Poems About Relationships Seeking Honest Critique
#relationships
Poems about relationships seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
The Last Time
Had I known
The last time
I saw you
Would be
The last time
I'd ever see you
Perhaps ....
The thing is
Your visit was
So special...
It's now etched
Into my soul
I wouldn't change
A single thing...
Well, maybe
held your
Warm embrace
A whole lot tighter
Or at the
Very least
Held it longer
The last time
I saw you
Would be
The last time
I'd ever see you
Perhaps ....
The thing is
Your visit was
So special...
It's now etched
Into my soul
I wouldn't change
A single thing...
Well, maybe
held your
Warm embrace
A whole lot tighter
Or at the
Very least
Held it longer
#happiness
#relationships
#ILoveYou #admiration
#ILoveYou #admiration
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Turbulent Times
Two damaged souls trying to live a whole life together
Attempting to stay tethered during inclement weather
Like when their mothers died just two days apart
It seems, since then, the storms don't depart
Is this the latter part of for better or for worse
Where still waters ripple and you must stay the course
Of course that's easier said than done under the blazing Sun
Where two entities are metaphorically trying to stay one
While under the gun with rounds bursting at rapid fire
Ducking for cover and seeking shelter as to not...
Attempting to stay tethered during inclement weather
Like when their mothers died just two days apart
It seems, since then, the storms don't depart
Is this the latter part of for better or for worse
Where still waters ripple and you must stay the course
Of course that's easier said than done under the blazing Sun
Where two entities are metaphorically trying to stay one
While under the gun with rounds bursting at rapid fire
Ducking for cover and seeking shelter as to not...
#love
#relationships
#marriage #LifeStruggles
#marriage #LifeStruggles
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Boundaries
Just because I’M sexual doesn’t mean that we should SEX
Just because YOU’RE sexual doesn’t mean that WE should SEX
And what it NEVER means is sexualise ME as a result of MY art and soul
That’s just your reaction
Not attraction
I’m just a vessel
Of expression
That is ALL
You’ve objectified ME sexually
And above all else that disrespects ME and more
It degrades the woman
It disrespects the art
Quite frankly it just makes me ANGRY
Just because I’m attractive doesn’t mean you know who...
Just because YOU’RE sexual doesn’t mean that WE should SEX
And what it NEVER means is sexualise ME as a result of MY art and soul
That’s just your reaction
Not attraction
I’m just a vessel
Of expression
That is ALL
You’ve objectified ME sexually
And above all else that disrespects ME and more
It degrades the woman
It disrespects the art
Quite frankly it just makes me ANGRY
Just because I’m attractive doesn’t mean you know who...
#anger
#men
#relationships #frustration
#relationships #frustration
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(Her)
Fuck, can I miss
Her.
Sure, peace
support
care
sex and
all the other masculine platitudes,
really more than any fella-
let alone one beset by
this
affliction could ever ask for- in this indifferent place
at that.
Though I should say
I partake of the fruits
begat of
this, wretched gift, an improper
fraction—
Astute. Aimless, Agony
—bittersweet as it is,
enables me to miss
the little things, too.
I miss the blood-red twilight sun
licking the horizon through
The window...
Her.
Sure, peace
support
care
sex and
all the other masculine platitudes,
really more than any fella-
let alone one beset by
this
affliction could ever ask for- in this indifferent place
at that.
Though I should say
I partake of the fruits
begat of
this, wretched gift, an improper
fraction—
Astute. Aimless, Agony
—bittersweet as it is,
enables me to miss
the little things, too.
I miss the blood-red twilight sun
licking the horizon through
The window...
#love
#relationships
#romantic #beauty
#romantic #beauty
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Rusty Ralph
I met him on a dancefloor
Rusty Ralph was his name
I didn’t even find him attractive
And yet I invited him in all the same
He had a shiny bald head
With slightly yellowing teeth
Overgrown nails to accompany
The chaotic grin between his cheeks
I’m pretty sure he took advantage
And became a gaslighter soon enough
Tried convincing me, it was me all along
Who tried to take him home from the gaff
I should’ve ended it much sooner
But would I listen, Of course I would not
As always, I like to push...
Rusty Ralph was his name
I didn’t even find him attractive
And yet I invited him in all the same
He had a shiny bald head
With slightly yellowing teeth
Overgrown nails to accompany
The chaotic grin between his cheeks
I’m pretty sure he took advantage
And became a gaslighter soon enough
Tried convincing me, it was me all along
Who tried to take him home from the gaff
I should’ve ended it much sooner
But would I listen, Of course I would not
As always, I like to push...
#regret
#men
#relationships #choices
#relationships #choices
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Unanswered
is she out there
somewhere?
on earth?
in the ether?
or is she
the impossible dream?
is she out there
somewhere?
the one i love
laughing crying
kind and caring
or is she
an impossible dream?
is she out there
somewhere?
or only here
in my mind and heart?
teasing
taunting
tempting
is she out there
somewhere?
the one
who loves not expectations
but who i am
flawed
is she out there
somewhere? ...
somewhere?
on earth?
in the ether?
or is she
the impossible dream?
is she out there
somewhere?
the one i love
laughing crying
kind and caring
or is she
an impossible dream?
is she out there
somewhere?
or only here
in my mind and heart?
teasing
taunting
tempting
is she out there
somewhere?
the one
who loves not expectations
but who i am
flawed
is she out there
somewhere? ...
