Poems About Suffering Seeking Honest Critique
#suffering
Poems about suffering seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Equivalency
Everything bears a cost,
Not merely a price to be tossed.
For every gain we seek to host,
Something else must be lost.
To earn the coin, we toil,
Sweat upon the soil.
For respect to be our lot,
We must act in ways that are not forgot.
To hold goods within our grasp,
We part with coins that clasp.
When gains are made, yet nothing's spent,
The scale tips – it's not what nature meant.
For each thing gained without a toll,
Disrupts the balance of the whole.
We must reckon with the cost,
For nothing comes...
Not merely a price to be tossed.
For every gain we seek to host,
Something else must be lost.
To earn the coin, we toil,
Sweat upon the soil.
For respect to be our lot,
We must act in ways that are not forgot.
To hold goods within our grasp,
We part with coins that clasp.
When gains are made, yet nothing's spent,
The scale tips – it's not what nature meant.
For each thing gained without a toll,
Disrupts the balance of the whole.
We must reckon with the cost,
For nothing comes...
#TruthOfLife
#suffering
#emotional
#sacrifice
#choices
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Dirk's change
#lust
#romantic
#BDSM
#vampires
#suffering
63 reads
5 Comments
Sea of voices (the unhuddled masses)
A thousand faces, each with a story
most will fade into the void, without glory
the cry of pain and troubles go unseen
by so many as we power the machine
churning out so much, no time to stop
and possibly see each and every teardrop
because despite our differences
we are brothers and sisters with significance
but as we are pushed and prodded
to pursue more, become applauded
we fail to maintain our candle
burning deep in our heart's mantle
until we realized far too late,
the flame is gone and death is our date
most will fade into the void, without glory
the cry of pain and troubles go unseen
by so many as we power the machine
churning out so much, no time to stop
and possibly see each and every teardrop
because despite our differences
we are brothers and sisters with significance
but as we are pushed and prodded
to pursue more, become applauded
we fail to maintain our candle
burning deep in our heart's mantle
until we realized far too late,
the flame is gone and death is our date
#love
#kindness
#humankind #suffering
#humankind #suffering
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Kino Hospital
Been in psych before,
but Kino’s the worst,
Don’t know how people are supposed to get better
in a place like this,
The air is stale,
no open windows,
no fan, no fresh water
Man, stay calm,
I gotta breath
fresh clean air, I thirst…
Nurses & orderlies on power trips
they do not try, no,
No help or relief comin from them,
No private shower,
you use the public shower,
Where you walk in barefoot
with the shit stains on the shower floor & wall,
no warm water, just ice cold water,
that stays on for 15...
but Kino’s the worst,
Don’t know how people are supposed to get better
in a place like this,
The air is stale,
no open windows,
no fan, no fresh water
Man, stay calm,
I gotta breath
fresh clean air, I thirst…
Nurses & orderlies on power trips
they do not try, no,
No help or relief comin from them,
No private shower,
you use the public shower,
Where you walk in barefoot
with the shit stains on the shower floor & wall,
no warm water, just ice cold water,
that stays on for 15...
#dark
#gothic
#narrative
#TruthOfLife
#suffering
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3 Comments
Timeless Fall
Regret follows my every breath
Exhales of waste littered at the front gate
My air releases the ignition of hell
Running through wildfire bandits
Freedom awaits the burned soul
I’m not worth stealing for the devil
Time feels unrefined
Seconds and days blur all the same
Melted eyes have sights set on the clock
Unable to reach out
Restrained by its endless tic toc
Concealed anger waits to self destruct
This rage full bomb grows impatient
Ready to detonate all moments played
Time is now...
Exhales of waste littered at the front gate
My air releases the ignition of hell
Running through wildfire bandits
Freedom awaits the burned soul
I’m not worth stealing for the devil
Time feels unrefined
Seconds and days blur all the same
Melted eyes have sights set on the clock
Unable to reach out
Restrained by its endless tic toc
Concealed anger waits to self destruct
This rage full bomb grows impatient
Ready to detonate all moments played
Time is now...
#dark
#hell
#suffering #emptiness
#suffering #emptiness
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1 Comment
What Happens When One Does Not Call A Professional
Carolyn saw Michelle totally naked.
Richard tried to fix the air conditioner.
But instead, it got worse.
Richard tried to fix the air conditioner.
But instead, it got worse.
#home
#fiction
#ignorance
#suffering
#sensual
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Rise and Shine
Rise and shine
My least favorite line
Get out of bed
I’ll drag it with
Heavy wrinkles indent
Meld with mesh
Create a sludgy mess
I couldn’t bother to clean
Get up!
