Poems About Stars Seeking Honest Critique
#stars
smackdownraven
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:41pm
Yesterday 6:41pm
where stars are born
disturbing stars as I fade from this world
leaving glitter as I go
sparkling understanding that amuses
take me far from here
into exotic worlds place me
where I can be myself
a new form to explore in
experiencing the place before me
interactive my new mother smiles at me
with a nudge encourages me to open my eyes
at the wonderful vistas before me
sigh to touch the universes
I'm where souls are born
grieving not from where I've come
in time my mind conceives a life
born of immortal love
the...
leaving glitter as I go
sparkling understanding that amuses
take me far from here
into exotic worlds place me
where I can be myself
a new form to explore in
experiencing the place before me
interactive my new mother smiles at me
with a nudge encourages me to open my eyes
at the wonderful vistas before me
sigh to touch the universes
I'm where souls are born
grieving not from where I've come
in time my mind conceives a life
born of immortal love
the...
#stars
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2 Comments
InDreamz
Poem Published
6th Apr 2025 6:40pm
6th Apr 2025 6:40pm
Journey to the stars
"stardust to stardust"
every atom in me
longs to return to thee;
o' majestic stars...
wish i could defy gravity,
soar high into infinity,
be sucked into blackhole-
your ever disintegrating soul
made from stardust-
each cell of my being
yearns to be in sync;
whirling within and within-
you in me and me in you,
a self-destructive waltz
to go on for eternity-
ever lost in mystery...
i'm rusting on earth,
mud peeling off my...
every atom in me
longs to return to thee;
o' majestic stars...
wish i could defy gravity,
soar high into infinity,
be sucked into blackhole-
your ever disintegrating soul
made from stardust-
each cell of my being
yearns to be in sync;
whirling within and within-
you in me and me in you,
a self-destructive waltz
to go on for eternity-
ever lost in mystery...
i'm rusting on earth,
mud peeling off my...
#death
#stars
64 reads
5 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
5th Apr 2025 7:47pm
5th Apr 2025 7:47pm
The Wrinkles of Time
Like a star from the past she regaled us with stories
A lesson in each and every one of them
With love and patience she guided us
Even when we didn’t want to listen or understand
But after so many laps around the sun
I began to appreciate more of what she done
For all the sacrifices she made
All the sufferings she must’ve endured
I saw more of her light
Now at ninety-five
She only whispers
A fog has come over memory
Hands that once worked so hard
Show the wrinkles of time
Her faces lights up
Like a...
A lesson in each and every one of them
With love and patience she guided us
Even when we didn’t want to listen or understand
But after so many laps around the sun
I began to appreciate more of what she done
For all the sacrifices she made
All the sufferings she must’ve endured
I saw more of her light
Now at ninety-five
She only whispers
A fog has come over memory
Hands that once worked so hard
Show the wrinkles of time
Her faces lights up
Like a...
#family
#hope
#love
#mother
#stars
40 reads
3 Comments
InDreamz
Poem Published
5th Apr 2025 5:09pm
5th Apr 2025 5:09pm
universe in my hands
The stars bloomed
as the narrow rivulets streamed across
the terrain of my palms;
forming islands, peninsulas, chains...
whole map of my life
came alive...
The high and low planetary mounts
on my mushy rosy manus
marked my characteristics;
planets, constellation
sun and moon
carved my fate,
once a palmist said...
but unaware that destiny lies
within our own hands
It's the neurons in my brain
and...
as the narrow rivulets streamed across
the terrain of my palms;
forming islands, peninsulas, chains...
whole map of my life
came alive...
The high and low planetary mounts
on my mushy rosy manus
marked my characteristics;
planets, constellation
sun and moon
carved my fate,
once a palmist said...
but unaware that destiny lies
within our own hands
It's the neurons in my brain
and...
