Poems About Friendship Seeking Honest Critique
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Poems about friendship seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Fishmander
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:34pm
Yesterday 6:34pm
Sunkissed
Crawling all up in my brain
Pieces that shadow behind
Faint echo of crashing train
Equal from which I can't hide
Drifting on I will atone
Like stars that reflect at night
Flares up mangled nerve and bone
As Cancer cold chokes me tight
Coursing through blackened and feeds
Ashes remaining contrived
Writhing this teasing then flees
Less once more I have survived.
Pieces that shadow behind
Faint echo of crashing train
Equal from which I can't hide
Drifting on I will atone
Like stars that reflect at night
Flares up mangled nerve and bone
As Cancer cold chokes me tight
Coursing through blackened and feeds
Ashes remaining contrived
Writhing this teasing then flees
Less once more I have survived.
#anxiety
#love
#dark
#friendship
#SelfReflection
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wallyroo92
Poem Published
29th Jun 2022 7:38pm
29th Jun 2022 7:38pm
30 Years
Every once in a while I wake up in a panic
“I haven’t finished my English paper and it’s due today!”
“I didn’t tape my drumsticks and it’s competition day!”
Only to realize damn! it’s been three decades
From that small dread comes a sigh of relief
I’m forty-eight years old
With more and more aches in my bones
But also with some nostalgia
The time seems to have gone by so fast
I look at the old year-book and wonder
What happened him?
Or her?
Rest peace here
I wonder what transpired there
After graduation this...
“I haven’t finished my English paper and it’s due today!”
“I didn’t tape my drumsticks and it’s competition day!”
Only to realize damn! it’s been three decades
From that small dread comes a sigh of relief
I’m forty-eight years old
With more and more aches in my bones
But also with some nostalgia
The time seems to have gone by so fast
I look at the old year-book and wonder
What happened him?
Or her?
Rest peace here
I wonder what transpired there
After graduation this...
#friendship
#memories
#aging #nostalgia
#aging #nostalgia
40 reads
4 Comments
MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
28th Jun 2022 00:59am
28th Jun 2022 00:59am
NOVUS ORDO SECLORUM
It's with our libraries and teapots
That we cultivate civility
And marvel at concomitant thoughts
In a land of both the brave and the free!
It's how we spend our cloudier days,
For in contemplation lay a story,
And pots and books are the means and ways
Of arriving at cerebral glory...
Or something like the providential eye
And the emanating beams thereof
Which permeate our American sky
With nothing less than our dreams of love,
Showing the world that every day...
Happy pursuits are the AMERICAN WAY!
That we cultivate civility
And marvel at concomitant thoughts
In a land of both the brave and the free!
It's how we spend our cloudier days,
For in contemplation lay a story,
And pots and books are the means and ways
Of arriving at cerebral glory...
Or something like the providential eye
And the emanating beams thereof
Which permeate our American sky
With nothing less than our dreams of love,
Showing the world that every day...
Happy pursuits are the AMERICAN WAY!
#kindness
#friendship
#peace
#tolerance
#success
36 reads
2 Comments
Cloven_Zonkle
Poem Published
24th Jun 2022 5:37pm
24th Jun 2022 5:37pm
You Show Me Where I Am In Error
And I hasten to correct myself
#love
#friendship
#TruthOfLife #honesty
#TruthOfLife #honesty
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Indie
Miss Indie
Miss Indie
Poem Published
20th Jun 2022 00:09am
20th Jun 2022 00:09am
everyone has shadows
There's a violence
in your bones
my inner
dark romantic loves
But I'll never
hold you that way
those dreams
are long gone
lost to reality
and time and the
realisation that
not all bridges
are worth crossing
especially the ones
that we constantly
light on fire
I've lived by the motto
don't ask, don't tell
when it comes to way
your hands curl into fists
ready to break things
I can't see
can't know about
because it's better for us both
if I don't know...
in your bones
my inner
dark romantic loves
But I'll never
hold you that way
those dreams
are long gone
lost to reality
and time and the
realisation that
not all bridges
are worth crossing
especially the ones
that we constantly
light on fire
I've lived by the motto
don't ask, don't tell
when it comes to way
your hands curl into fists
ready to break things
I can't see
can't know about
because it's better for us both
if I don't know...
#dark
#friendship
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blaberidae
Poem Published
19th Jun 2022 7:53am
19th Jun 2022 7:53am
And Nothing Was Said
You can smell them on my breath, all the words that have deliquesced
And all that would dribble down my chin—the ink, idioms, everything
Sits now in the pits of stained teeth, stagnant and thin
I might spin another thesis with frayed strings
I might embellish these stiffened strands with rosemary sprigs
I might reach again for the dictionary and begin—
So I begin!
And I begin . . .
But then I digress
And all that would dribble down my chin—the ink, idioms, everything
Sits now in the pits of stained teeth, stagnant and thin
I might spin another thesis with frayed strings
I might embellish these stiffened strands with rosemary sprigs
I might reach again for the dictionary and begin—
So I begin!
And I begin . . .
But then I digress
#anxiety
#loneliness
#relationships #friendship
#relationships #friendship
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2 Comments
Sandals
Poem Published
19th Jun 2022 6:57am
19th Jun 2022 6:57am
Just Me Asking
Hey lady babe ah behold up
My name is Dearae Young
U look so ah beautiful to me
Upon u I've become sprung
If it's ok with u and mine
This of u do not
May I ask u for a date u got
Free time where u and I
Could go to an ah restaurant
And discuss an ah relationship
Even if u smoke blunts
Mr. Dearae I'm Tuiloka and
My last name is Daizu
But I'm ah womanly ah only
I don't have interest in u
So I can't because my affections
To me do truly ah say
That life in the pie with fingers
Is...
