
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3rd Sep 2013 9:34pm
3rd Sep 2013 12:51pm
Sometimes I wish you wrote more often... But then I wouldn't appreciate when you do so I guess I actually don't. Haha I like the word play in this.
3rd Sep 2013 9:35pm
But I do, I write more often than I post but i'm rarely satisfied :)
Thank you for appreciating my poetry. It means so much to me!
Thank you for appreciating my poetry. It means so much to me!
Anonymous
12th Sep 2013 7:00am
I love the easy balance you strike. This is utterly lovely, Ophie.
Pssst, I don't think "the" is necessary in S2L2.
Pssst, I don't think "the" is necessary in S2L2.
12th Sep 2013 8:42am
Aish, thank you! It's not only about balancing, it's also about finding balance while walking in the sand..
And thank you for the correction as well.
Bless you.
And thank you for the correction as well.
Bless you.
17th Sep 2013 1:26pm
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Anonymous
10th Oct 2013 8:57am
The main character's literal balancing in sand reflects the delicate balance of the verse, which can be almost imperceptibly altered to create a different meaning. Your stylistic experiment here is like something from Virginia Woolf; sharp, evocative, circular, simple and dense. Thank you very much for the read.
29th Oct 2013 11:07pm
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