Upbeat Inspirational Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Happy, positive, motivational and inspirational poetry
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Mess
This house is a bleedin' mess
There's dust everywhere
You really need to address
You are an idle mare
The carpet needs a hoover
The table needs a wipe
You really need to manoeuvre
If you want an easy life
There's food on the hob
It needs a damn good cleaning
You're such a lazy slob
I want to see it gleaming
Stop moaning about your back
Complaining about your knees
I'll only cut some slack
As you're nearly eighty-three!
There's dust everywhere
You really need to address
You are an idle mare
The carpet needs a hoover
The table needs a wipe
You really need to manoeuvre
If you want an easy life
There's food on the hob
It needs a damn good cleaning
You're such a lazy slob
I want to see it gleaming
Stop moaning about your back
Complaining about your knees
I'll only cut some slack
As you're nearly eighty-three!
#funny
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14 Comments
How deep is your love
How deep is your love when it concerns the deepness of your heart, for how deep is your spiritual faith, when it concerns the situations that you had to endure. Were you felt that you were unloved and unappreciated, by just the kindness of your heart when you did something, just because you thought about them in a special way. For how deep is your love, when all you ever really wanted was to be with someone, who has a sense of real commitment and consistency. For sure how deep is your love when you have a sense of what, it means to be able to share your communication skills to articulate....
#friendship
#kindness
#love
#lover
#relationships
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Coyotes
Stormy winds gushing down the signature sips of life;
Even when raindrops were forced to change their directions of downpour;
The son of Sun & Mercury stood aloud & gore.
Like a king he won, like a dog he lost;
His own kingdom defeated him like an enemy;
The son of Sun & Mercury was reborn as Gemini.
Alas with his confidence he build his prudence;
Rejuvenated like a beast bathing in sagacity;
The son of Sun & Mercury swayed the coyotes crazy.
Even when raindrops were forced to change their directions of downpour;
The son of Sun & Mercury stood aloud & gore.
Like a king he won, like a dog he lost;
His own kingdom defeated him like an enemy;
The son of Sun & Mercury was reborn as Gemini.
Alas with his confidence he build his prudence;
Rejuvenated like a beast bathing in sagacity;
The son of Sun & Mercury swayed the coyotes crazy.
#courage
#hope
#motivational
#redemption
#strength
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Pray don't worry
As you go through the process of your trials and tribulations, that you will have to learn to navigate your true spiritual potential, to help you with making your own decisions that will affect, the very foundation of situations that will come with challenges that will sometimes have you doubting thyself. For regardless of what you have to go through will comes with more lessons that we still have to learn. Yet you must have faith in your life's beliefs, cause sometimes we have to give our problems, that we can't solve to give them to Almighty God. For don't worry because God Almighty, will...
#emotions
#hope
#love
#motivational
#strength
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Forgiveness
Forgiveness
Eagerly you build your own bird cage
Accusements, anger and revenge
Are the bars surrounding you
Like in a never-ending loop
You replay hurtful experiences
In front of your inner eye
Forgive!
Forgive freely!
Forgive others!
Forgive yourself!
Your plumage has turned pale
Your song doesn't sound happy anymore
Now is the time to let go of
Resentments, trouble and despair
All the self-destructive feelings
You have carried far too long
Forgive! ...
Eagerly you build your own bird cage
Accusements, anger and revenge
Are the bars surrounding you
Like in a never-ending loop
You replay hurtful experiences
In front of your inner eye
Forgive!
Forgive freely!
Forgive others!
Forgive yourself!
Your plumage has turned pale
Your song doesn't sound happy anymore
Now is the time to let go of
Resentments, trouble and despair
All the self-destructive feelings
You have carried far too long
Forgive! ...
#forgiveness
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2 Comments
Gate of serenity
Come and become relaxed in vibes that will affect the very, foundation of your true spiritual existence. For let's take a silent walk through, the forest of the trees of life. For don't be afraid of learning what is necessary to learn, about thyself as we go deeper than deep into the deepness of your own mind and heart. Yet as you go through the process of just eliminate what we don't want and need, you replaced it with positivity as that is what you want and need to feel, the deepness of the affect that this place has upon you. For just stop and look and listen, not to your heart but listen...
