Poems About Disappointment Seeking Honest Critique
#disappointment
Poems about disappointment seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Sonneteer
L Robinson
L Robinson
Poem Published
21st Apr 2024 4:58pm
21st Apr 2024 4:58pm
Another Year Gone Wrong
Memory’s splinters pain,
chaotic fragments never fuse,
failing to create a self
beyond psychotic illusions and delusions.
A front? A pretense? A maddened dream?
To explain requires some understanding,
but unformed self and wholesome others share such slight overlap
that lack of comprehension is the sole result -
any narrative requires a thread
beyond a desire, a whim, to alter stasis from within.
The chances of success
when isolated, incoherent thoughts of one,
which failed any test of rationality,
possessed ideas of superiority...
chaotic fragments never fuse,
failing to create a self
beyond psychotic illusions and delusions.
A front? A pretense? A maddened dream?
To explain requires some understanding,
but unformed self and wholesome others share such slight overlap
that lack of comprehension is the sole result -
any narrative requires a thread
beyond a desire, a whim, to alter stasis from within.
The chances of success
when isolated, incoherent thoughts of one,
which failed any test of rationality,
possessed ideas of superiority...
#despair
#disappointment
#LifeStruggles
#MentalHealth
#suffering
31 reads
0 Comments
The_Darkness_Insid
Poem Published
20th Apr 2024 1:36pm
20th Apr 2024 1:36pm
Thinking of her
Sitting here thinking about you
Its a thing to do
Shes become imprinted on me
We could never be
Theres a lifetime that separates us
Nothing to discuss
But the heart wants what it wants
Still theres no response
I feel happiness again when we talk
I Watch the clock
Minutes turn to hours waiting for the ringtone
Put down the phone
Youre not for her and she could never be yours
On opposite shores
Your darkness would blot out her light
Shes day, you're night
...
Its a thing to do
Shes become imprinted on me
We could never be
Theres a lifetime that separates us
Nothing to discuss
But the heart wants what it wants
Still theres no response
I feel happiness again when we talk
I Watch the clock
Minutes turn to hours waiting for the ringtone
Put down the phone
Youre not for her and she could never be yours
On opposite shores
Your darkness would blot out her light
Shes day, you're night
...
#disappointment
#love
#sadness #UnrequitedLove
#sadness #UnrequitedLove
78 reads
5 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
17th Apr 2024 12:33pm
17th Apr 2024 12:33pm
Peanut butter and spermicidal jelly sandwich
She makes me feel impotent
Whenever I'm around her I feel like I don't exist
She makes me mad
I try & find the words but I can't
I want to lash out but I can't move
She makes me feel like I'm made out of wood
She turns my brain into wax
She pushes me around
I don't know how to say no
Every moment I spend with her, I lose a part of myself
I want to get out, but I can't see my life without her
I think I know what needs to be done...
Whenever I'm around her I feel like I don't exist
She makes me mad
I try & find the words but I can't
I want to lash out but I can't move
She makes me feel like I'm made out of wood
She turns my brain into wax
She pushes me around
I don't know how to say no
Every moment I spend with her, I lose a part of myself
I want to get out, but I can't see my life without her
I think I know what needs to be done...
#anger
#disappointment
#emptiness
#rejection
#shame
58 reads
6 Comments
ArthurVaso
Poem Published
17th Apr 2024 8:16am
17th Apr 2024 8:16am
Thugs in Hot Soup
They are always the victims
one silent
many loud
imposing views
by smothering kinder voices
some cheat
some yell
some kiss the Zionist bell
some are just plain mean
Their minds are closed
narrow
brains where no blood flows
only Tom the Petty
who breaks bones not hearts
some cheat
some yell
some kiss the Zionist bell
some are just plain mean
They wear the doves white wings
while they eat all human flesh
Ask little red riding hood
she has felt the abuse that does...
one silent
many loud
imposing views
by smothering kinder voices
some cheat
some yell
some kiss the Zionist bell
some are just plain mean
Their minds are closed
narrow
brains where no blood flows
only Tom the Petty
who breaks bones not hearts
some cheat
some yell
some kiss the Zionist bell
some are just plain mean
They wear the doves white wings
while they eat all human flesh
Ask little red riding hood
she has felt the abuse that does...
