Poems About Fate Seeking Honest Critique
#fate
Poems about fate seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
finish line finished
the minutes
hours
days
weeks
months
years
pass by me like a Farrari
on the Autobahn with it's
gas pedal nailed to the
floor board
and I'm stuck in an old beaten
down Ford with one cylinder
going south, an oil leak, four
tires going bald and low
on air
hours
days
weeks
months
years
pass by me like a Farrari
on the Autobahn with it's
gas pedal nailed to the
floor board
and I'm stuck in an old beaten
down Ford with one cylinder
going south, an oil leak, four
tires going bald and low
on air
#fate
#aging
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Hope
Abused child
the misery shows
thinking of the past
born in a prison
with no piece of mind
runs to the light
hopeful dreams
tomorrow's a new beginning
the misery shows
thinking of the past
born in a prison
with no piece of mind
runs to the light
hopeful dreams
tomorrow's a new beginning
#hope
#abuse
#fate #fiction
#fate #fiction
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8 Comments
Ruined Icon
A manifestation
the world became flesh
I was created to suffer
touched and left for dead
flames scorch my bleeding soul
earth burns a malignant glow
the world became flesh
I was created to suffer
touched and left for dead
flames scorch my bleeding soul
earth burns a malignant glow
#dark
#dreams
#fire
#fate
#fiction
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SOS
poetry can not save
you
a thousand beautiful, sensual
bodies over a lifetime
can not save
you
endless bottles of dom
perignon can
not save
you
walking along the white
cliffs of Dover can
not save
you
monkeys resting in tree
top sunshine and
a bed of roses
can not save
you
the decapitated heads of
influencers with their
stink of manipulation
can not save
you
Bach, van Gogh, Rand,
Martha Graham, The
Rolling Stones can...
you
a thousand beautiful, sensual
bodies over a lifetime
can not save
you
endless bottles of dom
perignon can
not save
you
walking along the white
cliffs of Dover can
not save
you
monkeys resting in tree
top sunshine and
a bed of roses
can not save
you
the decapitated heads of
influencers with their
stink of manipulation
can not save
you
Bach, van Gogh, Rand,
Martha Graham, The
Rolling Stones can...
#fate
69 reads
8 Comments
Forests of Twilight
In blackened dreams
a mist descends from the hills
Unsuspecting
Only the dust moves,
like a funeral veil of melancholy
Sorrow
The traveler of unknown plains
through darkness & light
Confused
Flowers of desirable bloom
Lethal in touch and smell
Death
a mist descends from the hills
Unsuspecting
Only the dust moves,
like a funeral veil of melancholy
Sorrow
The traveler of unknown plains
through darkness & light
Confused
Flowers of desirable bloom
Lethal in touch and smell
Death
#sadness
#dark
#nature
#fate
#travel
69 reads
11 Comments
Exit Stage Left
Looking outside and inside
Pressures,
Barriers,
PANIC!!
Today is a fine day to escape
Morals are broken
Unknown mystery to my fate
Accept my soul as I release,
Wishing for everlasting peace
Pressures,
Barriers,
PANIC!!
Today is a fine day to escape
Morals are broken
Unknown mystery to my fate
Accept my soul as I release,
Wishing for everlasting peace
#anxiety
#death
#fate #rhyming
#fate #rhyming
72 reads
10 Comments
I Fell
Sleepless nights with the clock ticking by
I’ve been grounded for so long with no access to the sky
It seemed rather destined that I had met you
Seeds planted long ago had finally emerged to bloom.
I fell. I fell so hard
Nothing could have stopped this
You’ve managed to lower my guard
My heart yearns for your touch and your kiss.
You’ve reignited my slumbering passion
In marvelous ways that I could never have imagined
You have a way of speaking directly to my soul
Your love had seeped through to fill in the black hole.
...
I’ve been grounded for so long with no access to the sky
It seemed rather destined that I had met you
Seeds planted long ago had finally emerged to bloom.
I fell. I fell so hard
Nothing could have stopped this
You’ve managed to lower my guard
My heart yearns for your touch and your kiss.
You’ve reignited my slumbering passion
In marvelous ways that I could never have imagined
You have a way of speaking directly to my soul
Your love had seeped through to fill in the black hole.
...