#fate
#SelfDiscovery
#stars
#StreamOfConsciousness
#universe
84 reads
6 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
4th Apr 2025 9:19pm
4th Apr 2025 9:19pm
Hemet
I remember it was early in the winter of ‘89
My family was attending a church retreat
Somewhere in the California desert
Somewhere in those hills
In those days
Hemet was very much a desert town
The second night I was there
I remember some of us went out to the campfire
It was cold
But in the desert
Away from all the light pollution
The sky was lit up with all kinds of stars
And at fourteen
Impressionable by faith
I felt that something bigger than me was out there
That something had painted that canvass in the...
My family was attending a church retreat
Somewhere in the California desert
Somewhere in those hills
In those days
Hemet was very much a desert town
The second night I was there
I remember some of us went out to the campfire
It was cold
But in the desert
Away from all the light pollution
The sky was lit up with all kinds of stars
And at fourteen
Impressionable by faith
I felt that something bigger than me was out there
That something had painted that canvass in the...
#faith
#stars
#universe #WritingPoetry
#universe #WritingPoetry
37 reads
2 Comments
InDreamz
Poem Published
4th Apr 2025 6:51pm
4th Apr 2025 6:51pm
The Coronation
a caravan of stars
lit up the sky,
placid blue heavens
veiled with soft moon sighs...
the June midnight
seemed a jubilant celebration,
for the dark enchantress-
the mysterious night...
a coronation by the cosmos
for the black beauty
to be the queen of earth
so she could grow in her supremacy;
with each passing day
the night would be longer to stay...
those shimmering stellar gypsies
in hues of gold, red and blue
dazzling the ether
with their joyous laughter,...
lit up the sky,
placid blue heavens
veiled with soft moon sighs...
the June midnight
seemed a jubilant celebration,
for the dark enchantress-
the mysterious night...
a coronation by the cosmos
for the black beauty
to be the queen of earth
so she could grow in her supremacy;
with each passing day
the night would be longer to stay...
those shimmering stellar gypsies
in hues of gold, red and blue
dazzling the ether
with their joyous laughter,...
#moon
#night
#stars
#summer
#universe
75 reads
6 Comments
InDreamz
Poem Published
3rd Apr 2025 5:19pm
3rd Apr 2025 5:19pm
My k(night)
in the depth of my loneliness,
in the shadow of solitude,
i often muse
...of someone coming from
across the sky
on a shooting star
from a distant planet;
a man: beautiful,
sweet and shy,
kindness glowing
on his face
with deep dark eyes
for me to gaze
into our eternity,
to be lost forever
in the haze of serenity,
away from my miseries
away from my pain
where there is no loss...no gain...
transcending space and time
he carries me...
in the shadow of solitude,
i often muse
...of someone coming from
across the sky
on a shooting star
from a distant planet;
a man: beautiful,
sweet and shy,
kindness glowing
on his face
with deep dark eyes
for me to gaze
into our eternity,
to be lost forever
in the haze of serenity,
away from my miseries
away from my pain
where there is no loss...no gain...
transcending space and time
he carries me...
#dreams
#love
#stars
#unicorns
#universe
90 reads
8 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
3rd Apr 2025 6:37am
3rd Apr 2025 6:37am
Castor and Pollux
Duality
Brotherhood
Protection…
And so it was that the twins
In their mother’s womb
One of a mortal father, the other of a divine
Came to have a special connection
Years later
When Castor, the mortal son was killed in battle
His brother Pollux asked his father Zeus to let them stay together
And Zeus, moved by his son’s request
Gave them an eternal bond
Placed them together in the northern sky
In the constellation known as
Gemini
57 Unique Words
77 Total
Brotherhood
Protection…
And so it was that the twins
In their mother’s womb
One of a mortal father, the other of a divine
Came to have a special connection
Years later
When Castor, the mortal son was killed in battle
His brother Pollux asked his father Zeus to let them stay together
And Zeus, moved by his son’s request
Gave them an eternal bond
Placed them together in the northern sky
In the constellation known as
Gemini
57 Unique Words
77 Total
#brother
#love
#stars #universe
#stars #universe
65 reads
4 Comments
InDreamz
Poem Published
2nd Apr 2025 3:26pm
2nd Apr 2025 3:26pm
The Hunter
When the universe was spawned
multitude of stars were formed,
a hunter was born
majestic and strong!
