Poems About Stars Seeking Honest Critique
#stars
wallyroo92
Poem Published
Yesterday 9:19pm
Yesterday 9:19pm
Hemet
I remember it was early in the winter of ‘89
My family was attending a church retreat
Somewhere in the California desert
Somewhere in those hills
In those days
Hemet was very much a desert town
The second night I was there
I remember some of us went out to the campfire
It was cold
But in the desert
Away from all the light pollution
The sky was lit up with all kinds of stars
And at fourteen
Impressionable by faith
I felt that something bigger than me was out there
That something had painted that canvass in the...
My family was attending a church retreat
Somewhere in the California desert
Somewhere in those hills
In those days
Hemet was very much a desert town
The second night I was there
I remember some of us went out to the campfire
It was cold
But in the desert
Away from all the light pollution
The sky was lit up with all kinds of stars
And at fourteen
Impressionable by faith
I felt that something bigger than me was out there
That something had painted that canvass in the...
#faith
#stars
#universe #WritingPoetry
#universe #WritingPoetry
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InDreamz
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:51pm
Yesterday 6:51pm
The Coronation
a caravan of stars
lit up the sky,
placid blue heavens
veiled with soft moon sighs...
the June midnight
seemed a jubilant celebration,
for the dark enchantress-
the mysterious night...
a coronation by the cosmos
for the black beauty
to be the queen of earth
so she could grow in her supremacy;
with each passing day
the night would be longer to stay...
those shimmering stellar gypsies
in hues of gold, red and blue
dazzling the ether
with their joyous laughter,...
lit up the sky,
placid blue heavens
veiled with soft moon sighs...
the June midnight
seemed a jubilant celebration,
for the dark enchantress-
the mysterious night...
a coronation by the cosmos
for the black beauty
to be the queen of earth
so she could grow in her supremacy;
with each passing day
the night would be longer to stay...
those shimmering stellar gypsies
in hues of gold, red and blue
dazzling the ether
with their joyous laughter,...
#moon
#night
#stars
#summer
#universe
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4 Comments
InDreamz
Poem Published
3rd Apr 2025 5:19pm
3rd Apr 2025 5:19pm
My k(night)
in the depth of my loneliness,
in the shadow of solitude,
i often muse
...of someone coming from
across the sky
on a shooting star
from a distant planet;
a man: beautiful,
sweet and shy,
kindness glowing
on his face
with deep dark eyes
for me to gaze
into our eternity,
to be lost forever
in the haze of serenity,
away from my miseries
away from my pain
where there is no loss...no gain...
transcending space and time
he carries me...
in the shadow of solitude,
i often muse
...of someone coming from
across the sky
on a shooting star
from a distant planet;
a man: beautiful,
sweet and shy,
kindness glowing
on his face
with deep dark eyes
for me to gaze
into our eternity,
to be lost forever
in the haze of serenity,
away from my miseries
away from my pain
where there is no loss...no gain...
transcending space and time
he carries me...
#dreams
#love
#stars
#unicorns
#universe
63 reads
6 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
3rd Apr 2025 6:37am
3rd Apr 2025 6:37am
Castor and Pollux
Duality
Brotherhood
Protection…
And so it was that the twins
In their mother’s womb
One of a mortal father, the other of a divine
Came to have a special connection
Years later
When Castor, the mortal son was killed in battle
His brother Pollux asked his father Zeus to let them stay together
And Zeus, moved by his son’s request
Gave them an eternal bond
Placed them together in the northern sky
In the constellation known as
Gemini
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Brotherhood
Protection…
And so it was that the twins
In their mother’s womb
One of a mortal father, the other of a divine
Came to have a special connection
Years later
When Castor, the mortal son was killed in battle
His brother Pollux asked his father Zeus to let them stay together
And Zeus, moved by his son’s request
Gave them an eternal bond
Placed them together in the northern sky
In the constellation known as
Gemini
57 Unique Words
77 Total
#brother
#love
#stars #universe
#stars #universe
54 reads
2 Comments
InDreamz
Poem Published
2nd Apr 2025 3:26pm
2nd Apr 2025 3:26pm
The Hunter
When the universe was spawned
multitude of stars were formed,
a hunter was born
majestic and strong!
