Poems About War Seeking Honest Critique
#war
Poems about war seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
War is Hell, Hell is War!
In the grip of winter
Impending dread
The opposing army seized their home
Family fought them hard and with honor
Critical madness
All of his family slaughtered
Disemboweled
Stillborn removed
Torched
Charred remains
He was the last survivor
Barely endured the massacre
Ridden with disease
Severed survival
Gasping for air
On life support
A vacant coffin awaits
Retribution for the dead
Impending dread
The opposing army seized their home
Family fought them hard and with honor
Critical madness
All of his family slaughtered
Disemboweled
Stillborn removed
Torched
Charred remains
He was the last survivor
Barely endured the massacre
Ridden with disease
Severed survival
Gasping for air
On life support
A vacant coffin awaits
Retribution for the dead
#dark
#violence
#war
#death
#revenge
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5 Comments
Space Race War
this isn't a race war alone, it's a space race war
some of the most intelligent beings are held captive
in their defense, how do you fight what you can't see?
when no relief is given
when everything you have
you had to take
I eat like a barbarian
I know what it's like to starve
sometimes I buckle under the weight of the classes
tag teamed and born in a pit, still I get up
sorrow is rich off us
knowledge is gold
I'm not in the sharing mood, however
I've burned with it on my tongue before
I had...
some of the most intelligent beings are held captive
in their defense, how do you fight what you can't see?
when no relief is given
when everything you have
you had to take
I eat like a barbarian
I know what it's like to starve
sometimes I buckle under the weight of the classes
tag teamed and born in a pit, still I get up
sorrow is rich off us
knowledge is gold
I'm not in the sharing mood, however
I've burned with it on my tongue before
I had...
#war
#universe
#angels
65 reads
5 Comments
A New Beginning
Unwind the clock
the world's on fire
passing the time with song
humming happy thoughts
strawberries mean love
rainy day
wash the hate away
birds in my tree
sing a song
mushroom clouds dissipate
a new beginning
the world's on fire
passing the time with song
humming happy thoughts
strawberries mean love
rainy day
wash the hate away
birds in my tree
sing a song
mushroom clouds dissipate
a new beginning
#happiness
#hope
#war
#nature
#uplifting
71 reads
9 Comments
Military Madness
Look into my eyes
I’m a human guinea pig
Born to be controlled
Forced into experimentation
I have no name
No words that mean anything
A little each day,
Psycho & possessed into a state
War inside my head
I can feel the pain
Can you?
I’m a human guinea pig
Born to be controlled
Forced into experimentation
I have no name
No words that mean anything
A little each day,
Psycho & possessed into a state
War inside my head
I can feel the pain
Can you?
#loneliness
#soldiers
#war
#MentalHealth
#military
58 reads
7 Comments
The Calamity of Misfortune
The longest year,
sheds new light,
into the shade
onward into battle
the demigods inherit,
the new night,
into the light
forsake the liberation
promising to all
an ambush of deceit
sheds new light,
into the shade
onward into battle
the demigods inherit,
the new night,
into the light
forsake the liberation
promising to all
an ambush of deceit
#lies
#betrayal
#war
#manipulation
#deception
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8 Comments
Triumph
My sibling had a journey through pressure
in the sear of July
increased tensions,
following a deliberation
rusted and decayed out leaders
they sang the song of the death dirge
we can all now rest in peace
in the sear of July
increased tensions,
following a deliberation
rusted and decayed out leaders
they sang the song of the death dirge
we can all now rest in peace
#corruption
#politics
#war
#peace
#success
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4 Comments
Please Stay
stay
don’t let
recruiters prey
stay
don’t heed
liars on grandstands
stay
don’t be lured
by empty promises
stay
don’t toil
for distant oil
stay
don’t join
mercenary bands
stay
don’t go
to foreign lands
stay
your tribe
needs strong hands
stay
don’t leave our blood
on foreign sands
© 2024 Raibeart Bruis
don’t let
recruiters prey
stay
don’t heed
liars on grandstands
stay
don’t be lured
by empty promises
stay
don’t toil
for distant oil
stay
don’t join
mercenary bands
stay
don’t go
to foreign lands
stay
your tribe
needs strong hands
stay
don’t leave our blood
on foreign sands
© 2024 Raibeart Bruis
#love
#politics
#war #son
#war #son
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2 Comments
and rachael for her children cry
Mankind must put an end to war, or war will put an end
to man…”― John F. Kennedy
the fiercely barking hand grenades
and other weapons wars have made
are never idle in the hands
of those who set out to invade
the sanctity of sovereign lands.
