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Guilty Conscience
The guilt is killing me. I'm dying inside.
I can't tell you what's wrong or you'll know my secret.
My secret will kill you. We will never be the same.
The lies, I hate this.I hate lying to you.
I know you see through them,you must,your not stupid
How did this happen? How and why did I allow this to happen?
Was it the words he said or the way his words made me feel?
Was it the attention he gave me that you stopped giving?
Maybe a combination of it all?
I hate this person I have become
I can't tell you what's wrong or you'll know my secret.
My secret will kill you. We will never be the same.
The lies, I hate this.I hate lying to you.
I know you see through them,you must,your not stupid
How did this happen? How and why did I allow this to happen?
Was it the words he said or the way his words made me feel?
Was it the attention he gave me that you stopped giving?
Maybe a combination of it all?
I hate this person I have become
Published 10th Dec 2010
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24th Dec 2010 1:48am
I think you have something to work with her, but what is the guilt? How do you know that telling this person your secret will kill the person? I'm sure you do, but I don't get a picture of it myself. Also, I think when you put maybe's in a poem without knowing really what you're talking about, actually, it could be anything.
The powerful element in the poem is your or the character's authentic guilt, it comes across so sincerely, but I think it is begging for some transition or conclusion.
The powerful element in the poem is your or the character's authentic guilt, it comes across so sincerely, but I think it is begging for some transition or conclusion.
24th Jan 2012 6:43am
sounds like an admition to guilt. did you sign some papers after this? rage n guilt can let loose of the best ideas!