To protect from the dark energy
the stars worked in perfect synergy,
creating a distinctive pattern
of pretty stellar bluish lanterns.
Brightening up the cold winter sky
poised between Taurus and Gemini,
holding in hands a club and a shield
Warrior of God in the cosmic field.
Forged with nebula and fire
standing tall in hunter's attire,
Orion, O' the king of constellations-
totem of...
multitude of stars were formed,
a hunter was born
majestic and strong!
To protect from the dark energy
the stars worked in perfect synergy,
creating a distinctive pattern
of pretty stellar bluish lanterns.
Brightening up the cold winter sky
poised between Taurus and Gemini,
holding in hands a club and a shield
Warrior of God in the cosmic field.
Forged with nebula and fire
standing tall in hunter's attire,
Orion, O' the king of constellations-
totem of...
#stars
#universe
69 reads
6 Comments
InDreamz
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 2:32pm
1st Apr 2025 2:32pm
Sepia tone
I remember our love
in sepia tone
Rustic and raw pictures
of our beautiful memories
playing in my mind.
The rugged and worn off edges
of photos of our togetherness
...of moments timeless,
as if a continuum-
beginning from infinity
when stars blossomed into life;
a phantasmagoria of
smiles and tears
rainbows and rain,
ebbing and flowing
with the passage of time
like a dream within a dream
embedded in my soul...
Though you aren't here
your absence can't consume me
...this...
in sepia tone
Rustic and raw pictures
of our beautiful memories
playing in my mind.
The rugged and worn off edges
of photos of our togetherness
...of moments timeless,
as if a continuum-
beginning from infinity
when stars blossomed into life;
a phantasmagoria of
smiles and tears
rainbows and rain,
ebbing and flowing
with the passage of time
like a dream within a dream
embedded in my soul...
Though you aren't here
your absence can't consume me
...this...
#death
#hope
#love
#memories
#stars
92 reads
9 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
26th Mar 2025 10:02pm
26th Mar 2025 10:02pm
hiccup
gleaning from fact and fiction
with visions of past events
Sacred art is understanding
wealth of knowledge is what I crave
Putting away earthly things
The dark appears, and I look in
It is all around us
my star records are in the heavens
memories locked in code
lest they be discovered
Mortal touch is disavowed
divinity in the flesh is graced
within the numerals is the key
a bit of math, and the information comes pouring in
past happenings and the future in collision with time
There is no fate...
with visions of past events
Sacred art is understanding
wealth of knowledge is what I crave
Putting away earthly things
The dark appears, and I look in
It is all around us
my star records are in the heavens
memories locked in code
lest they be discovered
Mortal touch is disavowed
divinity in the flesh is graced
within the numerals is the key
a bit of math, and the information comes pouring in
past happenings and the future in collision with time
There is no fate...
#humankind
#spiritual
#stars
67 reads
4 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
13th Mar 2025 11:34pm
13th Mar 2025 11:34pm
Here I am as I am a woman
Here I am as I am a woman sitting here in the afternoon sun, of the mother land, yet it's here and now. I admire this tree of life. Tall looking like a badge of honor, standing under the sun, as it's light creating a image, of the bonsai tree of life with love, and happiness and dreams. For sure as I look forward beyond the tree of Life. I can feel it's power reaching into me, so spiritually touching the deepness of my heart ❤️ YET I feel so alive here and now in this space without time, as I am in twin with it's deepness of this subject matter that is called living life. ...
