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No Place in Your Life
I searched all the rooms of your life
in all the places dark and light
but could not find my place
I wandered from room to room
touched every surface, sat in every chair
but could not find a fit
When my time was up
I walked out the door
and down the path
I only looked back but once
in all the places dark and light
but could not find my place
I wandered from room to room
touched every surface, sat in every chair
but could not find a fit
When my time was up
I walked out the door
and down the path
I only looked back but once
Published 25th Aug 2013
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Anonymous
26th Aug 2013 00:00am
Just wonderful
Concise but complete
A good read
I like the art
Write/paint on!
be well
Kitty
Concise but complete
A good read
I like the art
Write/paint on!
be well
Kitty
26th Aug 2013 11:10pm
26th Aug 2013 00:13am
Kitty is right,
this is a so
well described
feeling...
it's best to
take your
leaving...
great poem
this is a so
well described
feeling...
it's best to
take your
leaving...
great poem
26th Aug 2013 11:11pm
26th Aug 2013 00:25am
26th Aug 2013 11:12pm
Anonymous
26th Aug 2013 1:18am
sound familiar brother poet...nice write
strider
strider
26th Aug 2013 11:14pm
26th Aug 2013 2:02am
Wistful, with resigned acceptance...
Sometimes, when someone we love has moved on, we need that one final moment to be convinced....
Creatively clever metaphor!
Precisely Penned!
Sometimes, when someone we love has moved on, we need that one final moment to be convinced....
Creatively clever metaphor!
Precisely Penned!
26th Aug 2013 11:17pm
Anonymous
- Edited 26th Aug 2013 6:03am
26th Aug 2013 4:11am
while you were looking thru my life
but didn't find a place to settle
cause you missed a spot to look for me and you
that place of luv in your heart
This has left me feeling so sad. I can't imagine anyone not wanting to luv you! :(
but didn't find a place to settle
cause you missed a spot to look for me and you
that place of luv in your heart
This has left me feeling so sad. I can't imagine anyone not wanting to luv you! :(
26th Aug 2013 11:19pm
Anonymous
26th Aug 2013 7:13am
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26th Aug 2013 11:21pm
Leaving someone behind either
by choice or circumstance
is always bittersweet.
by choice or circumstance
is always bittersweet.
Anonymous
26th Aug 2013 8:00am
Moving forward is good. Nicely written.
There is one picture on your tumblr page I particularly like. Almost like a sunburst in one corner. Is there a poem for that one?
There is one picture on your tumblr page I particularly like. Almost like a sunburst in one corner. Is there a poem for that one?
27th Aug 2013 11:07am
I'm not sure which painting you mean. If you click on the + sign in the upper right hand corner, you'll see the name of the painting. If I haven't paired it with a poem, I will just for you.
Anonymous
28th Aug 2013 1:11am
Ah, of course...it's called Ecstasy, lol.
Anonymous
- Edited 1st May 2021 7:46am
31st Aug 2013 2:40pm
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31st Aug 2013 3:08pm
31st Aug 2013 4:47pm
The image of wandering the inner rooms of a beloved person, looking for a comfortable and warm place to settle is beautiful. To have to empty that place and leave for good is as suffocating as being buried alive. You seem to have so much to give, looking into your poems.
Chi
Chi
31st Aug 2013 5:27pm
I have very few friends, but the ones I do have
I think of as family. To them I will give whatever I have.
I think of as family. To them I will give whatever I have.
