Poems About Heaven Seeking Honest Critique
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Poems about heaven seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
oldmanG
Poem Published
16th Oct 2024 1:43am
16th Oct 2024 1:43am
Valley of the Gods
Valley of the Gods
The fog forms a halo
Around majesty in rock form
Can’t pass through have to go around
Thorny path uneven and unnerving
Deep in blue canyon a waterfall
Narrow beauty moss on the walls
Mist dips down and rolls over
Rain falls pitter patter
Rising sun orange blaze
Go with the torrent ride the surge
Walk down the waterfall
Descend down time
A split in Mother Earth
Sliver of water so deep
Look up and see a small slice of heaven
Emerge on...
The fog forms a halo
Around majesty in rock form
Can’t pass through have to go around
Thorny path uneven and unnerving
Deep in blue canyon a waterfall
Narrow beauty moss on the walls
Mist dips down and rolls over
Rain falls pitter patter
Rising sun orange blaze
Go with the torrent ride the surge
Walk down the waterfall
Descend down time
A split in Mother Earth
Sliver of water so deep
Look up and see a small slice of heaven
Emerge on...
#heaven
#sun
#utopia
72 reads
2 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
9th Oct 2024 9:27pm
9th Oct 2024 9:27pm
Tear in Heaven
Something about dropping a tear into heaven
Galaxy away see a small hole
Floating and spinning
On the horizon
Stand like skywalker
Smaller than a pebble
Drops down from above
Must be from heaven
Set my eye see a smile in the crowd
Feet set in position
Fight through the starts
Know destiny in you
Drops of heaven drizzling on me
Shots of infamy or destiny
Who decides is me and my god
Not a case of doing right by Cure
Hypnotized by baptism
Of false satans and gods ...
Galaxy away see a small hole
Floating and spinning
On the horizon
Stand like skywalker
Smaller than a pebble
Drops down from above
Must be from heaven
Set my eye see a smile in the crowd
Feet set in position
Fight through the starts
Know destiny in you
Drops of heaven drizzling on me
Shots of infamy or destiny
Who decides is me and my god
Not a case of doing right by Cure
Hypnotized by baptism
Of false satans and gods ...
#heaven
#money
#morality #sports
#morality #sports
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
5th Oct 2024 4:14am
5th Oct 2024 4:14am
Heavenly Glories Unmatched
By seven stars, the heavens weave their thread
In sacred numbers, secrets are outspread
The One who speaks in fire and still, small voice
Hath formed the world in sevens, by His choice
In threefold power, mysteries doth arise,
The trinity concealed in earth and skies
For three and one, the paths of light are shown
By twelve, the gates of heaven are made known
Twelve tribes, twelve stones, the pillars of the land
And twelve the stars that crowneth wisdom’s hand
By forty days, the flood doth cleanse the earth
By forty...
In sacred numbers, secrets are outspread
The One who speaks in fire and still, small voice
Hath formed the world in sevens, by His choice
In threefold power, mysteries doth arise,
The trinity concealed in earth and skies
For three and one, the paths of light are shown
By twelve, the gates of heaven are made known
Twelve tribes, twelve stones, the pillars of the land
And twelve the stars that crowneth wisdom’s hand
By forty days, the flood doth cleanse the earth
By forty...
#heaven
#magic
130 reads
4 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
4th Oct 2024 5:41am
4th Oct 2024 5:41am
Valentine Day Massacre
St Valentine’s Day Massacre
Better hope you’re somewhere else but here
40 feet wide if you’re inside you’re dead in an instant
But saints and devils are in our everyday it comes to
Who you choose whose side you’re on can’t sit on a fence
If you do you give up your soul your inner being
You’ll rot in hell in a jail cell if you’re lucky but luck looks away
So you’ll die the same way you paid for slice your carotid artery
Or a bullet in the back of the head dick and balls in your throat
...
Better hope you’re somewhere else but here
40 feet wide if you’re inside you’re dead in an instant
But saints and devils are in our everyday it comes to
Who you choose whose side you’re on can’t sit on a fence
If you do you give up your soul your inner being
You’ll rot in hell in a jail cell if you’re lucky but luck looks away
So you’ll die the same way you paid for slice your carotid artery
Or a bullet in the back of the head dick and balls in your throat
...