#disappointment
31 reads
0 Comments
The_Darkness_Insid
Poem Published
17th Apr 2024 6:51am
17th Apr 2024 6:51am
Living the lie doesnt make it the truth
Why can't i get this feeling of emptiness to go away?
Why do i feel disappointed that i woke up every day?
Just another day of hating myself and putting up a front
Like im fine and nothings bothering me, my self esteem is taking the brunt
I know that Im worthless so how could anyone want me?
I can never become the person they'd want me to be
Constantly second and third guessing myself makes me act so erratic
My thoughts are so disjointed that it all just seems like static
Constant barrage of "you're not shit",...
Why do i feel disappointed that i woke up every day?
Just another day of hating myself and putting up a front
Like im fine and nothings bothering me, my self esteem is taking the brunt
I know that Im worthless so how could anyone want me?
I can never become the person they'd want me to be
Constantly second and third guessing myself makes me act so erratic
My thoughts are so disjointed that it all just seems like static
Constant barrage of "you're not shit",...
#anger
#loneliness
#despair #disappointment
#despair #disappointment
70 reads
7 Comments
Anxiety
Poem Published
17th Apr 2024 4:23am
17th Apr 2024 4:23am
I’m glad this wasn’t
I love you endlessly
I wish I could have made you feel it
Instead of the loneliness I left you in
When you decided to tell me your heart had already made up it’s mind and I think you gave me a last ditch effort to make me feel better
But it didn’t make me feel better I feel worse knowing I was trying for nothing
But maybe I wasn’t trying for nothing
Maybe I wasn’t trying maybe I’m making up stories
I’m not sure what I can believe from my brain anymore I know I’m sick
And shitty
Really really shitty....
I wish I could have made you feel it
Instead of the loneliness I left you in
When you decided to tell me your heart had already made up it’s mind and I think you gave me a last ditch effort to make me feel better
But it didn’t make me feel better I feel worse knowing I was trying for nothing
But maybe I wasn’t trying for nothing
Maybe I wasn’t trying maybe I’m making up stories
I’m not sure what I can believe from my brain anymore I know I’m sick
And shitty
Really really shitty....
#anxiety
#regret
#disappointment #polyamory
#disappointment #polyamory
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0 Comments
Mstrmnd1923
Poem Published
17th Apr 2024 3:54am
17th Apr 2024 3:54am
War
Let's have conversation
Not a confrontation
But sadly we've been programmed
We are divided
And not united
The media and government has scammed
Our thoughts our minds
These trying times
Filled with hate speech crescendo
Chaotic commotion
Our religious devotion
Its all gone out the window
Lies are exposed
But our minds disposed
As we recklessly anchor in our stance
As we prepare
We are unaware
Of the impending circumstance ...
Not a confrontation
But sadly we've been programmed
We are divided
And not united
The media and government has scammed
Our thoughts our minds
These trying times
Filled with hate speech crescendo
Chaotic commotion
Our religious devotion
Its all gone out the window
Lies are exposed
But our minds disposed
As we recklessly anchor in our stance
As we prepare
We are unaware
Of the impending circumstance ...
#sadness
#greed
#disappointment
60 reads
2 Comments
buddhakitty
Poem Published
17th Apr 2024 1:48am
17th Apr 2024 1:48am
things aren't always what they seem
that building on the
corner there...
...yes. that building
it uses to be a coffee
shop
a gym
a used book store
but despite intentions
each failed
failed
failed
and
failed
now it sits there:
empty
alone
abandoned
it is much like
love and the
human
heart
corner there...
