Poems About Marriage Seeking Honest Critique
#marriage
Poems about marriage seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Death will never tear us apart
They were together a long time
He was retired
She was a homemaker all her life
Most of their family has moved away or died
Two hermits that knew nothing more then each other
They loved tv and game shows
They never left the house
They received their food and clothing through the internet
Occasionally a technician or handyman would come over to fix some household issue
They were happy
They knew no other way
One day the husband fell ill
She knew if she took him to the hospital, he'd die
At one point, he wanted to go, but she...
He was retired
She was a homemaker all her life
Most of their family has moved away or died
Two hermits that knew nothing more then each other
They loved tv and game shows
They never left the house
They received their food and clothing through the internet
Occasionally a technician or handyman would come over to fix some household issue
They were happy
They knew no other way
One day the husband fell ill
She knew if she took him to the hospital, he'd die
At one point, he wanted to go, but she...
#death
#horror
#marriage
#MentalHealth
#ShortStory
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Growth
I gave you seeds
I gave you water
And I gave you love
Because I wanted to see you grow
The flowers were just compliments
I gave you water
And I gave you love
Because I wanted to see you grow
The flowers were just compliments
#learning
#love
#marriage #PersonalGrowth
#marriage #PersonalGrowth
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I Don't Believe This! On Our Wedding Day?!
On Sunday, Laura was
on her way to church
only to be stopped by
seeing Tommy naked
and humping Julia.
on her way to church
only to be stopped by
seeing Tommy naked
and humping Julia.
#betrayal
#fiction
#FreeVerse
#marriage
#sex
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WHATEVER THE AGE
Whatever the age,
the blood can still rage
when time is taken
for some bed shakin'.
Or for some quickie
where/when the chance be.
You can still have fun
while kids outside run
in other folks' care
while sex time you share.
Keep intimacy
fresh as a daisy.
Experimenting,
and reinventing
the joint repertoire
in married boudoir
or ooh lah lah
in back of the car.
the blood can still rage
when time is taken
for some bed shakin'.
Or for some quickie
where/when the chance be.
You can still have fun
while kids outside run
in other folks' care
while sex time you share.
Keep intimacy
fresh as a daisy.
Experimenting,
and reinventing
the joint repertoire
in married boudoir
or ooh lah lah
in back of the car.
#erotic
#marriage
#passion
#relationships
#sex
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I Love You, Kay
it’s when I’m in a bad way
that I want only you
say
that you don’t know what to do
but you do, you do,
you just do ..
that I want only you
say
that you don’t know what to do
but you do, you do,
you just do ..
#marriage
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"Ordinary life" Pt. 2
Hidden behind tragic literature
seeking solace in anything but this place...
this ordinary life she chose.
the white witch found herself longing once more
but this time it was for space - for a chance to breathe again
interruptions occur more often now, this is motherhood.
the task was not explained
loving her kin, though easy... came with a heavy price.
reveling in the sound of rain drops
tap
tap
tapping...
seeking solace in anything but this place...
this ordinary life she chose.
the white witch found herself longing once more
but this time it was for space - for a chance to breathe again
interruptions occur more often now, this is motherhood.
the task was not explained
loving her kin, though easy... came with a heavy price.
reveling in the sound of rain drops
tap
tap
tapping...
#identity
#marriage
#motherhood
#silence
#tradition
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A loving couple
After an intense game of Chutes & Ladders, Andrea hailed victorious over Paul
As everyone knows, Paul is a huge sore loser
He also had one to many drinks that evening
Andrea decided to showboat a bit
The showboating was in Paul's face
He didn't like this one bit
He told Andrea to back off
She wouldn't listen
With an unexpected scream, Paul slugged her twice in the mouth, knocking a tooth out
He then said, "See, you don't need that dentist visit after all. I helped you out."
Andrea said crying and upset, "That...
As everyone knows, Paul is a huge sore loser
He also had one to many drinks that evening
Andrea decided to showboat a bit
The showboating was in Paul's face
He didn't like this one bit
He told Andrea to back off
She wouldn't listen
With an unexpected scream, Paul slugged her twice in the mouth, knocking a tooth out
He then said, "See, you don't need that dentist visit after all. I helped you out."
Andrea said crying and upset, "That...
#fiction
#love
#marriage #ShortStory
#marriage #ShortStory
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I Found Out Too Late that She Loved Me
I loved Hannah more than I could say,
But I didn’t tell her that I loved her.
