Poems About Addiction Seeking Honest Critique
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Poems about addiction seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
oldmanG
Poem Published
16th Nov 2024 6:52am
16th Nov 2024 6:52am
Live positive
Live moments in positivity
Discard negative
Just did something
Gave away the key
To prosperity
If I sit and stew
And bake a monster of anger
Doesn’t help those i love
Think a circuit is undone
In my cerebellum
Scream at the tv when they don’t
Do what i say to comfort
And fatten the wallet
I cant just beat me
To pay for my sins
So I’m starting something new
Turn a lemon to victory
in my mind I’m aware i watch me
I’m living in positivity
Not down won’t...
Discard negative
Just did something
Gave away the key
To prosperity
If I sit and stew
And bake a monster of anger
Doesn’t help those i love
Think a circuit is undone
In my cerebellum
Scream at the tv when they don’t
Do what i say to comfort
And fatten the wallet
I cant just beat me
To pay for my sins
So I’m starting something new
Turn a lemon to victory
in my mind I’m aware i watch me
I’m living in positivity
Not down won’t...
#addiction
#grief
#money #sports
#money #sports
48 reads
0 Comments
moon_bather
Poem Published
14th Nov 2024 5:39am
14th Nov 2024 5:39am
Future Ben
Oh, I’m gonna pay for it tomorrow
No question
No doubt
It’s here, my pain
I’m gonna pay for it
Tomorrow
No question
No doubt
It’s here, my pain
I’m gonna pay for it
Tomorrow
#addiction
#alcohol
#emptiness
#LifeAsAWriter
#ThrillSeeking
77 reads
1 Comment
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
13th Nov 2024 11:19am
13th Nov 2024 11:19am
Wet, Drunk & Miserable
He went to the bar
got into a fight
drank lots of Yeg
was up half the night
He was so wasted
he could hardly talk
barely made it to the bed
kept stumbling, couldn't walk
Fell right asleep
out like a light
along came the dream
of mountains and streams
It was so peaceful or so it seemed
the sound of dripping awakened him
he could smell the stench of human pee
He could feel the warmth between his legs
he pissed his pants and it seeped all over the bed
he jumped and ran...
got into a fight
drank lots of Yeg
was up half the night
He was so wasted
he could hardly talk
barely made it to the bed
kept stumbling, couldn't walk
Fell right asleep
out like a light
along came the dream
of mountains and streams
It was so peaceful or so it seemed
the sound of dripping awakened him
he could smell the stench of human pee
He could feel the warmth between his legs
he pissed his pants and it seeped all over the bed
he jumped and ran...
#addiction
#alcohol
#funny #rhyming
#funny #rhyming
68 reads
2 Comments
MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
12th Nov 2024 00:45am
12th Nov 2024 00:45am
A Faustian Dream
Behold the loutish MAGA derision
as specimens of imbecility
marked by a semantic imprecision
yoked to emotive volatility
and a co-occuring need for action
in the to and fro of their Adderall
foundering for instant satisfaction
in conservative seas of folderol
said to be legitimate worldview
by people enslaved to a joystick
and techno feudal endorphins askew
reinforced at every media click
to warrant their manipulated thoughts
to goose-step quickly into MAGA bots.
as specimens of imbecility
marked by a semantic imprecision
yoked to emotive volatility
and a co-occuring need for action
in the to and fro of their Adderall
foundering for instant satisfaction
in conservative seas of folderol
said to be legitimate worldview
by people enslaved to a joystick
and techno feudal endorphins askew
reinforced at every media click
to warrant their manipulated thoughts
to goose-step quickly into MAGA bots.
#addiction
#consumerism
#humankind
#SelfHarm
#technology
89 reads
4 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
8th Nov 2024 4:28am
8th Nov 2024 4:28am
Ea$y Money (Not so Easy)
Ea$y Money (Not so easy)
Cutting in line
Won’t wait my turn
It’s my money and
I want to collect
But the game ain’t over
There’s still time
For it to fall to pieces
Does it almost every time
Life of a Rider
Comin up short in the end
They say insanity is
When you rinse and repeat
Tryin to make an easy buck
Instead of just being
Losing an easy buck instead
Of pocketing
Life of a Rider
Isn’t an easy path
Want to get rid of this
Insanity not so easy
...
Cutting in line
Won’t wait my turn
It’s my money and
I want to collect
But the game ain’t over
There’s still time
For it to fall to pieces
Does it almost every time
Life of a Rider
Comin up short in the end
They say insanity is
When you rinse and repeat
Tryin to make an easy buck
Instead of just being
Losing an easy buck instead
Of pocketing
Life of a Rider
Isn’t an easy path
Want to get rid of this
Insanity not so easy
...
#addiction
#curse
#fate #luck
#fate #luck
61 reads
0 Comments
Green_Arrow
Poem Published
7th Nov 2024 2:29pm
7th Nov 2024 2:29pm
When One Gets Drunk At A Bar
Josh gulped a few beers.
He saw Kate's dress sliding off.
Josh woke up naked.
He saw Kate's dress sliding off.
Josh woke up naked.
