Poems About Hurt Seeking Honest Critique
#hurt
Poems about hurt seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
The Tortoise
Years turn to decades,
Thirteen to be exact.
Scars enclose my carcass,
Almost hollow.
The pale touch of the leaves,
The pain.
Sensitivity pings my nerves,
I just want to rest.
One step forward and another staggered,
It's almost the end for the tortoise.
Thirteen to be exact.
Scars enclose my carcass,
Almost hollow.
The pale touch of the leaves,
The pain.
Sensitivity pings my nerves,
I just want to rest.
One step forward and another staggered,
It's almost the end for the tortoise.
#hope
#death
#gratitude #hurt
#gratitude #hurt
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Life sadness
Sometimes I feel like I am just a lost boy
in a fucked-up world.
My mind is so cluttered,
I'm an over thinker,
I guess you would blame it on
posttraumatic stress disorder.
Under the assumption that
she just wanted attention,
you decided to ignore her.
You failed to realize that somebody,
somewhere would fucking adore her
in a fucked-up world.
My mind is so cluttered,
I'm an over thinker,
I guess you would blame it on
posttraumatic stress disorder.
Under the assumption that
she just wanted attention,
you decided to ignore her.
You failed to realize that somebody,
somewhere would fucking adore her
#sadness
#dark
#hurt
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Dark Eyes
Effortless words and actions
Never cease to provoke a reaction
Both physically and emotionally
It’s brought to the brink my fragile sanity.
Yet here I am the same masochist
Giving into the same temptation rather than resist
The urge to continue this doomed chase
Will I ever fall back into grace?
I’m addicted to you like a drug
I can’t ever seem to have enough
I’ve been taken by those dark eyes
That pierce into my soul and consume my light.
Never cease to provoke a reaction
Both physically and emotionally
It’s brought to the brink my fragile sanity.
Yet here I am the same masochist
Giving into the same temptation rather than resist
The urge to continue this doomed chase
Will I ever fall back into grace?
I’m addicted to you like a drug
I can’t ever seem to have enough
I’ve been taken by those dark eyes
That pierce into my soul and consume my light.
#dark
#rhyming
#confusion #hurt
#confusion #hurt
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head ache, concert hall
the tones that would normally wash over and clean,
cannot cleanse,
the toxins that are with me today,
every operatic reach and musical swell,
sends sharp pains into my head.
I still can enjoy the music
cannot cleanse,
the toxins that are with me today,
every operatic reach and musical swell,
sends sharp pains into my head.
I still can enjoy the music
#music
#hurt
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Untitled
I don't see the point in pouring my heart out, sooner lay cement on a bed of sodden sand, more stable a foundation would it create than anything we've ever made. Id rather lay for days in the dark, with greater a chance that the impossible might occur and beneath me would dry.
I'd put my money on me dying than you ever not denying what you did. Float from my body but still I bare witness and cannot forgive the trespasses, penetrating my soul, to drag it up with callous claws, opening holes half buried, suck me into the underbelly and spit me out at the end.
I cannot...
I'd put my money on me dying than you ever not denying what you did. Float from my body but still I bare witness and cannot forgive the trespasses, penetrating my soul, to drag it up with callous claws, opening holes half buried, suck me into the underbelly and spit me out at the end.
I cannot...
#love
#hurt
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Heart Break Is...
When a happy heart keeps brewing love as a drink to share...
Then realizes there is no longer anyone sipping from the cup
Then realizes there is no longer anyone sipping from the cup
#heartbroken
#breakup
#hurt
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Rain
The rain
comes down
Like pellets
As blue as
The pain in
My heart
I am nothing
If not
Your prisoner
Longing to be
Set free
comes down
Like pellets
As blue as
The pain in
My heart
I am nothing
If not
Your prisoner
Longing to be
Set free
#anxiety
#hurt
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Plan for the future - part two
#lust
#BDSM
#vampires
#hurt
#Romanticism
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I Thought I Knew Her So Well
Brody finds himself
becoming a broken
man after finding his
wife Sarah naked in
bed and with their
next door neighbor
Wilma on top of her.
becoming a broken
man after finding his
wife Sarah naked in
bed and with their
next door neighbor
Wilma on top of her.
#lesbian
#fiction
#FreeVerse
#sensual
#hurt
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Such a bitch
On a Tuesday
My soul was crushed
Smashed into dust
Skin turned to rust
She ripped out my spirit
A bitch, and she knew it
You look away for one minute
Pushed past your limit
Such a radiant beast
Yet you’ll be her feast
You are her meat
Forever deceased
Don’t be deceived by her hair
At her locks you must tear
For a daily fight I prepare
Her presence, I truly can’t bare
On my nerves does she grate
A person one can only hate
On my mind is a weight
In her grasps...
My soul was crushed
Smashed into dust
Skin turned to rust
She ripped out my spirit
A bitch, and she knew it
You look away for one minute
Pushed past your limit
Such a radiant beast
Yet you’ll be her feast
You are her meat
Forever deceased
Don’t be deceived by her hair
At her locks you must tear
For a daily fight I prepare
Her presence, I truly can’t bare
On my nerves does she grate
A person one can only hate
On my mind is a weight
In her grasps...
#anger
#hate
#hurt
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Letting Go
tears of scorn, I am yet torn
weeping in the steel noise
it is utter chaos
to walk a long way around
to find yourself trapped
beholden and in love
my heart is a traitor
hurt blooms within like wounds on a white shirt
my blood pours from the soul
confessing my weaknesses against my will
my honesty is in my eyes
they never lie
I feel myself letting go
my heart is breaking
"the pace is too fast it just won't last"
to quote Chester Linkin Park
I'm being dragged by a speeding car ...
weeping in the steel noise
it is utter chaos
to walk a long way around
to find yourself trapped
beholden and in love
my heart is a traitor
hurt blooms within like wounds on a white shirt
my blood pours from the soul
confessing my weaknesses against my will
my honesty is in my eyes
they never lie
I feel myself letting go
my heart is breaking
"the pace is too fast it just won't last"
to quote Chester Linkin Park
I'm being dragged by a speeding car ...
#love
#heartbroken
#hurt
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I've Had It With That Cheating Whore!
Eric found a hidden videotape.
It shows David humping Kate so hard.
Eric... now... wants a divorce.
It shows David humping Kate so hard.
Eric... now... wants a divorce.
#porn
#fiction
#suffering
#sensual
#hurt
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DU Poetry : Poems About Hurt Seeking Honest Critique