Fictional Prose Seeking Honest Critique
POEMS AND SHORT STORIES
Short stories and chapters from books and novels
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Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
14th Apr 2024 1:08pm
14th Apr 2024 1:08pm
The Universe
The universe is wide.
With stars,sparkly and bright.
That illuminates the night.
And erases all of our fright.
No matter the length or height.
We always look at it as an incredible sight.
Blue,purple,black.
There isn't anything the universe does lack.
Now,let me loud and clear.
The universe is the reason we are here.
With stars,planets,space.
The galaxies dance in grace.
Like dark,magical lace.
That puts a smile on your face.
With nightlights far away.
In our memory and existence,it does...
With stars,sparkly and bright.
That illuminates the night.
And erases all of our fright.
No matter the length or height.
We always look at it as an incredible sight.
Blue,purple,black.
There isn't anything the universe does lack.
Now,let me loud and clear.
The universe is the reason we are here.
With stars,planets,space.
The galaxies dance in grace.
Like dark,magical lace.
That puts a smile on your face.
With nightlights far away.
In our memory and existence,it does...
#hope
#universe
#uplifting #astronomy
#uplifting #astronomy
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Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
11th Apr 2024 2:28pm
11th Apr 2024 2:28pm
Flowers Of Emotions
One time,on a warm day.
You were bored,the sun went away.
You did not expect.
But you walk into a cemetery to inspect.
The cemetery was dark and grim.
And the clouds,paper thin.
Tombstones and graves astray.
But something was glowing in the pathway.
It was a flower patch.
As color began to hatch.
One flower was dark and blue.
It shined brightly in the storm.
And its petals were thorn.
With a sense of sadness.
You wondered,what happened to its petals?
The madness it went through.
The...
You were bored,the sun went away.
You did not expect.
But you walk into a cemetery to inspect.
The cemetery was dark and grim.
And the clouds,paper thin.
Tombstones and graves astray.
But something was glowing in the pathway.
It was a flower patch.
As color began to hatch.
One flower was dark and blue.
It shined brightly in the storm.
And its petals were thorn.
With a sense of sadness.
You wondered,what happened to its petals?
The madness it went through.
The...
#motivational
#flowers
#uplifting
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Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
8th Apr 2024 12:54pm
8th Apr 2024 12:54pm
The Moonlight's Way
It was a long,tiring day.
You just wanted to go in nature.
Relax,and let the calmness take you away.
As you walked down the path,surrounded by trees.
It began to get dark.
And dogs began to bark.
Suddenly,moonlight appeared in grace.
It gently covered the ground and your face.
As it performed in the skies.
And shines upon the pathways.
You see where childhood lies.
When you were little,not very far away.
You used to lay here and watch it play.
As it performed on the dark skies.
And sweetens the...
You just wanted to go in nature.
Relax,and let the calmness take you away.
As you walked down the path,surrounded by trees.
It began to get dark.
And dogs began to bark.
Suddenly,moonlight appeared in grace.
It gently covered the ground and your face.
As it performed in the skies.
And shines upon the pathways.
You see where childhood lies.
When you were little,not very far away.
You used to lay here and watch it play.
As it performed on the dark skies.
And sweetens the...
#hope
#motivational
#moon
#nature
#uplifting
46 reads
2 Comments
Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
8th Apr 2024 00:54am
8th Apr 2024 00:54am
Inter-Planet Janet and the Alien Doomsday Device
#forgiveness
#childhood
#sex
#aliens
#scifi
30 reads
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nutbuster
D C
D C
Poem Published
4th Apr 2024 10:45pm
4th Apr 2024 10:45pm
Welcome to the Party Chapter 17
#lust
#dreams
#passion #manipulation
#passion #manipulation
31 reads
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Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
31st Mar 2024 10:19am
31st Mar 2024 10:19am
Ballad Of The Moon
I hear the moon singing a tune.
All very soon,in my head.
In my thoughts,in my bed.
I shined brightly with the light of the sun.
Warm and cozy.
As the moon sang her song.
The moon will sing for me.
She will glow brightly.
And set us free.
She loves us,just like the sun.
Orange,yellow in the night.
An eternal nightlight.
Shiny,bright moonlight.
And all it takes is a full moon.
To feel the bliss,happy,hopeful.
And you feel swoon.
I hear the moon singing a song.
And...
All very soon,in my head.
In my thoughts,in my bed.
I shined brightly with the light of the sun.
Warm and cozy.
As the moon sang her song.
The moon will sing for me.
She will glow brightly.
And set us free.
She loves us,just like the sun.
Orange,yellow in the night.
An eternal nightlight.
Shiny,bright moonlight.
And all it takes is a full moon.
To feel the bliss,happy,hopeful.
And you feel swoon.
I hear the moon singing a song.
And...
