Anniversary Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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anniversary seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
First experience at Six Flags Great Adventure
In July this will mark the 40th anniversary of my 1st time at Six Flags Great Adventure in Jackson New Jersey.
Prior to Great Adventure, I had some experience with Amusement Parks. My parents and grandparents have taken me to Adventureland in Farmingdale Long Island since 1980. My first roller coaster experience was there in 1982. Accompanied by my father, I rode a coaster called the Galaxy. A simplistic, figure 8 coaster that hit speeds of 30 mph. At that time, I thought it was the greatest thing on Earth!
In 1983 my parents took my brother & I to Disney World. That...
Prior to Great Adventure, I had some experience with Amusement Parks. My parents and grandparents have taken me to Adventureland in Farmingdale Long Island since 1980. My first roller coaster experience was there in 1982. Accompanied by my father, I rode a coaster called the Galaxy. A simplistic, figure 8 coaster that hit speeds of 30 mph. At that time, I thought it was the greatest thing on Earth!
In 1983 my parents took my brother & I to Disney World. That...
#family
#anniversary
#memories
#nostalgia
#ThrillSeeking
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The Poetry Won’t Bring You Back
Pouring over these former letters
Reactivating the potency of my emotions
How do I keep the memory of you alive
What good is it to look in rearview
I can’t help but reminisce again
When every word is a snapshot from my heart
Writing to commemorate, honor, and ache for you
Another letter, another year, another moment I feel the lack
So many words to express my love
Yet no matter what I say, the poetry won’t bring you back
Speaking like floral arrangements at the grave of another memory
When there’s so much I wish you...
Reactivating the potency of my emotions
How do I keep the memory of you alive
What good is it to look in rearview
I can’t help but reminisce again
When every word is a snapshot from my heart
Writing to commemorate, honor, and ache for you
Another letter, another year, another moment I feel the lack
So many words to express my love
Yet no matter what I say, the poetry won’t bring you back
Speaking like floral arrangements at the grave of another memory
When there’s so much I wish you...
#sadness
#mother
#death
#anniversary
#cancer
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Still The One
Does practice make perfect love?
When we’re two imperfect people no less perfect for each other
Enchantments and apologetics of
All the ways that I try and fail as a lover
Words like paper weights outline my heart in ink
Trying to transcribe all that you mean to me
Interpreting these emotions too deep to convey in all I think
When your beauty is more than just what’s at the surface of all there is to see
More than just the girl of my dreams but the angel of my awakening
Our hearts are knit of a common thread into the fabric of a life...
When we’re two imperfect people no less perfect for each other
Enchantments and apologetics of
All the ways that I try and fail as a lover
Words like paper weights outline my heart in ink
Trying to transcribe all that you mean to me
Interpreting these emotions too deep to convey in all I think
When your beauty is more than just what’s at the surface of all there is to see
More than just the girl of my dreams but the angel of my awakening
Our hearts are knit of a common thread into the fabric of a life...
#love
#wife
#relationships
#marriage
#anniversary
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Anniversary
Love is a song
That I shall sing
Love is a gift
That I shall bring
Love is the tears
That fall from my face
Love is the memories
I can’t erase
We raised a child
Then there were two
When I look in their eyes
I think of you
A few years behind us
Many more ahead
Our marriage is more
Than just sharing a bed
So, I raise my glass
To offer a toast
To the one I care about
The very most
HAPPY ANNIVERSARY
That I shall sing
Love is a gift
That I shall bring
Love is the tears
That fall from my face
Love is the memories
I can’t erase
We raised a child
Then there were two
When I look in their eyes
I think of you
A few years behind us
Many more ahead
Our marriage is more
Than just sharing a bed
So, I raise my glass
To offer a toast
To the one I care about
The very most
HAPPY ANNIVERSARY
#love
#marriage
#anniversary
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A farmer's saplings.
A wooden plank
On which he once
Sat reading newspaper
Going to fish market
To bring freshman
Hilsa in the
Wales of cold
With ID card
Of a post man.
With coffee break
Of his friends.
Handing a new
News of red Dracula.
And grappling a toffee
On way to water
A saplings
Of nest and grest
In wild woods in ant.
On which he once
Sat reading newspaper
Going to fish market
To bring freshman
Hilsa in the
Wales of cold
With ID card
Of a post man.
With coffee break
Of his friends.
Handing a new
News of red Dracula.
And grappling a toffee
On way to water
A saplings
Of nest and grest
In wild woods in ant.
#birth
#marriage
#anniversary #menstruation
#anniversary #menstruation
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Pudding moon.
