Poems About Loneliness Seeking Honest Critique
#loneliness
Poems about loneliness seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Sanatorium
Florescent tube lights lead the way down such lonely halls
Listen, along hushed anxious mumbles, echoing these walls
Their greenish dronings merely soften a shadow's firm grip
Trails in asbestos tile, slates etched by trauma's deep chips
Time whispers me in aside, upon decades, feelings of truth
A dark nostalgia or subtle ageless grief, it can not soothe
Morbid satisfaction, like night cigarettes, bids me to stay
These haunted halls, lonesome, mournfully push me away
Listen, along hushed anxious mumbles, echoing these walls
Their greenish dronings merely soften a shadow's firm grip
Trails in asbestos tile, slates etched by trauma's deep chips
Time whispers me in aside, upon decades, feelings of truth
A dark nostalgia or subtle ageless grief, it can not soothe
Morbid satisfaction, like night cigarettes, bids me to stay
These haunted halls, lonesome, mournfully push me away
#despair
#emptiness
#loneliness #NaPoWriMo2024
#loneliness #NaPoWriMo2024
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Bender
I'm left with this saddened broken heart
And crushed as well as destroyed
Never should have loved from the start
Feeling frustrated and so annoyed
Figuring out different ways to recover
I began this adventure I'm now taking
New outlets of temptations I discovered
Adding up the mistakes I'm making
It started with constant alcohol
To erase the thoughts I would think
Even after I would stumble and fall
I would continue to drink and drink
The beer turned to hard liquor
Hoping this would do the trick
Even though it messed me...
And crushed as well as destroyed
Never should have loved from the start
Feeling frustrated and so annoyed
Figuring out different ways to recover
I began this adventure I'm now taking
New outlets of temptations I discovered
Adding up the mistakes I'm making
It started with constant alcohol
To erase the thoughts I would think
Even after I would stumble and fall
I would continue to drink and drink
The beer turned to hard liquor
Hoping this would do the trick
Even though it messed me...
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#loneliness
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Safe House
I ran away
From myself
Left all the riches
Took a one bedroom above the drug store
After they close up shop
Can blast my music all night
Maybe put a pick-up on my cello
Abstract the notion of classical
Shredding the strings beyond reason
One day I'll go back
When I've written my opus
I'll stand away from the crowd though
Never going on that fucking Today show
From myself
Left all the riches
Took a one bedroom above the drug store
After they close up shop
Can blast my music all night
Maybe put a pick-up on my cello
Abstract the notion of classical
Shredding the strings beyond reason
One day I'll go back
When I've written my opus
I'll stand away from the crowd though
Never going on that fucking Today show
#despair
#loneliness
#music
#philosophical
#StreamOfConsciousness
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Frozen in Motion
Leaden gray sky weeps
Pitter patter of the rain
A chill wind bites
Lost senses, wandering gaze
People living on
Yet, here, i froze
Imprisoned within
Stuck in a loop
That strangles my breath
Its weight, oh so heavy
Making me break instead
Whispers that hold me down
Ghosts that haunt me down
Lost in my own path
Aching for a light to pierce through
Pitter patter of the rain
A chill wind bites
Lost senses, wandering gaze
People living on
Yet, here, i froze
Imprisoned within
Stuck in a loop
That strangles my breath
Its weight, oh so heavy
Making me break instead
Whispers that hold me down
Ghosts that haunt me down
Lost in my own path
Aching for a light to pierce through
#despair
#FeelingLost
#loneliness
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Embrace the solitude
Always wanting more and never getting it
Following your heart and you keep regretting it
Leads you to disappointment and you keep letting it
Never won a hand but you keep betting it
all...taking chances hoping someone will stay true
Making excuses for every hurtful thing they do
If you love them hard enough they cant help but love you
can't love yourself so you find someone else to give it to
Putting them on a pedestal they can't help but fall from
It's so dumb
But your mind's numb
There's the beat of a drum
In your chest
For a...
Following your heart and you keep regretting it
Leads you to disappointment and you keep letting it
Never won a hand but you keep betting it
all...taking chances hoping someone will stay true
Making excuses for every hurtful thing they do
If you love them hard enough they cant help but love you
can't love yourself so you find someone else to give it to
Putting them on a pedestal they can't help but fall from
It's so dumb
But your mind's numb
There's the beat of a drum
In your chest
For a...
#breakup
#despair
#heartbroken #loneliness
#heartbroken #loneliness
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Glad
And if that day done came my kids don't fuck with me?..
I'm glad
Cause who the fuck am I ?
gone call myself trying to be a dad?
Done fought against abortions,
ain't ask if they wanted be here,
and never did I consider that without them meant the mirror
My kids without the me, that's unseen, but that's the real
And if they really was my end, then what the fuck I'm doing here?
I'm glad
Cause who the fuck am I ?
gone call myself trying to be a dad?
Done fought against abortions,
ain't ask if they wanted be here,
and never did I consider that without them meant the mirror
My kids without the me, that's unseen, but that's the real
And if they really was my end, then what the fuck I'm doing here?