#loneliness
#relationships
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A Noteworthy Box
Tomorrow is a special day for my girlfriend & I. We're celebrating our one year anniversary without him. You may ask who is him, well him was my girlfriends ex-boyfriend who couldn't accept the fact that her & I were madly in love.
What led up to March 21st being our one year anniversary is a tragedy for him, not us. At one point after New Years, she decided to break it off with him. There were issues that were typical for a boyfriend & girlfriend. Jealousy, poor communication and affairs. He had other girl friends and would deny he cheated on her numerous times. A few...
What led up to March 21st being our one year anniversary is a tragedy for him, not us. At one point after New Years, she decided to break it off with him. There were issues that were typical for a boyfriend & girlfriend. Jealousy, poor communication and affairs. He had other girl friends and would deny he cheated on her numerous times. A few...
#love
#relationships
#inspirational
#LifeGoals
#uplifting
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Reality
#happiness
#relationships
#romantic
#lover
#sexy
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Warriors of a Past Love
Sometimes I wonder,
Will the past forever haunt me?
I won the war.
But there were battles I lost.
Soldiers that died,
& cries that can never go unheard.
I’m now left with scars that can be seen a mile away.
Yet, I still stand victorious.
You betrayed our alliance,
& the punishment for treason is death.
Didn’t you know this would be the outcome?
I would be a fool to think otherwise.
So I won’t back down.
You wanted war?
Then war it shall be.
You wanted death?
So die you shall.
Rest in peace to what...
Will the past forever haunt me?
I won the war.
But there were battles I lost.
Soldiers that died,
& cries that can never go unheard.
I’m now left with scars that can be seen a mile away.
Yet, I still stand victorious.
You betrayed our alliance,
& the punishment for treason is death.
Didn’t you know this would be the outcome?
I would be a fool to think otherwise.
So I won’t back down.
You wanted war?
Then war it shall be.
You wanted death?
So die you shall.
Rest in peace to what...
#grief
#relationships
#breakup
#conflict
#MovingOn
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Still The One
Does practice make perfect love?
When we’re two imperfect people no less perfect for each other
Enchantments and apologetics of
All the ways that I try and fail as a lover
Words like paper weights outline my heart in ink
Trying to transcribe all that you mean to me
Interpreting these emotions too deep to convey in all I think
When your beauty is more than just what’s at the surface of all there is to see
More than just the girl of my dreams but the angel of my awakening
Our hearts are knit of a common thread into the fabric of a life...
When we’re two imperfect people no less perfect for each other
Enchantments and apologetics of
All the ways that I try and fail as a lover
Words like paper weights outline my heart in ink
Trying to transcribe all that you mean to me
Interpreting these emotions too deep to convey in all I think
When your beauty is more than just what’s at the surface of all there is to see
More than just the girl of my dreams but the angel of my awakening
Our hearts are knit of a common thread into the fabric of a life...
#love
#wife
#relationships
#marriage
#anniversary
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Quiet Hours
In the quiet hours of the darkness I lie
Contemplating, is this where it dies?
We promised to love, promised forever
What I should have done is say, never!
I cannot imagine what life would be
If I just walked away and let it be.
But I definitely cannot stay
To wrestle with this demon every day.
Sometimes its sunflowers and lilies in bloom
And other times I feel impending doom.
What do I do? It's so hard to know.
Do I stay, or do I go?
Contemplating, is this where it dies?
We promised to love, promised forever
What I should have done is say, never!
I cannot imagine what life would be
If I just walked away and let it be.
But I definitely cannot stay
To wrestle with this demon every day.
Sometimes its sunflowers and lilies in bloom
And other times I feel impending doom.
What do I do? It's so hard to know.
Do I stay, or do I go?
#relationships
#marriage
#conflict
#confusion
#FeelingTrapped
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Syllable
Never my intention
Crazy sad endeavour
And this sad rejection
Thinking strange dilemma
Misery dejection
From her soul magnetic
This my love obsession
Making me frenetic
All years my attention
Thoughtful thoughts assemble
For rose of perfection
Actions be especial
Into my possession
Her heart I affected
Like a sweet infection
Then we were connected
Decent to deception
Lies they had potential
But step to redemption
To count sins sequential
This be my confession...
Crazy sad endeavour
And this sad rejection
Thinking strange dilemma
Misery dejection
From her soul magnetic
This my love obsession
Making me frenetic
All years my attention
Thoughtful thoughts assemble
For rose of perfection
Actions be especial
Into my possession
Her heart I affected
Like a sweet infection
Then we were connected
Decent to deception
Lies they had potential
But step to redemption
To count sins sequential
This be my confession...
#relationships
#friendship
#UnrequitedLove
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DU Poetry : Poems About Relationships Seeking Honest Critique