Poems About Loneliness Seeking Honest Critique
#loneliness
Poems about loneliness seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
AaronBraveHeart
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:01pm
Yesterday 5:01pm
Catsong
~ Written on the 24th of October 2008 ~~
A never-ending autumn is living in my head.
My soul's empty and my world is blackened.
I'm living in a desert, and a desert's living in,
It feels like the song of the lonely wind,
like the birds on the live wire, like a strange drawing.
It looks like I'm staying, but actually I'm crawling.
I'm far away from people, I live in a different place.
There's ghost mist in my soul and mist in my face.
Deeper is my pleasure, deeper are my feelings,
I'm just a living sleeper, a paper doll who...
A never-ending autumn is living in my head.
My soul's empty and my world is blackened.
I'm living in a desert, and a desert's living in,
It feels like the song of the lonely wind,
like the birds on the live wire, like a strange drawing.
It looks like I'm staying, but actually I'm crawling.
I'm far away from people, I live in a different place.
There's ghost mist in my soul and mist in my face.
Deeper is my pleasure, deeper are my feelings,
I'm just a living sleeper, a paper doll who...
#loneliness
#cats
#tragedy
#despair
#emptiness
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AaronBraveHeart
Poem Published
Yesterday 4:56pm
Yesterday 4:56pm
Lover
~ Written on the 18th of February 2018 ~~
@'~'- ⋆⁺₊⋆ ☀︎ ⋆⁺₊⋆
In this cold and starry night
On my bed I lay alone
In my head I'm asking why
do I miss you to the bones?
Once you said, don't waste your life
waiting for me there...
But that's me, for you I'd dive
into depths unknown, I'd dare!
But the night I said is cold,
as the wind blows some sorrow,
tells me, you're too bold,
he may leave tomorrow...
And the wind is right
Why my burning fire ...
@'~'- ⋆⁺₊⋆ ☀︎ ⋆⁺₊⋆
In this cold and starry night
On my bed I lay alone
In my head I'm asking why
do I miss you to the bones?
Once you said, don't waste your life
waiting for me there...
But that's me, for you I'd dive
into depths unknown, I'd dare!
But the night I said is cold,
as the wind blows some sorrow,
tells me, you're too bold,
he may leave tomorrow...
And the wind is right
Why my burning fire ...
#sadness
#love
#grief
#loneliness
#rejection
38 reads
2 Comments
QuietlyOutspoken
Poem Published
31st Jan 2023 9:04pm
31st Jan 2023 9:04pm
Heartless Obsessions
This really isn’t a good time
I haven’t seen her since last July
I quit pushing down the hurt
Now there’s blood pouring out of my eyes
I haven’t been the same
Since she gave me back my mind
I get lonely and overwhelmed
I need someone else
A reason to take care of myself
You shouldn’t have asked questions
If you didn’t want a confession
We don’t need a real connection
I love with a heartless obsession
No one can replace her
And her effortless perfection
You showed up...
I haven’t seen her since last July
I quit pushing down the hurt
Now there’s blood pouring out of my eyes
I haven’t been the same
Since she gave me back my mind
I get lonely and overwhelmed
I need someone else
A reason to take care of myself
You shouldn’t have asked questions
If you didn’t want a confession
We don’t need a real connection
I love with a heartless obsession
No one can replace her
And her effortless perfection
You showed up...
#love
#loneliness
#relationships
26 reads
1 Comment
cjflier
Poem Published
29th Jan 2023 10:55pm
29th Jan 2023 10:55pm
A God’s Trial
Pounded by waves, the longboat
pitches and rolls in the cold, angry sea;
surging swells as tall as the vessel is long
batter it non-stop,
The lone oarsman, abandoned by
his fellow sailors, holds on
(futilely?)
for dear life while struggling with
sail and rudder, battling desperately
to keep the dragonhead straight and upright
while Poseidon gives no quarter.
pitches and rolls in the cold, angry sea;
surging swells as tall as the vessel is long
batter it non-stop,
The lone oarsman, abandoned by
his fellow sailors, holds on
(futilely?)
for dear life while struggling with
sail and rudder, battling desperately
to keep the dragonhead straight and upright
while Poseidon gives no quarter.