the military muscle might
of killers who paint red the night
flex in the face of helpless souls
who yield to blood their last...
to man…”― John F. Kennedy
the fiercely barking hand grenades
and other weapons wars have made
are never idle in the hands
of those who set out to invade
the sanctity of sovereign lands.
the military muscle might
of killers who paint red the night
flex in the face of helpless souls
who yield to blood their last...
#hate
#children
#conflict
#war
#food
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Exercise Tiger
April 28, 1944
Devon, England
It was only a planned rehearsal
or so it was meant to be
taking place on the beach
of Slapton Sands, Devon
for the invasion of Normandy.
But coordination and communication
don’t always go as planned,
resulting in not only friendly-fire injuries
but the death of 749 American servicemen
by e-boats of Nazi Germany.
April 28, 1969
Devon, England
I was only ten-years-old
the first...
Devon, England
It was only a planned rehearsal
or so it was meant to be
taking place on the beach
of Slapton Sands, Devon
for the invasion of Normandy.
But coordination and communication
don’t always go as planned,
resulting in not only friendly-fire injuries
but the death of 749 American servicemen
by e-boats of Nazi Germany.
April 28, 1969
Devon, England
I was only ten-years-old
the first...
#war
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26 Comments
The Greatest Generation
All those lives
All those lives
tossed into turmoil
When there was a rise in tyranny
and crimes against humanity
Many answered the call to fight for justice
Men were sent off to war
Women went off to work
All those lives
All they sacrificed
When I think of 1944
I think of the world being at war
Innocent lives being taken away
Innocent people being displaced
I think of all those young men being in faraway lands
not knowing if they would come home
I think of the mothers who...
All those lives
tossed into turmoil
When there was a rise in tyranny
and crimes against humanity
Many answered the call to fight for justice
Men were sent off to war
Women went off to work
All those lives
All they sacrificed
When I think of 1944
I think of the world being at war
Innocent lives being taken away
Innocent people being displaced
I think of all those young men being in faraway lands
not knowing if they would come home
I think of the mothers who...
#war
#inspirational
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4 Comments
Sniper Files #2 The Ukrainian Leader’s Daughter
Sometimes the weight of warring nations requires soldiers to strip human beings of their spiritual underpinnings. All that makes them mysterious, particular, and beautiful must be peeled away so that killing can be done.
Olena was a Ukrainian leader’s daughter. My task was to satisfy a great debt to our Russian Army for the deaths of my comrades. Olena was born in 2004. Her 19 years have been rich, filled with the love of family and now the love of her future husband.
Part of our surveillance included the gathering of papers related to her school years. I found a letter...
Olena was a Ukrainian leader’s daughter. My task was to satisfy a great debt to our Russian Army for the deaths of my comrades. Olena was born in 2004. Her 19 years have been rich, filled with the love of family and now the love of her future husband.
Part of our surveillance included the gathering of papers related to her school years. I found a letter...
#regret
#murder
#war
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Through the Looking Glass: A Cry for Change
Once, I dreamt of grander plans,
A vision of a land enhanced.
Words as my wand, the world to enchant,
"Alice," I'd ask, "what realms do you grant?"
But open the news, a stark looking glass,
Echoes of my existence, they seek to surpass.
A world grinding down, crushing so deep,
Where starving souls and penthouses keep.
Great plans I held in hand, now astray,
Born to a century, twisted and frayed.
Metaphors my refuge, my solace in the fight,
A song overplayed, now lost to the night.
...
A vision of a land enhanced.
Words as my wand, the world to enchant,
"Alice," I'd ask, "what realms do you grant?"
But open the news, a stark looking glass,
Echoes of my existence, they seek to surpass.
A world grinding down, crushing so deep,
Where starving souls and penthouses keep.
Great plans I held in hand, now astray,
Born to a century, twisted and frayed.
Metaphors my refuge, my solace in the fight,
A song overplayed, now lost to the night.
...
#war
#mirror
#greed
#hypocrisy
#emotional
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