Re-Write
deadwolf
Forum Posts: 198
Fire of Insight
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Joined 28th Jan 2013Forum Posts: 198
Alright, is a bit of a challenge, as some of this is in Spanish in one of these, I know, don’t ALL hate me hehehe… But, some out there can do it, an much better than me, as I am a bit rusty… o.0
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/94167-death-beckons/
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/123510-house-of-silence-and-misery/
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/120764-fear-of-love/
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/94167-death-beckons/
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/123510-house-of-silence-and-misery/
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/120764-fear-of-love/
Smoogej1s
Taylor
Forum Posts: 267
Taylor
Fire of Insight
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Joined 15th Apr 2011Forum Posts: 267
Thanks for the wonderful submission Darkerhalf!
And.. Thanks for offering up some poems for us Deadwolf.
I don't know how I'm ever going to be able to decide on a winner for this one, Some really wonderful pieces here, thanks to everyone who has participated to far!
And.. Thanks for offering up some poems for us Deadwolf.
I don't know how I'm ever going to be able to decide on a winner for this one, Some really wonderful pieces here, thanks to everyone who has participated to far!
HadesRising
Forum Posts: 1625
Tyrant of Words
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Joined 8th June 2013Forum Posts: 1625
ok, I've decided to rewrite Deadwolf's Death Beckons. I hope I gave it justice, buddy. I give you...
THE REAPER WAITS
I can hear you all
As you struggle for
One more breath.
That, I give to you
As a homecoming gift
For the last breath
Is so much sweeter.
As soon as you're born
You begin to die.
That makes you mine
To do with as I please.
Your time on Earth
Are my good graces.
When the time runs out
You feel hope die,
The face of Death
Leads only to despair.
Skeletal hands
Guides to depression.
There can be nothing,
Oblivion,
Shadows descend,
Upon your deathly shroud.
The Reaper waits
To take you away.
THE REAPER WAITS
I can hear you all
As you struggle for
One more breath.
That, I give to you
As a homecoming gift
For the last breath
Is so much sweeter.
As soon as you're born
You begin to die.
That makes you mine
To do with as I please.
Your time on Earth
Are my good graces.
When the time runs out
You feel hope die,
The face of Death
Leads only to despair.
Skeletal hands
Guides to depression.
There can be nothing,
Oblivion,
Shadows descend,
Upon your deathly shroud.
The Reaper waits
To take you away.
Smoogej1s
Taylor
Forum Posts: 267
Taylor
Fire of Insight
16
Joined 15th Apr 2011Forum Posts: 267
Thanks for the submission Hades! :)
deadwolf
Forum Posts: 198
Fire of Insight
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Joined 28th Jan 2013Forum Posts: 198
Man Hades, you made my song your Bitch, an made it your own man, hehehe... VERY WELL Done my friend, you impressed the hell out o' me man, I give you much respect, you did very well in my eyes... The Reaper,
"As soon as you're born
You begin to die.
That makes you mine
To do with as I please.
Your time on Earth
Are my good graces."
Man, Great words here, I like them very much, its what I hear in my head The Reaper sayin also, an you are right, the Last breath is the sweetest as the first cut is the deepest, Great talent there my friend, writin from the view of the reaper, oh I like that a lot Brother... pen on man, pen on...
"As soon as you're born
You begin to die.
That makes you mine
To do with as I please.
Your time on Earth
Are my good graces."
Man, Great words here, I like them very much, its what I hear in my head The Reaper sayin also, an you are right, the Last breath is the sweetest as the first cut is the deepest, Great talent there my friend, writin from the view of the reaper, oh I like that a lot Brother... pen on man, pen on...
HadesRising
Forum Posts: 1625
Tyrant of Words
34
Joined 8th June 2013Forum Posts: 1625
thank you for giving me the material to work with, brother.
Smoogej1s
Taylor
Forum Posts: 267
Taylor
Fire of Insight
16
Joined 15th Apr 2011Forum Posts: 267
This is going to be absolutely impossible to judge.. so many great entries! Thanks to everyone who entered, I'll have a decision on the winner, and runners-up within the next few days!!
HadesRising
Forum Posts: 1625
Tyrant of Words
34
Joined 8th June 2013Forum Posts: 1625
holy hell, I did not expect to win this. Thank you so much. Congrats Darker and Intricate_B. There was so absolute true gems here (before and after)and I had a blast participating in this comp. Thanks for hosting this Smoogej.
PsychicApocalypse
Darker Half
Forum Posts: 1483
Darker Half
Dangerous Mind
30
Joined 5th Dec 2012 Forum Posts: 1483
Wow!! Congratz HadesRising... I can definitely say that this was your win.
I absolutely loved all your entries.
*patting myself on the back*
Congratz to you as well Intricate_B
I absolutely loved all your entries.
*patting myself on the back*
Congratz to you as well Intricate_B