#love
#boyfriend
#fate
#rhyming
#FallingInLove
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4 Comments
the mess
whether walking on the
dangerous icy roads of
love
or eating small Viennise
wiennies out of a tin
whether searching for
a purpose bigger than
then the pale phantoms
of dreams
or losing bits and pieces
of life to the wealth of
shadows
time has no wings, but
still flys like an angry
Falcone preying on
vermin
the beginning of the
end is the ends beginning
and is some kind of sick
joke that only the gods
could understand ...
dangerous icy roads of
love
or eating small Viennise
wiennies out of a tin
whether searching for
a purpose bigger than
then the pale phantoms
of dreams
or losing bits and pieces
of life to the wealth of
shadows
time has no wings, but
still flys like an angry
Falcone preying on
vermin
the beginning of the
end is the ends beginning
and is some kind of sick
joke that only the gods
could understand ...
#fate
#luck
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6 Comments
a delicate balance
Talent is God-given: be humble. Fame is man-given: be grateful.
Conceit is self-given: be careful."―John Wooden
all's not fair in love and war;
each may leave a deadly scar.
even Christ, upon the Cross,
suffered, for His love, great loss.
tread with care in right and wrong;
you may sing a different song,
if the confidence you boast
finds you sleeping at your post.
let loud laughter and soft tears
never find you in arrears;
celebrate with those who joy,
shed a tear with those who cry....
Conceit is self-given: be careful."―John Wooden
all's not fair in love and war;
each may leave a deadly scar.
even Christ, upon the Cross,
suffered, for His love, great loss.
tread with care in right and wrong;
you may sing a different song,
if the confidence you boast
finds you sleeping at your post.
let loud laughter and soft tears
never find you in arrears;
celebrate with those who joy,
shed a tear with those who cry....
#kindness
#fate
#LifeChangingMoment
#wisdom
#choices
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0 Comments
at this moment in this hour
at this moment
in this hour
sitting in my room
alone looking up as
the ceiling smiles
at this moment
in this hour
lighting another
smoke for myself
and the ghost of
Dan Fante
at this moment
in this hour
deciding there is
nothing more
important to do
then nothing
at this moment
in this hour
remembering a
hundred wars of
defeat, a hundred
wars of victory
at this moment
in this hour
the old...
in this hour
sitting in my room
alone looking up as
the ceiling smiles
at this moment
in this hour
lighting another
smoke for myself
and the ghost of
Dan Fante
at this moment
in this hour
deciding there is
nothing more
important to do
then nothing
at this moment
in this hour
remembering a
hundred wars of
defeat, a hundred
wars of victory
at this moment
in this hour
the old...
#death
#fate
#luck
#bittersweet
#risk
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4 Comments
From ashes comes beauty
In the depths of a timeless valley, where darkness reigns and hope seems lost, I find myself entangled in a web of despair. The once vibrant light that illuminated my path has been obscured by the shadows that now surround me. Lost and alone, I wander aimlessly, with only the winter breeze as my companion.
As I struggle to find my way through this barren land, my mind is consumed by doubt and fear. Whispers of doubt and uncertainty echo in the night, haunting me with their relentless taunts. I am filled with a sense of foreboding, anxiously awaiting the inevitable moment when...
As I struggle to find my way through this barren land, my mind is consumed by doubt and fear. Whispers of doubt and uncertainty echo in the night, haunting me with their relentless taunts. I am filled with a sense of foreboding, anxiously awaiting the inevitable moment when...
#faith
#rebirth
#fate
#spiritual
#redemption
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2 Comments
Father Time/Mother Earth
Everyone is looking for an easy life sentence
you can’t when happiness vanished before birth
misery prevails here
how can you figure that your life is more precious then others
your not the be all end all of your fate
I ‘am
I will make the decision
never take me for granted
chances are awarded not given
figure your time here as a gift
your heart isn’t your own
I can stop it today, tomorrow, right now!
you can’t when happiness vanished before birth
misery prevails here
how can you figure that your life is more precious then others
your not the be all end all of your fate
I ‘am
I will make the decision
never take me for granted
chances are awarded not given
figure your time here as a gift
your heart isn’t your own
I can stop it today, tomorrow, right now!
#LifeStruggles
#fate
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DU Poetry : Poems About Fate Seeking Honest Critique