I’m dead
Wake up!
Not again
They remind everyday
A roll of flesh
A dreaded existence lays
Between folded pages of cloth
Inked blood pours time
Wasted yet remained a stain
A reminder
I know.
They sprinkling salt
In corners of this dump
Wont keep witches
From tossing trash...
My least favorite line
Get out of bed
I’ll drag it with
Heavy wrinkles indent
Meld with mesh
Create a sludgy mess
I couldn’t bother to clean
Get up!
I’m dead
Wake up!
Not again
They remind everyday
A roll of flesh
A dreaded existence lays
Between folded pages of cloth
Inked blood pours time
Wasted yet remained a stain
A reminder
I know.
They sprinkling salt
In corners of this dump
Wont keep witches
From tossing trash...
#depression
#suffering
#disappointment #boredom
#disappointment #boredom
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2 Comments
A Battle of Faith
It's me again
I touched myself in way I'm not supposed to,
I turned to porn even when I promised I won't do.
Now I feel too guilty to even approach you
I know this is not serving me
I know this not safe for me
The pleasure can't compare to the joy and peace it takes from me.
I hate it, and I hate it more than my fresh love it, feels like a warm hug but it is a bear hug and it is breaking me.
In the depths of my soul, a battle rages on,
A constant struggle, a fight that's never won.
I vowed to walk the righteous path, to never...
I touched myself in way I'm not supposed to,
I turned to porn even when I promised I won't do.
Now I feel too guilty to even approach you
I know this is not serving me
I know this not safe for me
The pleasure can't compare to the joy and peace it takes from me.
I hate it, and I hate it more than my fresh love it, feels like a warm hug but it is a bear hug and it is breaking me.
In the depths of my soul, a battle rages on,
A constant struggle, a fight that's never won.
I vowed to walk the righteous path, to never...
#FeelingLost
#suffering
#emptiness
#FeelingTrapped
#temptation
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2 Comments
The beginning
#lust
#BDSM
#vampires
#suffering
#hurt
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0 Comments
A Hapless Occurence
Who is that knocking at my window
Not real sure
Please don't come in
You can use the front door
Your unappealing
A threat to me
Please don't come near
Let's have a cup of tea
Stay away
How many more times
Please don't come around
Hating you is such a crime
Don't threaten my life
Put away the gun
Please don't approach me
You & I always had such fun
You fatally shot me
Down to one more breath
Please come closer
I'll avoid you through death
Not real sure
Please don't come in
You can use the front door
Your unappealing
A threat to me
Please don't come near
Let's have a cup of tea
Stay away
How many more times
Please don't come around
Hating you is such a crime
Don't threaten my life
Put away the gun
Please don't approach me
You & I always had such fun
You fatally shot me
Down to one more breath
Please come closer
I'll avoid you through death
#abuse
#suffering
#FeelingTrapped
#temptation
#fear
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The Curator
I curate death for the living
in a mausoleum of hope
I am a nurse - clandestine
I am despondency with a smile
I've broken more ribs than I've fixed
like twigs snapping in your hands,
my palms crunch bones
like snow beneath your feet
the dead and I wear the same expression
under a white shroud
our emotions lie buried
beneath the surface
hidden behind layers of minerals
and foundation
I embalm my mind for self preservation
vignettes plaster the rooms
clinging to the walls
proxy living through the past ...
in a mausoleum of hope
I am a nurse - clandestine
I am despondency with a smile
I've broken more ribs than I've fixed
like twigs snapping in your hands,
my palms crunch bones
like snow beneath your feet
the dead and I wear the same expression
under a white shroud
our emotions lie buried
beneath the surface
hidden behind layers of minerals
and foundation
I embalm my mind for self preservation
vignettes plaster the rooms
clinging to the walls
proxy living through the past ...
#death
#silence
#TruthOfLife
#suffering
#emptiness
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5 Comments
Paper Hearts
Paper hearts with broken wings
caged in dark, sight unseen
angels shot out of the sky
Paper trails with white washed faces
secret letters to hidden basements
tiny voices left to die
Paper cuts with rainbow bruises
wounds that crust, blood that oozes
no one left to hear their cries
Paper hearts take flight in dark
with silenced dreams on broken wings
some set free to fly
caged in dark, sight unseen
angels shot out of the sky
Paper trails with white washed faces
secret letters to hidden basements
tiny voices left to die
Paper cuts with rainbow bruises
wounds that crust, blood that oozes
no one left to hear their cries
Paper hearts take flight in dark
with silenced dreams on broken wings
some set free to fly
#children
#suffering
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DU Poetry : Poems About Suffering Seeking Honest Critique