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hey Leonardo, can you hear me?
i'm making crop-circles out your basketball diaries
and i'm in dire need to escape
what has become entirely way too much irony
i'll probably
just raise a monument to my delusion of grandeur
in a stolen moment
playing a grand piano with both hands mangled
slamming my stumps on pulled strings
tangled, my angle simple
strangled speech breech of contract speak
sample
another eureka tweeked
picked apart, made unique
sit, roll-over and heat-seek
feel me dog? neat
cheat-codes, enochian tablets, and aspirin
matchsticks, red phosphate, and top-scores
eye sores, mortgage collapse, and deplorable norms
the storm's no longer quiet
catching the last laughs
before the riot outside of the escape hatch
the answer, and why it's lying
i'm making crop-circles out your basketball diaries
and i'm in dire need to escape
what has become entirely way too much irony
i'll probably
just raise a monument to my delusion of grandeur
in a stolen moment
playing a grand piano with both hands mangled
slamming my stumps on pulled strings
tangled, my angle simple
strangled speech breech of contract speak
sample
another eureka tweeked
picked apart, made unique
sit, roll-over and heat-seek
feel me dog? neat
cheat-codes, enochian tablets, and aspirin
matchsticks, red phosphate, and top-scores
eye sores, mortgage collapse, and deplorable norms
the storm's no longer quiet
catching the last laughs
before the riot outside of the escape hatch
the answer, and why it's lying
Published 24th Apr 2013
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24th Apr 2013 2:14am
this seems familiar man...lol
the ability to twist words and timing to make things fit where they normally would'nt is an admirable skill homie. some of the best rhymes are magic eye puzzles where you have to really stare for a while to see the whole pic. the street scholar def shines through here man...
good stuff lb...
the ability to twist words and timing to make things fit where they normally would'nt is an admirable skill homie. some of the best rhymes are magic eye puzzles where you have to really stare for a while to see the whole pic. the street scholar def shines through here man...
good stuff lb...
24th Apr 2013 2:24am
yeah man what I sent you was like 90% of this, then I spent the rest of the day smoothing a couple hiccups I felt...glad you dug it man, thanks much for the kind words
Anonymous
24th Apr 2013 3:23am
Aside from the beat, palpable, like a pulse the core stands at attention daring your readers to let it sink in.
"the storm's no longer quiet"
Indeed, my friend. Then again, was it ever? I think your spirit has always heard it.
"the storm's no longer quiet"
Indeed, my friend. Then again, was it ever? I think your spirit has always heard it.
24th Apr 2013 3:26pm
Amber, I am glad this worked for you
outside of writing as a kid to try to get girls attentions (and what better reason to pick up a pen?), my background in writing is heavily hip hop and slam style influenced... I departed from that maybe a year and a half ago, to try to respect the page and written word more... I have found myself becoming more diverse and can clarify myself better I think. I have recently been getting back into rhyme schemes ( def have to shout out j.rot, we freestyle in pm's for fun a lot) and think I have started to be able to incorporate more substance into them...i'll say it again, great to be seeing ya around again
outside of writing as a kid to try to get girls attentions (and what better reason to pick up a pen?), my background in writing is heavily hip hop and slam style influenced... I departed from that maybe a year and a half ago, to try to respect the page and written word more... I have found myself becoming more diverse and can clarify myself better I think. I have recently been getting back into rhyme schemes ( def have to shout out j.rot, we freestyle in pm's for fun a lot) and think I have started to be able to incorporate more substance into them...i'll say it again, great to be seeing ya around again
Anonymous
24th Apr 2013 3:47am
lightbaron rules
24th Apr 2013 3:27pm
29th Apr 2013 9:05pm
Dunno much about rhyme schemes, but I like the sound of this one.
"another eureka tweeked
picked apart, made unique
sit, roll-over and heat-seek
feel me dog? neat"
fav bit, but having wee trouble seeing the whole - that's probably just me.
"another eureka tweeked
picked apart, made unique
sit, roll-over and heat-seek
feel me dog? neat"
fav bit, but having wee trouble seeing the whole - that's probably just me.
29th Apr 2013 9:47pm
thank you atakti...and ain't much your missing in terms of the whole...would make more sense I think to music, don't think it stands up too strong on its own