#devil
#earth
#God #heaven
#God #heaven
70 reads
0 Comments
DamianDeadLove
Poem Published
4th Oct 2024 5:30am
4th Oct 2024 5:30am
Foolish Pride
Racing against this thing called time
When I was young thought I had forever
Taking everyday life with a grain of salt
Risking it all for the sake of being clever
Once the moment passes it’s likely gone
Precious memories forgotten and lost
Waking up underneath this blistered dawn
Death covers me within the morning frost
Don’t wanna say goodbye to those I love
Tame this sorrow that flows deep inside
She holds my hand while speaking softly
Washing away sin nestled in foolish pride
When I was young thought I had forever
Taking everyday life with a grain of salt
Risking it all for the sake of being clever
Once the moment passes it’s likely gone
Precious memories forgotten and lost
Waking up underneath this blistered dawn
Death covers me within the morning frost
Don’t wanna say goodbye to those I love
Tame this sorrow that flows deep inside
She holds my hand while speaking softly
Washing away sin nestled in foolish pride
#heaven
172 reads
20 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
25th Sep 2024 8:36pm
25th Sep 2024 8:36pm
Ring Bells of Perdition
When life at last begins to fade
And shadows fall where light once played
A sound, so low, so dark, is heard
Not hymn nor chant, nor kindly word
It grows an iron echo fills the air
A mournful toll, a cry of deep despair
The damned, they hear it,O, that fateful knell
The grim refrain that binds them unto Hell
In gloom it rises, cold and grim
The sound that signals death’s cruel whim
No angel's choir, no gentle call
But hollow bells that herald the fall
Their peal is slow, a measured dread
It wakes the souls of the...
And shadows fall where light once played
A sound, so low, so dark, is heard
Not hymn nor chant, nor kindly word
It grows an iron echo fills the air
A mournful toll, a cry of deep despair
The damned, they hear it,O, that fateful knell
The grim refrain that binds them unto Hell
In gloom it rises, cold and grim
The sound that signals death’s cruel whim
No angel's choir, no gentle call
But hollow bells that herald the fall
Their peal is slow, a measured dread
It wakes the souls of the...
#death
#heaven
#hell
#religion
#rhyming
68 reads
0 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
13th Sep 2024 8:45pm
13th Sep 2024 8:45pm
Enochian Songs Triumphant
O radiant light from Heaven’s peak
In hosts of angels, fierce and meek
Each choir adorned with crowns of grace
Each triumph sealed in holy place
Seraphim blaze with endless flame
Their wings a torch, their voice proclaim
They sing of love that never fades
In fire’s heart, their spirit wades
Cherubim hold wisdom’s key
Their eyes perceive eternity
They guard the gates of Heaven’s span
Where mortal mind may never scan
The Thrones in majesty reside
Their power flows like oceans wide
In judgment pure, they...
In hosts of angels, fierce and meek
Each choir adorned with crowns of grace
Each triumph sealed in holy place
Seraphim blaze with endless flame
Their wings a torch, their voice proclaim
They sing of love that never fades
In fire’s heart, their spirit wades
Cherubim hold wisdom’s key
Their eyes perceive eternity
They guard the gates of Heaven’s span
Where mortal mind may never scan
The Thrones in majesty reside
Their power flows like oceans wide
In judgment pure, they...
#angels
#Christian
#God
#heaven
#rhyming
108 reads
0 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
13th Sep 2024 8:28pm
13th Sep 2024 8:28pm
Sanctus Sanguinis
O blessed Blood, most pure and bright
Poured forth from Heaven’s sacred rite
Thy crimson tide, our sins doth cleanse
In Thee, O Christ, our hope begins
Thy chalice raised in holy hands
Doth shine with love, an eternal plan
We drink, O Lord, and hearts are stirred
By sacred wine and holy Word
O Blood of Lamb, O Blood divine
Thy mercy flows, transcendent sign
In sacrifice, Thou hast been slain
And through Thy Blood, sangreal pain
In mystic form, Thy Flesh we take
Thy Blood doth heal the hearts that ache
By...
Poured forth from Heaven’s sacred rite
Thy crimson tide, our sins doth cleanse
In Thee, O Christ, our hope begins
Thy chalice raised in holy hands
Doth shine with love, an eternal plan
We drink, O Lord, and hearts are stirred
By sacred wine and holy Word
O Blood of Lamb, O Blood divine
Thy mercy flows, transcendent sign
In sacrifice, Thou hast been slain
And through Thy Blood, sangreal pain
In mystic form, Thy Flesh we take
Thy Blood doth heal the hearts that ache
By...
