Poems About Children Seeking Honest Critique
#children
Poems about children seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Nizana
Lauryn
Lauryn
Poem Published
Yesterday 2:48pm
Yesterday 2:48pm
Chapter 12: Confronting Shadows
Chapter 12: Confronting Shadows
Brittney returned home before Alex got off from work. She had showered at the hotel after her intimate rendezvous with David, but she still felt imprint of his touch as if it were hanging around her neck.
As Brittney settled into the cozy living room, her mother's eyes sparkled with curiosity, barely contained behind her glasses.
"Sweetheart, you seem different today," her mother remarked, her tone gentle but probing.
Brittney forced a smile, her mind racing to concoct a plausible explanation....
Brittney returned home before Alex got off from work. She had showered at the hotel after her intimate rendezvous with David, but she still felt imprint of his touch as if it were hanging around her neck.
As Brittney settled into the cozy living room, her mother's eyes sparkled with curiosity, barely contained behind her glasses.
"Sweetheart, you seem different today," her mother remarked, her tone gentle but probing.
Brittney forced a smile, her mind racing to concoct a plausible explanation....
#betrayal
#children
#marriage
58 reads
3 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
15th Apr 2024 1:11am
15th Apr 2024 1:11am
Laughs and Smiles
Sometimes the days feel like they’re dragging
And yet when I look in the mirror the years have passed fast
I may not reach the peak of a mountain to fight a dragon
But I know that after I’m gone my verses are going to last
I may not be popular or reach fame in my time
But the rhymes I leave behind can serve a testament
I’m just a simple man striving to find what’s mine
So that my children will one day share in the sentiment
I’m motivated by their laughs and smiles in their faces
Like photographs of these moments engraved in our hearts ...
And yet when I look in the mirror the years have passed fast
I may not reach the peak of a mountain to fight a dragon
But I know that after I’m gone my verses are going to last
I may not be popular or reach fame in my time
But the rhymes I leave behind can serve a testament
I’m just a simple man striving to find what’s mine
So that my children will one day share in the sentiment
I’m motivated by their laughs and smiles in their faces
Like photographs of these moments engraved in our hearts ...
#love
#children
#family #motivational
#family #motivational
57 reads
4 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
15th Apr 2024 00:37am
15th Apr 2024 00:37am
Their out there, just be aware
God told me to slay you, so I can stay alive
I slay children
I enjoy to see them in pain
I slay children
Bounded in shackles & chains
I slay children
Lure them in with colorful gum
I slay children
Their last day of having fun
I'll detonate the school bus
Blast out the tires
Explosion so grand
Kids dead from the fire
You all need to die
and that's the price you pay
I'm taking away your precious one
Could be tomorrow or maybe today
I have no regrets
I have no remorse ...
I slay children
I enjoy to see them in pain
I slay children
Bounded in shackles & chains
I slay children
Lure them in with colorful gum
I slay children
Their last day of having fun
I'll detonate the school bus
Blast out the tires
Explosion so grand
Kids dead from the fire
You all need to die
and that's the price you pay
I'm taking away your precious one
Could be tomorrow or maybe today
I have no regrets
I have no remorse ...
#hate
#children
#death
#rhyming
#MentalHealth
65 reads
5 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
4th Apr 2024 6:41pm
4th Apr 2024 6:41pm
PCP (Pathetic Comatose People)
Rats chewed the hands, lips and nose off a four month old baby in a fleabag apartment building across the street from me. The mother was on Angel Dust. She had her head in the oven trying to kill herself. I asked her if she needed assistance. She said no. I helped her anyway.
People are so pathetic!
People are so pathetic!
#children
#suicide
#drugs #addiction
#drugs #addiction
108 reads
6 Comments
Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
26th Mar 2024 8:19pm
26th Mar 2024 8:19pm
Damned through Love
#children
#sex
#family
#corruption
#ForbiddenLove
48 reads
0 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
16th Mar 2024 10:20pm
16th Mar 2024 10:20pm
Facebook Memories
2016 – August
While watching Being Human (a show about a Vampire, a Werewolf and a Ghost)
Me: Babe, if a vampire offered you eternal life…
Wife: YES!
Me: Just like that huh? You’d watch me get old and die?
Wife: BYE FELICIA!
2015 – September
Showing the boys Naked Gun 2 ½. Lt. Frank Drebin helps me explain the birds and the bees
Xavier (11): What? I don’t get it
Xander (10): I don’t get it either
(A hot dog lands on a bun on screen)
Both: Ooh! I GET IT
Me: It’s the artistic portion of the...
While watching Being Human (a show about a Vampire, a Werewolf and a Ghost)
Me: Babe, if a vampire offered you eternal life…
Wife: YES!
Me: Just like that huh? You’d watch me get old and die?
Wife: BYE FELICIA!
2015 – September
Showing the boys Naked Gun 2 ½. Lt. Frank Drebin helps me explain the birds and the bees
Xavier (11): What? I don’t get it
Xander (10): I don’t get it either
(A hot dog lands on a bun on screen)
Both: Ooh! I GET IT
Me: It’s the artistic portion of the...