#childhood
#loneliness
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THE LONELY ONE
The lonely person often walks unnoticed
with unsteady step and eyes unfocused,
failing to keep pace within the crowd.
An approach of reluctance to everything,
like a crutch under the arm that stings,
maintaining balance amidst turbulence.
Seeing, yet, did not recognize nor care,
as if that person was as normal as you,
beneath the shrouded cloak they wear.
Loneliness can feed on pure isolation,
depression its friend, little is noticed,
there's signals, a lack of communication.
Loneliness has its very own...
with unsteady step and eyes unfocused,
failing to keep pace within the crowd.
An approach of reluctance to everything,
like a crutch under the arm that stings,
maintaining balance amidst turbulence.
Seeing, yet, did not recognize nor care,
as if that person was as normal as you,
beneath the shrouded cloak they wear.
Loneliness can feed on pure isolation,
depression its friend, little is noticed,
there's signals, a lack of communication.
Loneliness has its very own...
#bittersweet
#emptiness
#hope
#loneliness
#rejection
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11 Comments
Again
The sadness rushes over me like being caught in the undertow
As I look in the eyes of someone i barely know
My best friend, my partner, my other half, my soul is gone
I am stuck in a chamber of torture as I watch her move on
I scream internally as my heart dies a slow death
Unwilling to accept that our love has taken its last breath
All the moments I should have cherished play out in my mind
As she turns her back and leaves me behind
This coldness I feel from her is impossible to comprehend
I tore down my walls for a...
As I look in the eyes of someone i barely know
My best friend, my partner, my other half, my soul is gone
I am stuck in a chamber of torture as I watch her move on
I scream internally as my heart dies a slow death
Unwilling to accept that our love has taken its last breath
All the moments I should have cherished play out in my mind
As she turns her back and leaves me behind
This coldness I feel from her is impossible to comprehend
I tore down my walls for a...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#loneliness #sadness
#loneliness #sadness
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Living the lie doesnt make it the truth
Why can't i get this feeling of emptiness to go away?
Why do i feel disappointed that i woke up every day?
Just another day of hating myself and putting up a front
Like im fine and nothings bothering me, my self esteem is taking the brunt
I know that Im worthless so how could anyone want me?
I can never become the person they'd want me to be
Constantly second and third guessing myself makes me act so erratic
My thoughts are so disjointed that it all just seems like static
Constant barrage of "you're not shit",...
Why do i feel disappointed that i woke up every day?
Just another day of hating myself and putting up a front
Like im fine and nothings bothering me, my self esteem is taking the brunt
I know that Im worthless so how could anyone want me?
I can never become the person they'd want me to be
Constantly second and third guessing myself makes me act so erratic
My thoughts are so disjointed that it all just seems like static
Constant barrage of "you're not shit",...
#anger
#loneliness
#despair #disappointment
#despair #disappointment
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Best Orgasms They Could Ever Have Without The Passion
They have their rituals like any other married couple
At night, he goes downstairs before bed and jerks off to the hottest porn on the internet
He can have any women he wants
She goes under the covers with her dildo and vibrator and fucks & pulsates herself to an amazing orgasm
They finish around the same time,
even though they're in different rooms
They have been married for so long that they have the perfect sex every time
After the lights go out, they sleep like real human beings.
At night, he goes downstairs before bed and jerks off to the hottest porn on the internet
He can have any women he wants
She goes under the covers with her dildo and vibrator and fucks & pulsates herself to an amazing orgasm
They finish around the same time,
even though they're in different rooms
They have been married for so long that they have the perfect sex every time
After the lights go out, they sleep like real human beings.
#loneliness
#marriage
#ShortStory
#emptiness
#orgasm
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The Bible, a savior and a broken heart!
On I wish I knew just what to say ,
To help u ease your pain.
Spending too much time alone
Can make a man insane.
I know that you are broken,
And I know just how u feel ...
I know that it will take some time,
Before u start to heal...
I've spent lots of hours,
All alone and torn apart.
I still have scars that bleed sometimes
Deep inside my heart.
I didn't want to meet you..
Didn't want to take a chance.
Wasn't looking for a new friend
Or even fake romance.
I seldom make much effort,
Cuz I don't...
To help u ease your pain.
Spending too much time alone
Can make a man insane.
I know that you are broken,
And I know just how u feel ...
I know that it will take some time,
Before u start to heal...
I've spent lots of hours,
All alone and torn apart.
I still have scars that bleed sometimes
Deep inside my heart.
I didn't want to meet you..
Didn't want to take a chance.
Wasn't looking for a new friend
Or even fake romance.
I seldom make much effort,
Cuz I don't...
#sadness
#loneliness
#rejection #heartbroken
#rejection #heartbroken
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Love
"....You don't know how much I love you."
If you acknowledge the fact that I don't know,
It is obvious that I cannot really appreciate it
Why don't you show me the really love.
If you acknowledge the fact that I don't know,
It is obvious that I cannot really appreciate it
Why don't you show me the really love.
#sadness
#loneliness
#confusion
#despair
#fear
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