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Terrible
Hit,
slapped
Every word is like a new bruise on my body
Yelling,
screaming
Every hit to the face is like another whole in what used to be my heart
Falling,
breaking
My tears fall from my eyes to the ground,
making my world shake beneath my very feet
Defensless,
confused
I'm only comforted by my own hell,
nothing can drag me out
Fading,
dying
My soul is only tattered and torn,
battered and worn
From something that ised to be close,
that I held on my very grip
But it seems that it has finally slipped from my fingers,
and turned it's back on me
Turning my life,
into something terrible
slapped
Every word is like a new bruise on my body
Yelling,
screaming
Every hit to the face is like another whole in what used to be my heart
Falling,
breaking
My tears fall from my eyes to the ground,
making my world shake beneath my very feet
Defensless,
confused
I'm only comforted by my own hell,
nothing can drag me out
Fading,
dying
My soul is only tattered and torn,
battered and worn
From something that ised to be close,
that I held on my very grip
But it seems that it has finally slipped from my fingers,
and turned it's back on me
Turning my life,
into something terrible
Published 5th Oct 2010
| Edited 5th Dec 2010
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5th Oct 2010 11:12pm
6th Oct 2010 6:57am
"Every hit to the face is like another whole in what used to be my heart"
whole should be hole.
That being said, I liked the beginning and I actually stopped to read this one after passing over quite a few. Just in my opinion the end was lacking something..an ending. It felt like you were just cut off before you finished. Other than that, I liked this one.
whole should be hole.
That being said, I liked the beginning and I actually stopped to read this one after passing over quite a few. Just in my opinion the end was lacking something..an ending. It felt like you were just cut off before you finished. Other than that, I liked this one.