#emotional
#faith
#spiritual
#StreamOfConsciousness
#uplifting
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Abigail
A cardinal song bird
Balanced on a Gail of scales
She is liberated from putting on airs
By getting down to earth
And working with others
To decorate a Greathouse within The Great Work
A rouge a rose to soil her beauty
Only to prick the hand
Who thought it could grasp
That which stems from her ability to thrive
Even uprooted, she still remains
Her Father’s Joy
2-4-2025
Balanced on a Gail of scales
She is liberated from putting on airs
By getting down to earth
And working with others
To decorate a Greathouse within The Great Work
A rouge a rose to soil her beauty
Only to prick the hand
Who thought it could grasp
That which stems from her ability to thrive
Even uprooted, she still remains
Her Father’s Joy
2-4-2025
#sister
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4 Comments
Bathing In The Light
Been watching the story unfold everyday
Rumors spinning chaos into a shockwave
Wealthy cowards who always pay to play
Bankrupting lives from cradle to the grave
Canceled my subscription to blindly obey
Refusing to ignore that monsters do exist
Shallow people with power spread decay
Those bathing in the light choose to resist
Copyright @ Damian DeadLove 2025
Rumors spinning chaos into a shockwave
Wealthy cowards who always pay to play
Bankrupting lives from cradle to the grave
Canceled my subscription to blindly obey
Refusing to ignore that monsters do exist
Shallow people with power spread decay
Those bathing in the light choose to resist
Copyright @ Damian DeadLove 2025
#philosophical
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19 Comments
My Diamond Rock
Do you know what it means to be able to find that someone, who has changed your life around, for the betterment of life itself. For have you ever had that someone, who gets you and really understands, what you had been through most of your entire life. For sure have you ever had someone, who can finish your train and sentences of thoughts word for word. For how many of us who did have the opportunity, to find someone who became a shining example of real, love and support and encouragement. TO be able to share with you a love that is true. But it was you to afraid to face the truth, that...
#confusion
#disappointment
#heartbroken
#kindness
#love
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When you take a stand
Let's be honest with thyself as strong as woman to woman, for we expect a level of respect and have a sense of intelligence, with common sense to articulate with understanding. What I'm saying is I need you to be able to see me, as I am as a woman very strong and intelligent as a person. For sure it's true that I've been down as I've been up since, I had no other choice. For sure I have my faith and beliefs, to help guide me through all that I have, to go through in life. But mostly I have my faith in my GOD ALMIGHTY, to protect me from harm from others and myself and protect me from the...
#dialogue
#hope
#respect
#StreamOfConsciousness
#uplifting
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It's a blessing in disguise
It's a blessing when we can connect on a positive, level of energy and understanding and respect. FOR what we share and have as one love. For it's true, that we all will go through so much sometimes, that it will test our strength and commitment which could either. Make us or break us or just separate us, from the deepness of the truth of our love and hearts. But yet we will find the deepness of being reunited so comfortable, even with the struggles that we have to face in the very depths of the darkness. For sure it's necessary to be able to share our thoughts, and insight and spiritual...
#admiration
#courage
#gratitude
#happiness
#strength
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8 Comments
Jeebus
I'm dead in a ditch.
Jeebus did it because I believed.
He's a soul sucker, on his knees.
Kissing the people's feet.
I wish his fishing boat,
Would stop carrying me.
I'm 'bout to bounce,
And set myself free!
Free like the birds riding the sun,
Not to tomorrow.
I aint no Cinderelli dressed in yelly.
I'm the destroyer!
Leaving you all dead in ditches.
I suck your soul!
I sever heads!
Mindless. Tweeking.
Faith is my meth.
Now let me heal you,
With the...
Jeebus did it because I believed.
He's a soul sucker, on his knees.
Kissing the people's feet.
I wish his fishing boat,
Would stop carrying me.
I'm 'bout to bounce,
And set myself free!
Free like the birds riding the sun,
Not to tomorrow.
I aint no Cinderelli dressed in yelly.
I'm the destroyer!
Leaving you all dead in ditches.
I suck your soul!
I sever heads!
Mindless. Tweeking.
Faith is my meth.
Now let me heal you,
With the...
#funny
#religion
50 reads
4 Comments
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