We walked the
Night green
Maple leaves
Falling in her
Breast.
She plunges
Feels the fern
With an apple
We made love
Under same skyline
Mapping woods
Worckhart.
Night green
Maple leaves
Falling in her
Breast.
She plunges
Feels the fern
With an apple
We made love
Under same skyline
Mapping woods
Worckhart.
#anniversary
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Flowers Episode 1: Soul Soldier
I was humbled
When she first uttered those words
Out loud..in a crowd full of poets
Soul Soldier
Indeed I felt those weighted words
Egotistical yet introverted
I wasn't sure how to show my appreciation
Thus the apprehension
But as Time humbles
I see what she always saw
True and full of Blues
She understood my Soldier
The one that carries on in spite of myself
That lone Underdog
On a hill littered with convictions
Fighting for Love...for art
For my own humanity
Dodging...
When she first uttered those words
Out loud..in a crowd full of poets
Soul Soldier
Indeed I felt those weighted words
Egotistical yet introverted
I wasn't sure how to show my appreciation
Thus the apprehension
But as Time humbles
I see what she always saw
True and full of Blues
She understood my Soldier
The one that carries on in spite of myself
That lone Underdog
On a hill littered with convictions
Fighting for Love...for art
For my own humanity
Dodging...
#friendship
#flowers
#confessional
#anniversary
#gratitude
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upon our thirtieth wedding anniversary
always said that what first
attracted me to you were your legs
I know that’s sexist, because that’s what attraction is, it discriminates
but when I looked at your face, the
out of bed too soon face, the lined, early morning work face, the tired, but undefeated face, I fell in love
attracted me to you were your legs
I know that’s sexist, because that’s what attraction is, it discriminates
but when I looked at your face, the
out of bed too soon face, the lined, early morning work face, the tired, but undefeated face, I fell in love
#love
#marriage
#beauty
#anniversary
#WritingPoetry
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Freedom on the 4th
Each fallen soul from every generation
Has built our nation's firm foundation
The uniforms through years have changed
But the reasons they fight are still the same
Let's not forget our men our women so brave
For each minute in war they come closer to the grave
In our flag they'll always fly
And guard our nation with a watchful eye
Our freedom paid with blood and sweat
A decision I'm sure they'll never regret
Don't think fireworks on the 4th of July
Remember the ones who lived, who died
Has built our nation's firm foundation
The uniforms through years have changed
But the reasons they fight are still the same
Let's not forget our men our women so brave
For each minute in war they come closer to the grave
In our flag they'll always fly
And guard our nation with a watchful eye
Our freedom paid with blood and sweat
A decision I'm sure they'll never regret
Don't think fireworks on the 4th of July
Remember the ones who lived, who died
#birth
#death
#anniversary
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Baba.
A wolf knows it's nose.
Keshav Chandra ray.
Keshav Chandra ray.
#anniversary
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Casa Del Reedus
Floral Embroidered Velvet Lace Gown
As though it was painted direct.
Her 9 inch crystal Stiletto.
Ninety Eight Million shes a boss respect.
Soleil Lalique Crystal Edition her fragrance.
Clé de Peau Beauté moisturizer her velvet skin.
Peruca knottless braids a vision that enchants.
Hundred fifty million pesos, I'd spend again.
All black hand tailored silk suit.
Black python skin shoes.
Black fedora with python strap.
Looking at my wife I'm not as good as you.
2022 G Wagon savage sand paint.
Black gold Rolex...
As though it was painted direct.
Her 9 inch crystal Stiletto.
Ninety Eight Million shes a boss respect.
Soleil Lalique Crystal Edition her fragrance.
Clé de Peau Beauté moisturizer her velvet skin.
Peruca knottless braids a vision that enchants.
Hundred fifty million pesos, I'd spend again.
All black hand tailored silk suit.
Black python skin shoes.
Black fedora with python strap.
Looking at my wife I'm not as good as you.
2022 G Wagon savage sand paint.
Black gold Rolex...
#love
#anniversary
#pregnancy
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It Never Gets Old
Silently she drops to her knees
(thankful for padded carpet).
She still carries the graceful dancer
from earlier years though it’s more difficult now.
Yes, she’s been here before.
Exactly in this place.
Too many times to count.
She leans into his warmth and thinks,
it never gets old.
(thankful for padded carpet).
She still carries the graceful dancer
from earlier years though it’s more difficult now.
Yes, she’s been here before.
Exactly in this place.
Too many times to count.
She leans into his warmth and thinks,
it never gets old.
#anniversary
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