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Polar
The heartbreak as she lies to me
And I know- it is her fire that has scorched
Evenly on flesh. Will she see?
I love her as the sun shines bright.
If it be known, then not shared
For she hates me as I do the night.
Through the pain, I love and love her more,
Being vulnerable to each stinging blow...
Even still, it is she that I adore.
And I know- it is her fire that has scorched
Evenly on flesh. Will she see?
I love her as the sun shines bright.
If it be known, then not shared
For she hates me as I do the night.
Through the pain, I love and love her more,
Being vulnerable to each stinging blow...
Even still, it is she that I adore.
Published 11th Apr 2013
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11th Apr 2013 2:25am
Bipolar? Thats a rough spot, being in that kind of relationship, its the love that makes it hurt so much more. But in the absence of the pain, the love is sweeter. Its a hard choice
On the structure, did you consider spacing it out into three stanzas? I see the rhyme pattern, and was curious why you went with one block? A good read all the same, thank you for posting it.
On the structure, did you consider spacing it out into three stanzas? I see the rhyme pattern, and was curious why you went with one block? A good read all the same, thank you for posting it.
Thank you for your comment. Yes a bad relationship, but one I'd never have choice of. I have considered (separating into stanzas) and even tried, but it seemed to break the flow.