#moon
#night
#nature
55 reads
2 Comments
nutbuster
D C
D C
Poem Published
30th Mar 2024 5:27pm
30th Mar 2024 5:27pm
Welcome to the Party Chapter 11
#lust
#dreams
#passion #manipulation
#passion #manipulation
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2 Comments
Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
30th Mar 2024 12:16pm
30th Mar 2024 12:16pm
House Of Nostalgia
You were lost in the deep,dark forest.
Trying to find the way back home fast.
And all hope was slowly lost.
Suddenly,it began to rain.
And you hear the wind whisper your name.
You look for shelter,there you see.
A haunted house,empty,avaible for thee.
You take a closer look.
Few steps closer ,you began to look.
With its old,broken windows.
Creaking,open doors.
Old,red carpet.
And fancy,wooden floors.
And empty,luxurious halls.
It looked really old, a century or two.
And it's said to have...
Trying to find the way back home fast.
And all hope was slowly lost.
Suddenly,it began to rain.
And you hear the wind whisper your name.
You look for shelter,there you see.
A haunted house,empty,avaible for thee.
You take a closer look.
Few steps closer ,you began to look.
With its old,broken windows.
Creaking,open doors.
Old,red carpet.
And fancy,wooden floors.
And empty,luxurious halls.
It looked really old, a century or two.
And it's said to have...
#uplifting
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1 Comment
Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
29th Mar 2024 12:52pm
29th Mar 2024 12:52pm
Sunset
It was a warm sunny day.
Birds were chirping,negative emotions are astray.
The sound of the kids playing in the local park.
Untill the sky starts to get dark.
The way it paints the sky as a canvas.
And dogs begin to bark.
The way the stars sparkle once it gets dark.
Before that,mother nature paints her way.
Red,orange,yellow.
Using her paintbrush with no delay.
The blue starts to go away.
In this warm summer day.
She uses her paintbrush.
Pink,orange,brown.
And the sight erases your frown.
...
Birds were chirping,negative emotions are astray.
The sound of the kids playing in the local park.
Untill the sky starts to get dark.
The way it paints the sky as a canvas.
And dogs begin to bark.
The way the stars sparkle once it gets dark.
Before that,mother nature paints her way.
Red,orange,yellow.
Using her paintbrush with no delay.
The blue starts to go away.
In this warm summer day.
She uses her paintbrush.
Pink,orange,brown.
And the sight erases your frown.
...
#nature
#uplifting
#dawn
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Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
27th Mar 2024 1:02pm
27th Mar 2024 1:02pm
The Secret Garden
I remember the day we met at the garden.
He reached out his hand and said he loved me.
He found my garden sweet.
Flowers were growing.
Still,I kept my head up,I could not accept defeat.
He said, ""Oh Mary,contrary,how does your garden grow?""
But I did not know how to reply,nor keep up with the flow.
I remember when we met at the secret garden.
Flowers were growing on my face.
On my skin,like colorful lace.
Despite it,our lives went on a normal pace.
One day,he asked me again...
Oh...
He reached out his hand and said he loved me.
He found my garden sweet.
Flowers were growing.
Still,I kept my head up,I could not accept defeat.
He said, ""Oh Mary,contrary,how does your garden grow?""
But I did not know how to reply,nor keep up with the flow.
I remember when we met at the secret garden.
Flowers were growing on my face.
On my skin,like colorful lace.
Despite it,our lives went on a normal pace.
One day,he asked me again...
Oh...
#hope
#dark
48 reads
1 Comment
Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
26th Mar 2024 8:19pm
26th Mar 2024 8:19pm
Damned through Love
#children
#sex
#family
#corruption
#ForbiddenLove
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Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
25th Mar 2024 10:55am
25th Mar 2024 10:55am
Mermaid Fantasy
You were swimming in the sea.
Down in the ocean,deep sea.
You swimmed past fish of all kinds.
And creatures with all sorts of minds.
The colors they produce,all the shapes.
Different patterns on ocean snakes.
And the way they glowed at the very bottom.
Like nightlights deep in the sea.
And you wonder,who do I want to be?
Where do I want to be?
Suddenly,you see a girl in scales.
Long dark hair,blue eyes.
With a fish tail,surrounded by whales.
They seemed like old friends.
Chattering in the ocean,...
Down in the ocean,deep sea.
You swimmed past fish of all kinds.
And creatures with all sorts of minds.
The colors they produce,all the shapes.
Different patterns on ocean snakes.
And the way they glowed at the very bottom.
Like nightlights deep in the sea.
And you wonder,who do I want to be?
Where do I want to be?
Suddenly,you see a girl in scales.
Long dark hair,blue eyes.
With a fish tail,surrounded by whales.
They seemed like old friends.
Chattering in the ocean,...
#sea
#water
#nature #uplifting
#nature #uplifting
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