My name is Dearae Young
U look so ah beautiful to me
Upon u I've become sprung
If it's ok with u and mine
This of u do not
May I ask u for a date u got
Free time where u and I
Could go to an ah restaurant
And discuss an ah relationship
Even if u smoke blunts
Mr. Dearae I'm Tuiloka and
My last name is Daizu
But I'm ah womanly ah only
I don't have interest in u
So I can't because my affections
To me do truly ah say
That life in the pie with fingers
Is...
#love
#friendship
#support
#respect
#responsibility
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Indie
Miss Indie
Miss Indie
Poem Published
17th Jun 2022 2:33am
17th Jun 2022 2:33am
the tree is still beautiful without its leaves
I watch her grow
and then tear off her limbs
for a man that doesn't
love her right
Self realisation
isn't always freeing
when you're held under
and told to suck it up
because deep down
he's a good man
provides his family
drinks too much
spends all his free time
in video games
and doesn't understand sex
is a two sided affair
And maybe she'd have left him
if they didn't have a kid
but there's stability in his job
and it's nice not living in poverty
though the psychological...
and then tear off her limbs
for a man that doesn't
love her right
Self realisation
isn't always freeing
when you're held under
and told to suck it up
because deep down
he's a good man
provides his family
drinks too much
spends all his free time
in video games
and doesn't understand sex
is a two sided affair
And maybe she'd have left him
if they didn't have a kid
but there's stability in his job
and it's nice not living in poverty
though the psychological...
#friendship
#LifeStruggles
#DomesticViolence
78 reads
3 Comments
Wafflenose
Ellie
Ellie
Poem Published
12th Jun 2022 9:46pm
12th Jun 2022 9:46pm
Crescendo
Somebody close to me is hurting.
I don't know who it is
or what has happened,
but uneasiness has settled upon me.
It's almost musical—
a quality I would enjoy
under different circumstances:
my nerves reverberate
as though they have been plucked;
my heart beats, drum-like and hard;
soon my teeth might join in
chattering in syncopation.
I'm in a slow crescendo
which can only be silenced
when I hear that all is well,
or fall into sleep,
whichever comes first.
I don't know who it is
or what has happened,
but uneasiness has settled upon me.
It's almost musical—
a quality I would enjoy
under different circumstances:
my nerves reverberate
as though they have been plucked;
my heart beats, drum-like and hard;
soon my teeth might join in
chattering in syncopation.
I'm in a slow crescendo
which can only be silenced
when I hear that all is well,
or fall into sleep,
whichever comes first.
#anxiety
#family
#friendship #music
#friendship #music
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2 Comments
Indie
Miss Indie
Miss Indie
Poem Published
11th Jun 2022 1:08am
11th Jun 2022 1:08am
vicarious appreciation
They live chaotic lives
mine is boring in comparison
though I don't mind living
vicariously through them
before going home
to a white picket fence cliche
that I've learnt to appreciate
because I've been on the other side
where every day is madness
and I didn't give a shit
whether or not
I lived or died
in any given moment
every bad decision
feeling like a good one at the time
I've earned this peace of mind
I've fought for it
lost friends for it
left whole worlds behind
just to hold on...
mine is boring in comparison
though I don't mind living
vicariously through them
before going home
to a white picket fence cliche
that I've learnt to appreciate
because I've been on the other side
where every day is madness
and I didn't give a shit
whether or not
I lived or died
in any given moment
every bad decision
feeling like a good one at the time
I've earned this peace of mind
I've fought for it
lost friends for it
left whole worlds behind
just to hold on...
#friendship
#alcohol
#drugs
100 reads
4 Comments
Indie
Miss Indie
Miss Indie
Poem Published
10th Jun 2022 11:30pm
10th Jun 2022 11:30pm
J
She grew up with a coffin
as a coffee table
knows way too much about guns
loves bad boys who fuck
like demi gods
and hates being alone
She spends half her time stoned
is a good mum
with the patience of a saint
can't cook anything
that doesn't come out of a packet
she makes chicken nuggets
look like a gourmet meal
and has asked me so many times
to teach her how to cook
though we never find the time
She's been clean 6 years now
lost custody of her kid
for being a meth head ...
as a coffee table
knows way too much about guns
loves bad boys who fuck
like demi gods
and hates being alone
She spends half her time stoned
is a good mum
with the patience of a saint
can't cook anything
that doesn't come out of a packet
she makes chicken nuggets
look like a gourmet meal
and has asked me so many times
to teach her how to cook
though we never find the time
She's been clean 6 years now
lost custody of her kid
for being a meth head ...
#love
#friendship
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2 Comments
Fishmander
Poem Published
10th Jun 2022 9:34pm
10th Jun 2022 9:34pm
Tattoo
Chased down by the allure
Badgered by our past
Who is gonna love us now
Needles start to puncture
Conscience in the trash
Who are we without us now
Faces start to fester
Playgrounds fade to black
Enlightened by our self doubt
Should have died here after
Courage we both lack
Halls where demons aren't allowed
Stare into our poison
Lap up every drop
Look at how the tattoo sings
Adorned by a pattern
Promises forgot
This is what obsession brings.
Badgered by our past
Who is gonna love us now
Needles start to puncture
Conscience in the trash
Who are we without us now
Faces start to fester
Playgrounds fade to black
Enlightened by our self doubt
Should have died here after
Courage we both lack
Halls where demons aren't allowed
Stare into our poison
Lap up every drop
Look at how the tattoo sings
Adorned by a pattern
Promises forgot
This is what obsession brings.
#love
#dark
#friendship
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