Poems About Illness Seeking Honest Critique
#illness
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
24th Jan 2025 2:38pm
24th Jan 2025 2:38pm
~the syneresis moon
his eyes are in a fixated
long stare at mine..
in a unbearably delicate
holding of so much
tears and words
he wants to
cry out
& say..
yet he’s here
in a determined
stagnant stare
shines his
the ever iron clad
pitch black coal
eyes.. only that
now the syneresing
irises are in a separating…
… as pulpy famine greys
with the inner broken
yet the somehow running
& holding patterns
of a crinkly petallous
sepia blooms..
fading out
to a distant ...
long stare at mine..
in a unbearably delicate
holding of so much
tears and words
he wants to
cry out
& say..
yet he’s here
in a determined
stagnant stare
shines his
the ever iron clad
pitch black coal
eyes.. only that
now the syneresing
irises are in a separating…
… as pulpy famine greys
with the inner broken
yet the somehow running
& holding patterns
of a crinkly petallous
sepia blooms..
fading out
to a distant ...
#family
#illness
#love
#moon
#support
117 reads
10 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
20th Jan 2025 12:34pm
20th Jan 2025 12:34pm
Freaking Out
I was in my car, parked in a seedy shopping center on the outskirts of town
I was going out of my fucking head man
Not laughing or crying or anything man
I felt nothing!
Just freaking out in my head
I couldn't feel a fucking thing
Didn't know who I was or what I was, or if i was anything at all
I was totally freaking out dude
I guess I shouldn't have eaten that Whopper, with McDonald's French Fries, a Strawberry Milkshake and then went to Dunkin Donuts to buy a dozen donuts.
That shit will drive you fucking insane!
Next time I'll just...
I was going out of my fucking head man
Not laughing or crying or anything man
I felt nothing!
Just freaking out in my head
I couldn't feel a fucking thing
Didn't know who I was or what I was, or if i was anything at all
I was totally freaking out dude
I guess I shouldn't have eaten that Whopper, with McDonald's French Fries, a Strawberry Milkshake and then went to Dunkin Donuts to buy a dozen donuts.
That shit will drive you fucking insane!
Next time I'll just...
#fiction
#food
#illness
#MentalHealth
#satirical
63 reads
13 Comments
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
19th Jan 2025 5:45pm
19th Jan 2025 5:45pm
Little hope
In the old house, I was so sick I could barely crawl to the toilet. I puked in a old bucket used for when the roof leaked. I drank straight from the tap before leaving the bathroom after each bout of diarrhea.
My head pounded and spun. I slept but thought of foul things like chewing frogs or eating human baby arms and then bile would again spew into the bucket.
It was only 9 hours so far and if it took much longer I would die! I had no one to call for help and I would die before calling 911. I was on my last roll of TP. I needed caffeine. That would be hours and...
My head pounded and spun. I slept but thought of foul things like chewing frogs or eating human baby arms and then bile would again spew into the bucket.
It was only 9 hours so far and if it took much longer I would die! I had no one to call for help and I would die before calling 911. I was on my last roll of TP. I needed caffeine. That would be hours and...
#illness
57 reads
7 Comments
Northern_Soul
Poem Published
16th Jan 2025 3:10pm
16th Jan 2025 3:10pm
Once Upon An English Hospital
I.
70 has been screaming
blue murder at God
since I arrived.
I tell her
she can’t take my stick
fuck that—
it’s the good one
this country can’t afford
ii.
39. Black. Floor length puffa jacket.
Stands on a waiting room soapbox
about how cops are out for his blood
tells me to look out for him
on social media
I ask him his name
he tells me it’s LeeRoy
I’m stuck between sympathy
for his mental breakdown
and the fact I’ve never met
a...
70 has been screaming
blue murder at God
since I arrived.
I tell her
she can’t take my stick
fuck that—
it’s the good one
this country can’t afford
ii.
39. Black. Floor length puffa jacket.
Stands on a waiting room soapbox
about how cops are out for his blood
tells me to look out for him
on social media
I ask him his name
he tells me it’s LeeRoy
I’m stuck between sympathy
for his mental breakdown
and the fact I’ve never met
a...
#Britain
#illness
112 reads
5 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
12th Jan 2025 8:20pm
12th Jan 2025 8:20pm
Why do you do that to thyself
I can't really understand why do you do that to thyself, 🤔 for it's not going to change anything that you can't change thyself. FOR sure it's literally just a fix for a moment and then you find thyself, sometimes hurting in pain or be getting thoughts on killing yourself or hurting those who care deeply about you. 🤨 YET you continue to do what you do to thyself, thinking it's gonna help you navigate, through the darkness of the evil forces, that seems to control your thoughts calling you affecting your insight and life. Yet you still believe that it's helping you to cope with...
#addiction
#depression
#illness
#MentalHealth
#sadness
79 reads
0 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
10th Jan 2025 8:38pm
10th Jan 2025 8:38pm
March of the Crabs!
This message is for all you sex fiends here on DUP.
Safe Sex Don't Stop Crabs!
Focus on Internet Porn and dirty mags
Safe Sex Don't Stop Crabs!
A prostitute is usually a red flag
Safe Sex Don't stop Crabs!
Itchy, hairy pubes, your partner starts to gag
Safe Sex Don't Stop Crabs!
Tainted bed sheets, throw them in a garbage bag
Safe Sex Don't Stop Crabs!
Disease ridden, need to report to the nearest lab
Safe Sex Don't Stop Crabs!
STD's for the rich and for the poor dressed in rags
Safe Sex Don't...
Safe Sex Don't Stop Crabs!
Focus on Internet Porn and dirty mags
Safe Sex Don't Stop Crabs!