#angels
#Christian
#God
#heaven
#prayer
105 reads
0 Comments
dartford
Paul S...
Paul S...
Poem Published
11th Sep 2024 1:00am
11th Sep 2024 1:00am
anxiety in the city
and as I walk down
the street
they
ignore me, I say,
the only thing we have in common,
apart from
our common humanity,
of course,
is that
we’re strangers,
and all that entails,
the inherent
dangers ..
the street
they
ignore me, I say,
the only thing we have in common,
apart from
our common humanity,
of course,
is that
we’re strangers,
and all that entails,
the inherent
dangers ..
#heaven
#hell
#utopia
103 reads
3 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
14th Aug 2024 12:03pm
14th Aug 2024 12:03pm
Sol's Regent
O Uriel, thou Regent of the Sun's bright flame,
In Heaven’s court, thy radiance doth shine,
With wings of gold, thou dost bear His name,
And guard the light with countenance divine
Thy gaze doth pierce the shadows dark and deep,
Where wicked foes in trembling fear abide,
Thy sword of fire doth all in justice keep,
As thou dost lead with Heaven’s light as guide
O blazing star, thy brilliance none may veil,
Thy glory in the heavens none can bind,
Through thee, the light of God shall ne’er grow pale,
For in thy...
In Heaven’s court, thy radiance doth shine,
With wings of gold, thou dost bear His name,
And guard the light with countenance divine
Thy gaze doth pierce the shadows dark and deep,
Where wicked foes in trembling fear abide,
Thy sword of fire doth all in justice keep,
As thou dost lead with Heaven’s light as guide
O blazing star, thy brilliance none may veil,
Thy glory in the heavens none can bind,
Through thee, the light of God shall ne’er grow pale,
For in thy...
#angels
#Christian
#heaven
#religion
#rhyming
79 reads
0 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
7th Aug 2024 10:25pm
7th Aug 2024 10:25pm
That Which Guards What Cannot Be Reclaimed
In Eden's gate, where once pure bliss did reign,
Now stands a guard, with visage fierce and plain.
Archangel Gabriel, with sword of flame,
Doth bar the path, where none may stake their claim.
His eyes, like stars, with piercing light doth gleam,
And none may pass, nor even dare to dream.
The sword he wields, in fire’s eternal blaze,
Cuts through the night, in bright and deadly haze.
A sacred charge, this garden to defend,
From mortal hands that seek their fall to mend.
Yet dark it seems, this hallowed, guarded place, ...
Now stands a guard, with visage fierce and plain.
Archangel Gabriel, with sword of flame,
Doth bar the path, where none may stake their claim.
His eyes, like stars, with piercing light doth gleam,
And none may pass, nor even dare to dream.
The sword he wields, in fire’s eternal blaze,
Cuts through the night, in bright and deadly haze.
A sacred charge, this garden to defend,
From mortal hands that seek their fall to mend.
Yet dark it seems, this hallowed, guarded place, ...
#angels
#Christian
#heaven
#religion
#rhyming
95 reads
0 Comments
Dreamer4ever1979
Poem Published
7th Aug 2024 10:50am
7th Aug 2024 10:50am
When Spirit Takes Me Home(Lyric)
When spirit takes me home!
Straight into the clouds.... high above...where my father is.
This heart will rejoice on that day!
Coming into your arms...true loves comfort.... pain forever ends.
When spirit takes me home.
I'm staring at those stars again.
Amazed by the wonder.... knowing your love is out there.
I can't help but think.... about the day.... when I enter and sing!!!
When spirit takes me home!
Straight into the clouds...high above...where my father is.
This heart will rejoice on that day!
Coming into yours...
Straight into the clouds.... high above...where my father is.
This heart will rejoice on that day!
Coming into your arms...true loves comfort.... pain forever ends.
When spirit takes me home.
I'm staring at those stars again.
Amazed by the wonder.... knowing your love is out there.
I can't help but think.... about the day.... when I enter and sing!!!
When spirit takes me home!
Straight into the clouds...high above...where my father is.
This heart will rejoice on that day!
Coming into yours...
#Christian
#God
#heaven
#love
#relationships
111 reads
2 Comments
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