To protect from the dark energy
the stars worked in perfect synergy,
creating a distinctive pattern
of pretty stellar bluish lanterns.
Brightening up the cold winter sky
poised between Taurus and Gemini,
holding in hands a club and a shield
Warrior of God in the cosmic field.
Forged with nebula and fire
standing tall in hunter's attire,
Orion, O' the king of constellations-
totem of...
multitude of stars were formed,
a hunter was born
majestic and strong!
To protect from the dark energy
the stars worked in perfect synergy,
creating a distinctive pattern
of pretty stellar bluish lanterns.
Brightening up the cold winter sky
poised between Taurus and Gemini,
holding in hands a club and a shield
Warrior of God in the cosmic field.
Forged with nebula and fire
standing tall in hunter's attire,
Orion, O' the king of constellations-
totem of...
#stars
#universe
86 reads
6 Comments
InDreamz
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 2:32pm
1st Apr 2025 2:32pm
Sepia tone
I remember our love
in sepia tone
Rustic and raw pictures
of our beautiful memories
playing in my mind.
The rugged and worn off edges
of photos of our togetherness
...of moments timeless,
as if a continuum-
beginning from infinity
when stars blossomed into life;
a phantasmagoria of
smiles and tears
rainbows and rain,
ebbing and flowing
with the passage of time
like a dream within a dream
embedded in my soul...
Though you aren't here
your absence can't consume me
...this...
in sepia tone
Rustic and raw pictures
of our beautiful memories
playing in my mind.
The rugged and worn off edges
of photos of our togetherness
...of moments timeless,
as if a continuum-
beginning from infinity
when stars blossomed into life;
a phantasmagoria of
smiles and tears
rainbows and rain,
ebbing and flowing
with the passage of time
like a dream within a dream
embedded in my soul...
Though you aren't here
your absence can't consume me
...this...
#death
#hope
#love
#memories
#stars
109 reads
9 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
26th Mar 2025 10:02pm
26th Mar 2025 10:02pm
hiccup
gleaning from fact and fiction
with visions of past events
Sacred art is understanding
wealth of knowledge is what I crave
Putting away earthly things
The dark appears, and I look in
It is all around us
my star records are in the heavens
memories locked in code
lest they be discovered
Mortal touch is disavowed
divinity in the flesh is graced
within the numerals is the key
a bit of math, and the information comes pouring in
past happenings and the future in collision with time
There is no fate...
with visions of past events
Sacred art is understanding
wealth of knowledge is what I crave
Putting away earthly things
The dark appears, and I look in
It is all around us
my star records are in the heavens
memories locked in code
lest they be discovered
Mortal touch is disavowed
divinity in the flesh is graced
within the numerals is the key
a bit of math, and the information comes pouring in
past happenings and the future in collision with time
There is no fate...
#humankind
#spiritual
#stars
70 reads
4 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
13th Mar 2025 11:34pm
13th Mar 2025 11:34pm
Here I am as I am a woman
Here I am as I am a woman sitting here in the afternoon sun, of the mother land, yet it's here and now. I admire this tree of life. Tall looking like a badge of honor, standing under the sun, as it's light creating a image, of the bonsai tree of life with love, and happiness and dreams. For sure as I look forward beyond the tree of Life. I can feel it's power reaching into me, so spiritually touching the deepness of my heart ❤️ YET I feel so alive here and now in this space without time, as I am in twin with it's deepness of this subject matter that is called living life. ...
#evolution
#moon
#stars
#sun
#universe
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