Anniversary Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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anniversary seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Strangeways_Rob
Poem Published
11th Dec 2022 9:16pm
11th Dec 2022 9:16pm
A Sudden Sluice of Sea-Ice
The kid drops his bucket and spade / And climbs into the sun.” Nick Cave
Sea-ice shoals are spooned
Into surrogate vessels of feeling,
Tidal grief has sunk emotions
Girl at the point where the pier once lay
Could be disturbed moments away from
Sleeping with the fishes
I turn my back on the portentous vision
And paint the sky red with seagull blood
As diamonds plucked from expensive watches
Temporal is the temptation to crush auld crystal,
Tougher than slate, finger bone br/e/aker
They’d look beautiful abreast...
Sea-ice shoals are spooned
Into surrogate vessels of feeling,
Tidal grief has sunk emotions
Girl at the point where the pier once lay
Could be disturbed moments away from
Sleeping with the fishes
I turn my back on the portentous vision
And paint the sky red with seagull blood
As diamonds plucked from expensive watches
Temporal is the temptation to crush auld crystal,
Tougher than slate, finger bone br/e/aker
They’d look beautiful abreast...
#sea
#nature
#anniversary #LifeCycle
#anniversary #LifeCycle
129 reads
13 Comments
LiamReeduus
LiamReedus
LiamReedus
Poem Published
27th Nov 2022 11:55am
27th Nov 2022 11:55am
Casa Del Reedus
Floral Embroidered Velvet Lace Gown
As though it was painted direct.
Her 9 inch crystal Stiletto.
Ninety Eight Million shes a boss respect.
Soleil Lalique Crystal Edition her fragrance.
Clé de Peau Beauté moisturizer her velvet skin.
Peruca knottless braids a vision that enchants.
Hundred fifty million pesos, I'd spend again.
All black hand tailored silk suit.
Black python skin shoes.
Black fedora with python strap.
Looking at my wife I'm not as good as you.
2022 G Wagon savage sand paint.
Black gold Rolex...
As though it was painted direct.
Her 9 inch crystal Stiletto.
Ninety Eight Million shes a boss respect.
Soleil Lalique Crystal Edition her fragrance.
Clé de Peau Beauté moisturizer her velvet skin.
Peruca knottless braids a vision that enchants.
Hundred fifty million pesos, I'd spend again.
All black hand tailored silk suit.
Black python skin shoes.
Black fedora with python strap.
Looking at my wife I'm not as good as you.
2022 G Wagon savage sand paint.
Black gold Rolex...
#love
#anniversary
#pregnancy
87 reads
1 Comment
Strangeways_Rob
Poem Published
31st Oct 2022 11:33pm
31st Oct 2022 11:33pm
What Will Survive Of Us Is Love
We burned you into little shells and stars
Melted fingers into perpetual prayer,
Blazed the manuscripts of our library.
In memoriam, set fire to the psalm breeze.
There is no other place where
Their ghosts can ever roam,
Than in our hearts’ mantelpiece.
The hearth will soon be a heath
Where no kites or birds fly.
In the unforgiving space between minds
Guillotined by Alzheimer blades,
Absence anvils the tender hearts:
Each hug is a final hug.
From Dad, the strength and compassion
From Mum, the fear and...
Melted fingers into perpetual prayer,
Blazed the manuscripts of our library.
In memoriam, set fire to the psalm breeze.
There is no other place where
Their ghosts can ever roam,
Than in our hearts’ mantelpiece.
The hearth will soon be a heath
Where no kites or birds fly.
In the unforgiving space between minds
Guillotined by Alzheimer blades,
Absence anvils the tender hearts:
Each hug is a final hug.
From Dad, the strength and compassion
From Mum, the fear and...
#hope
#death
#anniversary #LifeCycle
#anniversary #LifeCycle
168 reads
11 Comments
Nizana
Poem Published
30th Oct 2022 9:31pm
30th Oct 2022 9:31pm
It Never Gets Old
Silently she drops to her knees
(thankful for padded carpet).
She still carries the graceful dancer
from earlier years though it’s more difficult now.
Yes, she’s been here before.
Exactly in this place.
Too many times to count.
She leans into his warmth and thinks,
it never gets old.
(thankful for padded carpet).
She still carries the graceful dancer
from earlier years though it’s more difficult now.
Yes, she’s been here before.
Exactly in this place.
Too many times to count.
She leans into his warmth and thinks,
it never gets old.
#anniversary
239 reads
5 Comments
LostViking
Lost Viking
Lost Viking
Poem Published
28th Oct 2022 10:37pm
28th Oct 2022 10:37pm
The Anniversary
#love
#marriage
#murder #anniversary
#murder #anniversary
119 reads
7 Comments
LostViking
Lost Viking
Lost Viking
Poem Published
27th Oct 2022 9:58pm
27th Oct 2022 9:58pm
The Anniversary
#marriage
#murder
#anniversary
88 reads
1 Comment
mysteriouslady
Poem Published
6th Oct 2022 1:58am
6th Oct 2022 1:58am
21 years.....