#addiction
#alcohol
#fiction
#senryu
#sex
131 reads
2 Comments
xthan
Poem Published
6th Nov 2024 3:48am
6th Nov 2024 3:48am
Mother Brighton
It's February and i'm
here Mother Brighton
I already feel your purple
and blues rising to the
surface, bleeding like
no other month or
place ever could
I could never tell whether
it's instinct or coincidental,
as your arms widen knowing
i'm falling the fuck apart which
is the only metaphor my tongue
could pluck about bleeding
with a chance of violence.
It's February and i'm
here Mother Brighton
my hands slot heavy rocks
with splattered patterns in
two of my front...
here Mother Brighton
I already feel your purple
and blues rising to the
surface, bleeding like
no other month or
place ever could
I could never tell whether
it's instinct or coincidental,
as your arms widen knowing
i'm falling the fuck apart which
is the only metaphor my tongue
could pluck about bleeding
with a chance of violence.
It's February and i'm
here Mother Brighton
my hands slot heavy rocks
with splattered patterns in
two of my front...
#addiction
#confessional
#depression
59 reads
0 Comments
Alois_inwriting02
Poem Published
5th Nov 2024 4:49pm
5th Nov 2024 4:49pm
honey, the Kid ain’t alright
Dopesick, drug addled
Brain zaps, sinking in logical traps-
Blinded by the perceived righteousness of my own path—
a Will long since fettered unwillingly
espousing the
same
self-deceiving
hypocrisy I detest
mini seizures, the slippery slope’s
steeper,
fuck, my knees hurt.
Drawing closer to a yawning primeval Void that
ever patiently beckons my return.
The very essence of It is atomized in my
arteries, asphyxiating erythrocytes in Epicurean Entanglements
...
Brain zaps, sinking in logical traps-
Blinded by the perceived righteousness of my own path—
a Will long since fettered unwillingly
espousing the
same
self-deceiving
hypocrisy I detest
mini seizures, the slippery slope’s
steeper,
fuck, my knees hurt.
Drawing closer to a yawning primeval Void that
ever patiently beckons my return.
The very essence of It is atomized in my
arteries, asphyxiating erythrocytes in Epicurean Entanglements
...
#anxiety
#denial
#loneliness
#shame
#addiction
112 reads
6 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
2nd Nov 2024 11:58pm
2nd Nov 2024 11:58pm
On The Hill
On the hill
All the pennies dropped
Should have bought a mansion on the hill
Tried to be a winner
I’m such a loser through and through
All the time I spent
Instead of being present
Chasing dollar signs
Being on the wrong side
I still remember
My first time
It was 1994….Eagles and Niners
Garner laid it down and I
Collected two bills
The start of something
So destructive
Wish I could go back cause
I see it’s killing my family
Pennies dropped
Add up to a bucket ...
All the pennies dropped
Should have bought a mansion on the hill
Tried to be a winner
I’m such a loser through and through
All the time I spent
Instead of being present
Chasing dollar signs
Being on the wrong side
I still remember
My first time
It was 1994….Eagles and Niners
Garner laid it down and I
Collected two bills
The start of something
So destructive
Wish I could go back cause
I see it’s killing my family
Pennies dropped
Add up to a bucket ...
#addiction
#greed
#money #sports
#money #sports
55 reads
0 Comments
MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
1st Nov 2024 10:06pm
1st Nov 2024 10:06pm
Whale Psychologist
One day...
When the boffins pull his carcass apart
they'll find a new species of syphilis
had acted as a stand in for his heart
even as it worked as a chrysalis
in syndication with his Adderall
to evolve neural function into venom
spat as demagoguery and Sharpie scrawl
never too far from his ogre frenum
routinely caught by photos, in a sneer,
or wide open cetacean blowhard hole
in all the ways lips can represent fear
and neuronal damage rigamarole;
too late to analyze when he is dead,
in lackey wake...and subsequent...
When the boffins pull his carcass apart
they'll find a new species of syphilis
had acted as a stand in for his heart
even as it worked as a chrysalis
in syndication with his Adderall
to evolve neural function into venom
spat as demagoguery and Sharpie scrawl
never too far from his ogre frenum
routinely caught by photos, in a sneer,
or wide open cetacean blowhard hole
in all the ways lips can represent fear
and neuronal damage rigamarole;
too late to analyze when he is dead,
in lackey wake...and subsequent...
#addiction
#hypocrisy
#MentalHealth
#politics
#violence
155 reads
10 Comments
James_A_Knight
Poem Published
1st Nov 2024 3:22pm
1st Nov 2024 3:22pm
Beer
Drink the bottle down
Feel the warming numbing rush
Diluting the soul
Feel the warming numbing rush
Diluting the soul
#addiction
#weakness
77 reads
2 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
1st Nov 2024 11:47am
1st Nov 2024 11:47am
Vodkhaiku
Clear liquid, ice cold
Burning warmth in every sip
Glass echoes its tale.
Burning warmth in every sip
Glass echoes its tale.
#addiction
#alcohol
#art
#lust
#passion
81 reads
10 Comments
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