#evolution
#moon
#stars
#sun
#universe
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Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
9th Jan 2025 1:20pm
9th Jan 2025 1:20pm
Amongst the tree of life
Would you like to take a walk through the trees of life, for let's sit here as the morning mist rest upon the very, texture of our skin as it fills us with natures aviance of it's beauty. THAT grows far and beyond our own imagination as we are just running through and out the forest. For it's here in the morning of the dawn of transition, that we have been given a chance to enjoy this time of deep meditation, away from the negativity and drama and confusion and chaos of the world. 🌎 THAT we shall see the eclipse of the truth of the chaos, that has gone through society 😭 as it...
#evolution
#moon
#stars
#sun
#universe
101 reads
1 Comment
Heisenberg68
Poem Published
3rd Jan 2025 00:52am
3rd Jan 2025 00:52am
Covenant of the Stars (A Poem for Progress)
Journey to the Stars
We stand at the edge of a dream,
A whisper carried on the winds of time,
From ancient sands where Abraham walked,
A covenant made beneath endless skies.
He set forth, not knowing the road,
A man with faith as his only map.
He left the known for the promise of more,
A seed of hope in the soil of the vast unknown.
And now, we too are called,
Not to one land, but to all the heavens.
To chart the stars and claim the void,
To carry life where silence reigns.
But the road is hard, the...
We stand at the edge of a dream,
A whisper carried on the winds of time,
From ancient sands where Abraham walked,
A covenant made beneath endless skies.
He set forth, not knowing the road,
A man with faith as his only map.
He left the known for the promise of more,
A seed of hope in the soil of the vast unknown.
And now, we too are called,
Not to one land, but to all the heavens.
To chart the stars and claim the void,
To carry life where silence reigns.
But the road is hard, the...
#LifeGoals
#stars
#travel #universe
#travel #universe
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CircleDanceSquared
AlyssaJane96
AlyssaJane96
Poem Published
5th Dec 2024 8:28pm
5th Dec 2024 8:28pm
The Lovers
What a cruel thing
To separate two lovers
So deeply intertwined and tangled
In each other
Not with surgeons hands
With precision to save a life
They hacked away with chainsaws
Cleavers, butchers knives
Now both of them are bleeding
Harsh wounds are hard to sooth
A love that once gave meaning
Now rots under the moon
Let’s be gentle with our lovers
They came from the same star
We’ve come too far to hate them
And destroy without regard
To separate two lovers
So deeply intertwined and tangled
In each other
Not with surgeons hands
With precision to save a life
They hacked away with chainsaws
Cleavers, butchers knives
Now both of them are bleeding
Harsh wounds are hard to sooth
A love that once gave meaning
Now rots under the moon
Let’s be gentle with our lovers
They came from the same star
We’ve come too far to hate them
And destroy without regard
#hurt
#love
#lover
#stars
#universe
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poeticdelight
Hamid
Hamid
Poem Published
26th Nov 2024 5:28pm
26th Nov 2024 5:28pm
Venus
The Shepherd's Hour
The moon is red on misty horizon
Within a dancing fog, and the plains
In vapor dozing, the frog complains
Among the reeds, where chill has arisen
***
Water flowers have closed their petals
In distance far, poplars show profile
Straight and tight their ghosts unseen awhile
And between the bush, glowworms shuttle
**
The owls now awake, noiseless take flight
Rowing the black air with heavy wings
The zenith full, a fainting glow blinks
White, Venus emerges, it is Night *
...
The moon is red on misty horizon
Within a dancing fog, and the plains
In vapor dozing, the frog complains
Among the reeds, where chill has arisen
***
Water flowers have closed their petals
In distance far, poplars show profile
Straight and tight their ghosts unseen awhile
And between the bush, glowworms shuttle
**
The owls now awake, noiseless take flight
Rowing the black air with heavy wings
The zenith full, a fainting glow blinks
White, Venus emerges, it is Night *
...
#nature
#sky
#stars #universe
#stars #universe
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