#children
#family
#funny #memories
#funny #memories
84 reads
7 Comments
cabcool
Poem Published
7th Mar 2024 6:47am
7th Mar 2024 6:47am
and rachael for her children cry
Mankind must put an end to war, or war will put an end
to man…”― John F. Kennedy
the fiercely barking hand grenades
and other weapons wars have made
are never idle in the hands
of those who set out to invade
the sanctity of sovereign lands.
the military muscle might
of killers who paint red the night
flex in the face of helpless souls
who yield to blood their last...
to man…”― John F. Kennedy
the fiercely barking hand grenades
and other weapons wars have made
are never idle in the hands
of those who set out to invade
the sanctity of sovereign lands.
the military muscle might
of killers who paint red the night
flex in the face of helpless souls
who yield to blood their last...
#hate
#children
#conflict
#war
#food
43 reads
0 Comments
Chere-Rene13
Poem Published
2nd Mar 2024 4:37am
2nd Mar 2024 4:37am
Grown-ups Presentation
Repetitive frames...Reel to reel...Morbid in making nightmares...Frozen scream...A child's dream. For night terrors, never reflect kindness of empathy...For feelings of cold robots are none & the child learns young...Of their peers of perchers...The one's screaming down their necks...Their words are a confusing muddle...Mad is the child splashing in dirty puddles...A speech of repeat...False & long or tiresome & dull...A re-run cartoon, only shown at noon...A wore down song...Nursery rhymes out grown. Mesmerizing verses... They've heard many times. Slurred words...Booze on their...
#dark
#children
#humankind
52 reads
4 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
20th Feb 2024 4:43pm
20th Feb 2024 4:43pm
Regret
affliction dear please afford me this confession
assorted pain dances in my mind tormenting me
the ghosts of my children's childhoods
I see their baby faces
not enough food to sustain their grumbling bellies
they still visit me in my resting state
I see their young faces knowing I failed them
they haunt my existence I see threads wait more like nooses
troubling the present trying to hang them
none of my grown children want anything to do with each other
too many bad memories
still basically living in poverty ...
assorted pain dances in my mind tormenting me
the ghosts of my children's childhoods
I see their baby faces
not enough food to sustain their grumbling bellies
they still visit me in my resting state
I see their young faces knowing I failed them
they haunt my existence I see threads wait more like nooses
troubling the present trying to hang them
none of my grown children want anything to do with each other
too many bad memories
still basically living in poverty ...
#love
#children
#memories #motherhood
#memories #motherhood
97 reads
12 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
10th Feb 2024 12:40pm
10th Feb 2024 12:40pm
Take Me Back
Take me back to a place I want to go
Where cartoons and candy is all I know
Life was easier and more grand
Go to the beach, digging in the sand
Met with friends, knocked on their door
Kids today sit around, what the fuck for?
Baseball, biking, swimming all day
Post 2001 life has turned so grey
Government and tech has ruined our lives
Increase pressures, illness and suicide
Optimism flew away years ago
My personal opinion, just so you know
Where cartoons and candy is all I know
Life was easier and more grand
Go to the beach, digging in the sand
Met with friends, knocked on their door
Kids today sit around, what the fuck for?
Baseball, biking, swimming all day
Post 2001 life has turned so grey
Government and tech has ruined our lives
Increase pressures, illness and suicide
Optimism flew away years ago
My personal opinion, just so you know
#children
#memories
#nostalgia
93 reads
7 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
9th Feb 2024 11:06am
9th Feb 2024 11:06am
A Crooked Concept
Some monsters have always said
There are parents under my bed
One of their names is Ted
The other goes by Deb
There are parents under my bed
They won’t eat me as long as their fed
There are parents under my bed
Their complexions are lumpy & red
There are parents under my bed
My dreams are filled with dread
There are parents under my bed
I’d like to shoot them with lead
There are parents under my bed
Must act now before I wind up dead
There are parents under my bed
They say this illusion is in my head
There are...
There are parents under my bed
One of their names is Ted
The other goes by Deb
There are parents under my bed
They won’t eat me as long as their fed
There are parents under my bed
Their complexions are lumpy & red
There are parents under my bed
My dreams are filled with dread
There are parents under my bed
I’d like to shoot them with lead
There are parents under my bed
Must act now before I wind up dead
There are parents under my bed
They say this illusion is in my head
There are...
#children
#rhyming
#monsters #MentalHealth
#monsters #MentalHealth
79 reads
5 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
4th Feb 2024 11:14am
4th Feb 2024 11:14am
Too many
I have had plenty of many moms,
some witches, which is not that bad,
many hags, who had made me sad.
So many moms so little differences...
Some such bad opinions to share,
some much good ideas to spare.
I can recognize them with a glare.
I can sort them by a simple affair.
I spot all of them here and there.
Waiting at my classroom door...
Trying to read my thoughts.
Aiming to reach me in a hunt.
Moms should never get close
to their children teachers, ever!
Our planets are too far away...
some witches, which is not that bad,
many hags, who had made me sad.
So many moms so little differences...
Some such bad opinions to share,
some much good ideas to spare.
I can recognize them with a glare.
I can sort them by a simple affair.
I spot all of them here and there.
Waiting at my classroom door...
Trying to read my thoughts.
Aiming to reach me in a hunt.
Moms should never get close
to their children teachers, ever!
Our planets are too far away...
#mother
#children
#science
#school
#astronomy
76 reads
2 Comments
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