A prostitute is usually a red flag
Safe Sex Don't stop Crabs!
Itchy, hairy pubes, your partner starts to gag
Safe Sex Don't Stop Crabs!
Tainted bed sheets, throw them in a garbage bag
Safe Sex Don't Stop Crabs!
Disease ridden, need to report to the nearest lab
Safe Sex Don't Stop Crabs!
STD's for the rich and for the poor dressed in rags
Safe Sex Don't...
#illness
#MentalHealth
#satirical
#sex
#CallToAction
125 reads
13 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
8th Jan 2025 1:56pm
8th Jan 2025 1:56pm
Negativity of a troll
What would make a troll be filled with negativity vibes, that will affect you in ways that makes no sense what so ever. TO try to force there negativity upon someone else, who doesn't deal with individuals of that kind of a mind set of nothing. But rhetoric that doesn't do anything but cause, division of separation of the worst kind of mental stimulation, like these often seeing the same acts of the Democrats party. As those who know have seen time and after time. 😞 YET they continue to attack with no regards to the damages, that they costs you in unbearable emotional stress and...
#cancer
#depression
#disability
#illness
#PTSD
76 reads
2 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
6th Jan 2025 8:36pm
6th Jan 2025 8:36pm
A Plague of The Blood
Hiding behind these castle gates
The peasantry left to crueler fates
Mounting piles of the nameless dead
While within, we prosper, well-fed
Let the wretched masses die
And let their lifeless corpses lie
Crimson rivers endlessly flow
From orifices where the red devil shows
The maroon death leaves its cursed mark
Counting breaths till light turns dark
But here, within these hallowed walls
We scoff as the outside world falls
Among my noble peers, I confide
We’re safe, immune to the strife outside
Let the...
The peasantry left to crueler fates
Mounting piles of the nameless dead
While within, we prosper, well-fed
Let the wretched masses die
And let their lifeless corpses lie
Crimson rivers endlessly flow
From orifices where the red devil shows
The maroon death leaves its cursed mark
Counting breaths till light turns dark
But here, within these hallowed walls
We scoff as the outside world falls
Among my noble peers, I confide
We’re safe, immune to the strife outside
Let the...
#anxiety
#dark
#death
#fear
#illness
62 reads
0 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
5th Jan 2025 12:58pm
5th Jan 2025 12:58pm
I heard she's happier now
A husband & wife living in Philadelphia had been married for over 25 years. He faithfully visited his wife in the hospital everyday, where she laid in a coma for several months in 1999 with little hope for recovery. Distraught over the loss of his longtime companion, the husband committed suicide in their home. Hours later, his wife woke up!
#illness
#love
#marriage
#ShortStory
#suicide
66 reads
13 Comments
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
4th Jan 2025 6:49pm
4th Jan 2025 6:49pm
He worked hard for his money...
The fatigue shows in his eyes...
He worked 16 straight hours...again.
He loves her and provides for her.
She is his everything!
His breathing is labored at times.
He thinks he is coming down with a cold.
He can't miss work. Too many bills!
He can't afford to miss work!
The job is strenuous. He is not young.
He runs a temp. Again, the probable cold!
He is sweating and needs a cool drink.
There wasn't much time today to hydrate.
His body hurts. Overwork or age?
He swallows another handful of asprin.
Aspirin...
He worked 16 straight hours...again.
He loves her and provides for her.
She is his everything!
His breathing is labored at times.
He thinks he is coming down with a cold.
He can't miss work. Too many bills!
He can't afford to miss work!
The job is strenuous. He is not young.
He runs a temp. Again, the probable cold!
He is sweating and needs a cool drink.
There wasn't much time today to hydrate.
His body hurts. Overwork or age?
He swallows another handful of asprin.
Aspirin...
#hurt
#illness
#LifeStruggles
51 reads
2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
30th Dec 2024 8:04pm
30th Dec 2024 8:04pm
Vomit flesh on your sagging breasts
The two of them are in the bathtub
They grope at each other
Their weak, sagging flesh
Stinking gas comes from their genitalia
The water turns black
They kiss
They vomit into each other's mouths
The flesh hangs from their bones as they grab
He grabs at the rotting breast
Come lover, let's go to bed
Spiders crawl out of her snatch
They want to fuck so bad they can taste it in each other's mouths
They are fucking like pigs
They do it with the lights off, so they won't be mutually disgusted by the sight of their flesh
They do...
They grope at each other
Their weak, sagging flesh
Stinking gas comes from their genitalia
The water turns black
They kiss
They vomit into each other's mouths
The flesh hangs from their bones as they grab
He grabs at the rotting breast
Come lover, let's go to bed
Spiders crawl out of her snatch
They want to fuck so bad they can taste it in each other's mouths
They are fucking like pigs
They do it with the lights off, so they won't be mutually disgusted by the sight of their flesh
They do...
#dark
#death
#illness
#sex
#war
83 reads
5 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
28th Dec 2024 8:11pm
28th Dec 2024 8:11pm
Burning Lips
Burning, tingling here it comes
Lip growing fatter
Congratulations, a viral lump
Over the counter meds do shit
Dare to eat any citrus
Better on your lip then your clit!
Cold-sore aka Herpes
Needs to run it's course
It'll be gone in a week or two
Avoid oral during intercourse
Lip growing fatter
Congratulations, a viral lump
Over the counter meds do shit
Dare to eat any citrus
Better on your lip then your clit!
Cold-sore aka Herpes
Needs to run it's course
It'll be gone in a week or two
Avoid oral during intercourse
#dirty
#illness
#motivational
#satirical
#sex
134 reads
6 Comments
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