#strength
#loneliness
#LifeStruggles #determination
#LifeStruggles #determination
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TellyLace88
I_Am_Her
I_Am_Her
Poem Published
28th Jan 2023 4:02pm
28th Jan 2023 4:02pm
Drowning
Another sunrise I wake to alone
Tell me my love
What's the purpose in this again?
You're in the next room but may as well be on another planet
The distance between us screams
How do I fix this?
I wouldn't know where to begin
The further you drift away
The more desperate I become
I can't pinpoint where I lost you
My only relief from this torture
The smoke I inhale... within seconds I go numb
Just going through the motions
Two strangers co-existing in this cold and lonely house
My skin starting to rot from your neglect ...
Tell me my love
What's the purpose in this again?
You're in the next room but may as well be on another planet
The distance between us screams
How do I fix this?
I wouldn't know where to begin
The further you drift away
The more desperate I become
I can't pinpoint where I lost you
My only relief from this torture
The smoke I inhale... within seconds I go numb
Just going through the motions
Two strangers co-existing in this cold and lonely house
My skin starting to rot from your neglect ...
#loneliness
#relationships
#heartbroken
#drugs
#confusion
81 reads
7 Comments
Getinsideme
Poem Published
28th Jan 2023 7:14am
28th Jan 2023 7:14am
NOT A TEXT... NOT A CALL...
As I sit here, tears streaming down my face,
I can't help but think of you, in a better place,
Having fun, living life, without a care,
Ignoring my calls, my texts, my despair.
I'm left here in the dark, alone, day and night,
Hiding from the world, too weak to put up a fight.
I try so hard to understand,
Why you left me, why you couldn't stand.
I loved you with all my heart,
But you've moved on, found someone new, ripped me apart.
I tell myself you'll come back, but deep down I know it's a lie,
You're gone,...
I can't help but think of you, in a better place,
Having fun, living life, without a care,
Ignoring my calls, my texts, my despair.
I'm left here in the dark, alone, day and night,
Hiding from the world, too weak to put up a fight.
I try so hard to understand,
Why you left me, why you couldn't stand.
I loved you with all my heart,
But you've moved on, found someone new, ripped me apart.
I tell myself you'll come back, but deep down I know it's a lie,
You're gone,...
#sadness
#loneliness
#dark
#heartbroken
#addiction
55 reads
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Livy
Poem Published
27th Jan 2023 5:38pm
27th Jan 2023 5:38pm
Left to rot
I was left there that summer, an end of an era
They left with sweet hugs and assurance of keeping their promise
The assurance of a steadfast connection
Of not being discarded even though we had to be parted
Though not a minute later it seemed,
They had forgotten their promise and left me out to rot
Like yesterday's garbage
They left with sweet hugs and assurance of keeping their promise
The assurance of a steadfast connection
Of not being discarded even though we had to be parted
Though not a minute later it seemed,
They had forgotten their promise and left me out to rot
Like yesterday's garbage
#loneliness
#rejection
#disappointment
58 reads
3 Comments
michaelslove2
Poem Published
27th Jan 2023 8:42am
27th Jan 2023 8:42am
"Hey there, baby"
Hey there, baby”
Hey there baby, maybe you're just too stupid to understand
that I'll always love ya crazy
and that I wanna hold your hand.
Hey there baby, here we go. I probably ought to just let go.
But I ask my heart this question.
The damn thing keeps sayin', "No!"
Half the time I don't know what to do.
Why can't love be an easy way?
Instead we're left to struggle through
in all the games that Cupid likes to play.
Maybe this or maybe that.
Maybe maybe never was.
Or maybe maybe's answer from the...
Hey there baby, maybe you're just too stupid to understand
that I'll always love ya crazy
and that I wanna hold your hand.
Hey there baby, here we go. I probably ought to just let go.
But I ask my heart this question.
The damn thing keeps sayin', "No!"
Half the time I don't know what to do.
Why can't love be an easy way?
Instead we're left to struggle through
in all the games that Cupid likes to play.
Maybe this or maybe that.
Maybe maybe never was.
Or maybe maybe's answer from the...
