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Video Nasties
a horror story
1989
After he killed her, he returned her library books.
They were piled on a stand by Mary-Anne's armchair, which faced the walnut-encased television set. John liked to watch his videotapes on that, and now with her gone, he'd be able to more often.
If you get away with it...
I will, he snapped back in his thoughts. He shovelled the books into a bag, but not before one last disgusted grimace at them. The Sheikh's English Bride. The Millionaire's Harlot. Love on Ward 7. Kissing in the Common Room. She had no taste, no...
1989
After he killed her, he returned her library books.
They were piled on a stand by Mary-Anne's armchair, which faced the walnut-encased television set. John liked to watch his videotapes on that, and now with her gone, he'd be able to more often.
If you get away with it...
I will, he snapped back in his thoughts. He shovelled the books into a bag, but not before one last disgusted grimace at them. The Sheikh's English Bride. The Millionaire's Harlot. Love on Ward 7. Kissing in the Common Room. She had no taste, no...
#evil
#horror
#ShortStory #violence
#ShortStory #violence
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On the set...Take Two!!
#dialogue
#porn
#sex
#ShortStory
#uplifting
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Something needed to be done
The board review came to a decision
They found him sane
One doctor felt otherwise
Doctor knew that he fooled the board and staff
The doctor pleaded with the medical board
They saw nothing wrong
The ex girlfriend was always afraid of him
He went psycho on her a few times
For no apparent reason
She would have liked to do normal things couples would do
Instead, she had to worry when something so small and minute would agitate him
He didn't like that she was talking to her brother
He thought her & her brother were secretly in love ...
They found him sane
One doctor felt otherwise
Doctor knew that he fooled the board and staff
The doctor pleaded with the medical board
They saw nothing wrong
The ex girlfriend was always afraid of him
He went psycho on her a few times
For no apparent reason
She would have liked to do normal things couples would do
Instead, she had to worry when something so small and minute would agitate him
He didn't like that she was talking to her brother
He thought her & her brother were secretly in love ...
#fiction
#girlfriend
#MentalHealth
#murder
#ShortStory
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A Bewildering Emergency
Look out!
They're coming for you
Who is it?
Why me??
I'm perfectly healthy
How did I get here?
What happened?
I'm on this table, motionless
I can hear & see but I can't talk or move
It's like I'm in some sort of comatose state
I can see the nurses & doctors talking but i don't see their mouths moving
They continue to look towards me
I see a few shake their heads
One of the nurses has this large needle
She's walking towards me
I don't like this one bit
There's no way I can stop or defend myself ...
They're coming for you
Who is it?
Why me??
I'm perfectly healthy
How did I get here?
What happened?
I'm on this table, motionless
I can hear & see but I can't talk or move
It's like I'm in some sort of comatose state
I can see the nurses & doctors talking but i don't see their mouths moving
They continue to look towards me
I see a few shake their heads
One of the nurses has this large needle
She's walking towards me
I don't like this one bit
There's no way I can stop or defend myself ...
#fiction
#mystery
#scary #ShortStory
#scary #ShortStory
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Get me a cold beer, or else!!
During the 1990's a severe winter storm kept temperatures in the 20's and thousands of homes in Amarillo Texas, without power for several days. It was perhaps a combination of cabin fever and alcohol that led one woman to shoot her 73 year old husband to death in the kitchen of their home. He gave her a can of warm beer. It had occurred to neither one of them to chill a six-pack on the back porch!
#alcohol
#death
#relationships
#ShortStory
#winter
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Life's a bitch
A husband & wife living in Boston had been married for over 25 years. He faithfully visited his wife in the hospital everyday, where she laid in a coma for several months in 1985 with little hope for recovery. Distraught over the loss of his longtime companion, the husband committed suicide in their home. Hours later, his wife woke up!
#illness
#love
#marriage
#ShortStory
#suicide
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Affection Makes You Weak
She snickered in my face
I told her all the things that I felt and she laughed me right out the door
I can still hear her laughing at me
Even when I'm alone, I can hear her cackling like a witch
I want to get out
Get in my car at night and drive an endless road to somewhere but nowhere
Affection is a disease
Don't succumb to it, it will wipe you out!