...yes. that building
it uses to be a coffee
shop
a gym
a used book store
but despite intentions
each failed
failed
failed
and
failed
now it sits there:
empty
alone
abandoned
it is much like
love and the
human
heart
#sadness
#disappointment
70 reads
16 Comments
monovox128
Poem Published
16th Apr 2024 3:59pm
16th Apr 2024 3:59pm
IF I'D WALK AWAY
If the time has come
For me to walk away
To leave you my love
Will you not save
The tears that flow
I have on display
When I turn to leave
On this darkest day
When the sun won't rise
And the winter comes
As a river still flows
From the saddest eyes
If the time has come
For me to walk away
Will you leave a smile
Could you pause awhile
In the setting sun
And I leave you a kiss
For now there is none
As I leave you with this
Knowing you warmed the heart
Of a very troubled fool
Who's lost...
For me to walk away
To leave you my love
Will you not save
The tears that flow
I have on display
When I turn to leave
On this darkest day
When the sun won't rise
And the winter comes
As a river still flows
From the saddest eyes
If the time has come
For me to walk away
Will you leave a smile
Could you pause awhile
In the setting sun
And I leave you a kiss
For now there is none
As I leave you with this
Knowing you warmed the heart
Of a very troubled fool
Who's lost...
#love
#hope
#heartbroken
#disappointment
#bittersweet
63 reads
4 Comments
buddhakitty
Poem Published
16th Apr 2024 2:23am
16th Apr 2024 2:23am
how alone is alone
being alone by
yourself is nothing
but being alone with
someone sitting next
you!
now that's
just stupid
yourself is nothing
but being alone with
someone sitting next
you!
now that's
just stupid
#disappointment
51 reads
2 Comments
BurntCanary
Poem Published
10th Apr 2024 5:35pm
10th Apr 2024 5:35pm
Echoed Trill
Mommy, they're causing me strife,
My wings, they just won't come to life.
They said it's a game we'd be playing,
But now, it's tears that I'm spraying.
Mommy, where can you be?
Mommy, come set me free.
I hear your fearful trill, it's quite a chill,
To the sound of your voice, I'm flying.
Who are they, my little one?
Don't give up, the day is not done.
As fast as I can, I'm running,
I promise to help, I’m Coming.
Mommy, they are causing me pain,
The fire on my wings, it's been slain.
I tell them it's hard to...
My wings, they just won't come to life.
They said it's a game we'd be playing,
But now, it's tears that I'm spraying.
Mommy, where can you be?
Mommy, come set me free.
I hear your fearful trill, it's quite a chill,
To the sound of your voice, I'm flying.
Who are they, my little one?
Don't give up, the day is not done.
As fast as I can, I'm running,
I promise to help, I’m Coming.
Mommy, they are causing me pain,
The fire on my wings, it's been slain.
I tell them it's hard to...
#sadness
#grief
#heartbroken
#disappointment
#fear
50 reads
2 Comments
BurntCanary
Poem Published
10th Apr 2024 8:56am
10th Apr 2024 8:56am
Her Point of View!
Tainted Heartbeat, once so vibrant
Smokey breath, that hovers over
A choked-out plea, in sincere despair
An unending stream of tears, for hope, is now lost.
Stolen innocence, undeserving of such
Heartbreaking grief, for joy now departs.
Intertwined emotions, seeds of desperation
Gut-wrenching decisions, that bear destruction.
A Haunting silence, the mind is set.
Unwilling hands, yet the soul commands
Fading world, for it is done.
A life no more, another burnt canary.
Smokey breath, that hovers over
A choked-out plea, in sincere despair
An unending stream of tears, for hope, is now lost.
Stolen innocence, undeserving of such
Heartbreaking grief, for joy now departs.
Intertwined emotions, seeds of desperation
Gut-wrenching decisions, that bear destruction.
A Haunting silence, the mind is set.
Unwilling hands, yet the soul commands
Fading world, for it is done.
A life no more, another burnt canary.
#grief
#despair
#disappointment
#emptiness
#fear
72 reads
4 Comments
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