Right about now we were
introduced
as the happily wedded couple
Mr & Mrs
Wow what a feeling
and in church no less!
(the grannies were happy about that lol )
we knew it was going to be a wild ride
Wild doesnt even explain it
A ride we had to experience....
young and in love
ready to conquer the world
together hand in hand
Theres been some dark days within these 21 years
rough child births
kids needing specialists when born
stress, mortgage, car payments, more stress ...
introduced
as the happily wedded couple
Mr & Mrs
Wow what a feeling
and in church no less!
(the grannies were happy about that lol )
we knew it was going to be a wild ride
Wild doesnt even explain it
A ride we had to experience....
young and in love
ready to conquer the world
together hand in hand
Theres been some dark days within these 21 years
rough child births
kids needing specialists when born
stress, mortgage, car payments, more stress ...
#love
#anniversary
205 reads
13 Comments
peninnah
Poem Published
4th Aug 2022 6:51pm
4th Aug 2022 6:51pm
TWO BOYS AND A DOG!
Two boys and a dog!”
“What?” He ask again
“Two boys and a dog,” She repeats. Firmly! “That’s what I bring to the table!”
He studies her for a silent minute, so she gets up to leave. “Surely, he cannot handle this…”
“So?!” He interrupts her thoughts, “I mean,let me halla at you for a moment ma!” He takes her hand, and gently leads her back to sit.
“Two boys and a dog,huh?”
“See,I know you and ‘em babies have been let down one too many times before, and on behalf of my people, I apologize.”
She rolls her eyes impatiently, accompanied with a...
“What?” He ask again
“Two boys and a dog,” She repeats. Firmly! “That’s what I bring to the table!”
He studies her for a silent minute, so she gets up to leave. “Surely, he cannot handle this…”
“So?!” He interrupts her thoughts, “I mean,let me halla at you for a moment ma!” He takes her hand, and gently leads her back to sit.
“Two boys and a dog,huh?”
“See,I know you and ‘em babies have been let down one too many times before, and on behalf of my people, I apologize.”
She rolls her eyes impatiently, accompanied with a...
#love
#men
#motherhood
#marriage
#anniversary
204 reads
5 Comments
Green_Arrow
Poem Published
26th Jul 2022 2:10pm
26th Jul 2022 2:10pm
The Guy Who Wanted To Do More
#fiction
#FreeVerse
#anniversary
#sensual
#temptation
176 reads
0 Comments
SatInUGal
Kumar
Kumar
Poem Published
22nd Jun 2022 11:49pm
22nd Jun 2022 11:49pm
ONE YEAR IN
We are both begging
And commanding at the same time
And position
Acting not with fear
But wonder in the face
Of demolition
We had champagne
On our first date because our love
Is celebration
And still I find
You are a constantly occurring
Revelation
And commanding at the same time
And position
Acting not with fear
But wonder in the face
Of demolition
We had champagne
On our first date because our love
Is celebration
And still I find
You are a constantly occurring
Revelation
#relationships
#rhyming
#anniversary
97 reads
0 Comments
PittinixDesigns
Poem Published
27th Apr 2022 2:09am
27th Apr 2022 2:09am
Winsome
Let me say good night to the guests, family, and friends.
Winsome, this is how I truly feel about you.
Your name signifies the kind of person that you are.
The first letter W represents wonderful.
The second letter I is for industrious.
The third letter N symbolizes neighbourly.
The fourth letter S is for spiritual.
The fifth letter O typifies outgoing.
The sixth letter M is for motherly.
And the last letter E stands for encouraging.
Winsome, I am so glad that you are my sister.
Your exemplary qualities appeal to me, ...
Winsome, this is how I truly feel about you.
Your name signifies the kind of person that you are.
The first letter W represents wonderful.
The second letter I is for industrious.
The third letter N symbolizes neighbourly.
The fourth letter S is for spiritual.
The fifth letter O typifies outgoing.
The sixth letter M is for motherly.
And the last letter E stands for encouraging.
Winsome, I am so glad that you are my sister.
Your exemplary qualities appeal to me, ...
#happiness
#love
#motivational
#inspirational
#anniversary
261 reads
2 Comments
OG-Poetry
Poem Published
25th Dec 2021 2:28pm
25th Dec 2021 2:28pm
you
once i was a lonely man
and i dream that i met you
i dreamed that i dreamed i fell in love…
i’m dreaming
i’m dreaming of you
thinking that you love me too..
me and You
just us two
it’s all about You
i’m dreaming
i’m dreaming of you
thinking that you love me too
me and You
till it’s through
just us two
You
(now…
be mine now)
and i dream that i met you
i dreamed that i dreamed i fell in love…
i’m dreaming
i’m dreaming of you
thinking that you love me too..
me and You
just us two
it’s all about You
i’m dreaming
i’m dreaming of you
thinking that you love me too
me and You
till it’s through
just us two
You
(now…
be mine now)
#love
#relationships
#marriage
#anniversary
#FallingInLove
892 reads
8 Comments
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