Fingertips

I like this. I think. I think I understand where you are going with this piece and if so, it's a great write.
here's where I stumble.  

"how i long and ache
but not too much," ..............

"when all i desire is
physical touch?"

for me, it's contradictory. for me. longing and aching means pure desire for something, in this case the love you don't have in your life,
but all you desire is physical.

would another word such as 'oh I long and ache'
or 'yes I long and ache'? or maybe just drop the word how altogether. it still gets the point across.

then again, maybe I'm full of crap. feel free to say so

hey, i appreciate the feedback. i don't mind honest criticism at all, so thank you :)
when i wrote this i was extremely distracted so its a little bit of word vomit, but i feel its extremely true in my case.
when i said "how i long and ache" it does seem like it meant the desire for love, and that is why i added the next verse "but not too much" as in saying that the desire was just physical and not emotional.
by the way, welcome to DU! people are nice here, and i hope you are enjoying the poems. great poems and a great community :)

This so sad. I relate to it well. :(