#sadness
#love
#loneliness
#heartbroken
#bittersweet
59 reads
2 Comments
cjflier
Poem Published
25th Jan 2023 10:26pm
25th Jan 2023 10:26pm
The Dark Abandoned Road
An abandoned back road
leaves a darker side of town.
Deep impenetrable forest
up one side and down.
The road twists and turns,
every corner is blind.
A dim street light ahead
with only blackness behind.
Wet asphalt is cracked,
and the lines are all faded.
A stop sign is rusting,
neglected and jaded.
Weeds sprout through the cracks
that cross left and from right.
Potholes and frost heaves
create a treacherous ride.
To where it does lead,
there's no way of knowing.
It's too scary to...
leaves a darker side of town.
Deep impenetrable forest
up one side and down.
The road twists and turns,
every corner is blind.
A dim street light ahead
with only blackness behind.
Wet asphalt is cracked,
and the lines are all faded.
A stop sign is rusting,
neglected and jaded.
Weeds sprout through the cracks
that cross left and from right.
Potholes and frost heaves
create a treacherous ride.
To where it does lead,
there's no way of knowing.
It's too scary to...
#anxiety
#loneliness
#night #travel
#night #travel
49 reads
2 Comments
michaelslove2
Poem Published
24th Jan 2023 8:58am
24th Jan 2023 8:58am
Meet Me
Meet Me
Meet me in the middle.
I will be waiting there for you
as it is meeting in the middle
which ensures a love is true.
Meet me when the sun
is close to calling it a day,
with nighttime's slow approach
where we can watch as shadows play.
Meet me where the river
is forking to the left and right.
Each joining further downward
increasing in their might.
Meet me where the waves
gently roll kissing the sand.
Reach for me reaching for you,
joining hand in hand.
Meet me...
Meet me in the middle.
I will be waiting there for you
as it is meeting in the middle
which ensures a love is true.
Meet me when the sun
is close to calling it a day,
with nighttime's slow approach
where we can watch as shadows play.
Meet me where the river
is forking to the left and right.
Each joining further downward
increasing in their might.
Meet me where the waves
gently roll kissing the sand.
Reach for me reaching for you,
joining hand in hand.
Meet me...
#love
#loneliness
#hope
77 reads
1 Comment
Daevileyes
Poem Published
24th Jan 2023 3:52am
24th Jan 2023 3:52am
Sunlit
I stared into those glassy eyes
and I cried cried cried
my tears dripping right inside
wishing to make them alive
even for a single second
I craved to fill the emptiness
to find the missing bond
feel less of the mess
then I closed them lids
as if sleeping they would say
but they felt heavy amidst
this forsaken sunlit day
I heard chatter from afar
gibberish and some laughter
I could not make sense at all
of this forever after
they lowered the coffin
deep into the ground
the...
and I cried cried cried
my tears dripping right inside
wishing to make them alive
even for a single second
I craved to fill the emptiness
to find the missing bond
feel less of the mess
then I closed them lids
as if sleeping they would say
but they felt heavy amidst
this forsaken sunlit day
I heard chatter from afar
gibberish and some laughter
I could not make sense at all
of this forever after
they lowered the coffin
deep into the ground
the...
#sadness
#grief
#loneliness #confusion
#loneliness #confusion
54 reads
2 Comments
Vortex32167
Poem Published
23rd Jan 2023 11:23pm
23rd Jan 2023 11:23pm
I just can’t
A world, stable and solid,
Suddenly wrecked and destroyed.
A place where I felt safe and significant,
Forever lost to the void.
Change in management,
A new direction, a fresh start.
But not for me, not for this future,
In this drama, I won’t play my part.
On this stage my safe haven will shatter.
Crumbling, tearing are the walls I once built,
I can’t step into the light, with my thoughts so dark.
I’ll remain stuck with my everlasting guilt.
Suddenly wrecked and destroyed.
A place where I felt safe and significant,
Forever lost to the void.
Change in management,
A new direction, a fresh start.
But not for me, not for this future,
In this drama, I won’t play my part.
On this stage my safe haven will shatter.
Crumbling, tearing are the walls I once built,
I can’t step into the light, with my thoughts so dark.
I’ll remain stuck with my everlasting guilt.
#anxiety
#depression
#loneliness
#FeelingLost
#emptiness
95 reads
2 Comments
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