I wanted her to see it for herself.
So I came up with an idea that I thought would work.
She read the love poems that I wrote.
The poetic words revealed my true feelings.
She knew that I wrote them for her,
And she realised the depth of my love for her.
I didn’t know that she was in love with me.
She never showed her feelings for me.
Perhaps she tried to attract my attention,
But I was too dumb to realise it.
She wasn’t bold...
But I didn’t tell her that I loved her.
I wanted her to see it for herself.
So I came up with an idea that I thought would work.
She read the love poems that I wrote.
The poetic words revealed my true feelings.
She knew that I wrote them for her,
And she realised the depth of my love for her.
I didn’t know that she was in love with me.
She never showed her feelings for me.
Perhaps she tried to attract my attention,
But I was too dumb to realise it.
She wasn’t bold...
#girlfriend
#hurt
#love
#lust
#marriage
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On and on and on...
He was pussy whipped
All of his friends & father knew it and gave him a hard time
He couldn't go anywhere without her inviting herself along
They fought and fucked all the time
He loved her and hated her
He wanted to bash her skull in
She made him feel weak
She made him feel like he wasn't in control of his life
He started to hate her all the time
One night he hit her
Mutual disbelief registered on both their faces
He started hitting her all the time
The more he hit her, the more he loved her
He was in love again
In...
All of his friends & father knew it and gave him a hard time
He couldn't go anywhere without her inviting herself along
They fought and fucked all the time
He loved her and hated her
He wanted to bash her skull in
She made him feel weak
She made him feel like he wasn't in control of his life
He started to hate her all the time
One night he hit her
Mutual disbelief registered on both their faces
He started hitting her all the time
The more he hit her, the more he loved her
He was in love again
In...
#abuse
#DomesticViolence
#marriage
#motivational
#sex
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It Still Isn't You
Your disease brought me closer to a decision
i know now who my true love is
It still isn't you!
While your laying there, let me introduce you to my true love
Here she is
Look at her
Young, spry and gorgeous
You use to be special many many years ago
Now your laying here, given a few weeks to live
You did nothing all your life to help yourself
You should have given me my divorce when you still had the energy, years ago
You can't even lift your head up
See you at your funeral
i know now who my true love is
It still isn't you!
While your laying there, let me introduce you to my true love
Here she is
Look at her
Young, spry and gorgeous
You use to be special many many years ago
Now your laying here, given a few weeks to live
You did nothing all your life to help yourself
You should have given me my divorce when you still had the energy, years ago
You can't even lift your head up
See you at your funeral
#death
#funeral
#girlfriend #marriage
#girlfriend #marriage
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A Poem for My Ex-wife
Ping Ling, what made you love me the way you did?
You didn’t hesitate to say yes the evening I proposed to you.
And you quickly put the engagement ring on your finger.
You knew that I loved you as must as you loved me.
We vowed to stay with each other until death separated us.
Never did we think our marriage would end in divorce.
Though many years have passed, I won’t stop missing you.
I’ll still love you, no matter how long we stay apart.
Every time I look at our wedding picture, my heart aches for you.
When we became one flesh,...
You didn’t hesitate to say yes the evening I proposed to you.
And you quickly put the engagement ring on your finger.
You knew that I loved you as must as you loved me.
We vowed to stay with each other until death separated us.
Never did we think our marriage would end in divorce.
Though many years have passed, I won’t stop missing you.
I’ll still love you, no matter how long we stay apart.
Every time I look at our wedding picture, my heart aches for you.
When we became one flesh,...
#beauty
#dreams
#love
#marriage
#memories
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Like an Echo
"She should be like a town clock — keep time and observe regularity. She should not, however, like a town clock, speak so loudly that all the town may hear her.
She should be like a snail — prudent, and keep within her own house.
She should not be like a snail — carry all she has upon her back.
She should be like an echo — speak when spoken to.
But she should not be like an echo — determined always to have the last word." - "Three Wifely Virtues", The Australian Woman's Mirror, 24/02/1925
A snail slimes across a leaf,
Its hearth and...
She should be like a snail — prudent, and keep within her own house.
She should not be like a snail — carry all she has upon her back.
She should be like an echo — speak when spoken to.
But she should not be like an echo — determined always to have the last word." - "Three Wifely Virtues", The Australian Woman's Mirror, 24/02/1925
A snail slimes across a leaf,
Its hearth and...
#abuse
#feminism
#historical #marriage
#historical #marriage
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