It's for weak fools
I've moved on
I told her all the things that I felt and she laughed me right out the door
I can still hear her laughing at me
Even when I'm alone, I can hear her cackling like a witch
I want to get out
Get in my car at night and drive an endless road to somewhere but nowhere
Affection is a disease
Don't succumb to it, it will wipe you out!
It's for weak fools
I've moved on
#rejection
#relationships
#shame #ShortStory
#shame #ShortStory
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Best Orgasms They Could Ever Have Without The Passion
They have their rituals like any other married couple
At night, he goes downstairs before bed and jerks off to the hottest porn on the internet
He can have any women he wants
She goes under the covers with her dildo and vibrator and fucks & pulsates herself to an amazing orgasm
They finish around the same time,
even though they're in different rooms
They have been married for so long that they have the perfect sex every time
After the lights go out, they sleep like real human beings.
At night, he goes downstairs before bed and jerks off to the hottest porn on the internet
He can have any women he wants
She goes under the covers with her dildo and vibrator and fucks & pulsates herself to an amazing orgasm
They finish around the same time,
even though they're in different rooms
They have been married for so long that they have the perfect sex every time
After the lights go out, they sleep like real human beings.
#loneliness
#marriage
#ShortStory
#emptiness
#orgasm
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A fork, a knife and a spoon
My wife only wants me to spoon her when she's hammered
Any other time, she don't want me near
That's ok
I actually despise her and spooning
One night she came home incredibly drunk
She was all over the place
Stumbling, making no sense
Fell backwards into my cabinet
Breaking some heirloom figurines I had from my family
No apology, nothing
My blood was beginning to boil
I yelled at her, "GET THE FUCK OUT OF MY FACE!!!"
I was tired, so I went to bed
Few moments later she came into bed
She was frisky and...
Any other time, she don't want me near
That's ok
I actually despise her and spooning
One night she came home incredibly drunk
She was all over the place
Stumbling, making no sense
Fell backwards into my cabinet
Breaking some heirloom figurines I had from my family
No apology, nothing
My blood was beginning to boil
I yelled at her, "GET THE FUCK OUT OF MY FACE!!!"
I was tired, so I went to bed
Few moments later she came into bed
She was frisky and...
#wife
#murder
#food
#ShortStory
#horror
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Brickstone
3000 BC, welcome to Brickstone, with stone built blocks of flats. If you weren't from around here, then you tip-toe.
Chrysopraze Stone was a neanderthal badman. He was feared throughout the land of Bricks, just like he's the Sandman.
He had a low forehead, and his barnet was shaved to the wood. He had a sabre tooth shank that he carried around in the hood.
His wifey Amathyst was also good with her fists. You wouldn't criticise her cooking, or your facial mug would get chipped.
She was tall and she was blonde, Amazonian strong, the queen of the cave...
Chrysopraze Stone was a neanderthal badman. He was feared throughout the land of Bricks, just like he's the Sandman.
He had a low forehead, and his barnet was shaved to the wood. He had a sabre tooth shank that he carried around in the hood.
His wifey Amathyst was also good with her fists. You wouldn't criticise her cooking, or your facial mug would get chipped.
She was tall and she was blonde, Amazonian strong, the queen of the cave...
#narrative
#ShortStory
#prose
#historical
#nonfiction
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The carwash made you wet, I need to dry off
#women
#beach
#ShortStory
#dirty
#orgasm
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The Invited Guest
One moonlit night I was in my convertible driving through the city of Las Vegas, NV
After losing a lot of cash and getting into a fight with my wife
I went to see a silent film for mature audiences only
As I was leaving the city limits, heading back home in California
I saw a hitchhiker waving me down
He looked mousey, a little disheveled but I felt bad for him
He told me his name was Sid
I asked him where he was headed
He said, “Anywhere you’re going, I’m fine with.”
I thought that was odd
He told me that he was coming from a desert grave...
After losing a lot of cash and getting into a fight with my wife
I went to see a silent film for mature audiences only
As I was leaving the city limits, heading back home in California
I saw a hitchhiker waving me down
He looked mousey, a little disheveled but I felt bad for him
He told me his name was Sid
I asked him where he was headed
He said, “Anywhere you’re going, I’m fine with.”
I thought that was odd
He told me that he was coming from a desert grave...
#courage
#murder
#cars
#ShortStory
#mystery
64 reads
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