Poems About God Seeking Honest Critique
#God
Poems about god seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Fear
looking through time I shutter
for things done in the dark, I can't utter
whispers, secrets, and lies
flawed I'm told by design
madness followed I made a world of illusion
to protect an innocent mind from confusion
Beauty was our creation
tenderly we made all things lovely
each day a new exploration
we made heaven from hell in our confinement
it was not enough to put me away from Himself
time passed and he came to claim my son
creating a ball of fire
a light meant to warm some
and threaten...
for things done in the dark, I can't utter
whispers, secrets, and lies
flawed I'm told by design
madness followed I made a world of illusion
to protect an innocent mind from confusion
Beauty was our creation
tenderly we made all things lovely
each day a new exploration
we made heaven from hell in our confinement
it was not enough to put me away from Himself
time passed and he came to claim my son
creating a ball of fire
a light meant to warm some
and threaten...
#angels
#God
#love #MeToo
#love #MeToo
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Hymn to The White Spring
In the beginning I saw nothing
eyes furiously adjusting
between day and night
a woman held my hand down
those gnarled stone steps
as I teetered on the edge
of nerves and darkness
then, as if a dimmer switch
gently illuminated sight:
hundreds of candles
moss covered horns
a huge central pool carved
out of simplistic stone
overflowing with spring water.
I sat a little.
Watched naked humans climb
in and out of that...
eyes furiously adjusting
between day and night
a woman held my hand down
those gnarled stone steps
as I teetered on the edge
of nerves and darkness
then, as if a dimmer switch
gently illuminated sight:
hundreds of candles
moss covered horns
a huge central pool carved
out of simplistic stone
overflowing with spring water.
I sat a little.
Watched naked humans climb
in and out of that...
#God
#pagan
#magic #Britain
#magic #Britain
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To Map out Infinity
Pondering under punctures of the infinity,
Pinholes, the other side twinkling through
Atop my roof, where visits oft add salinity
Tonight, alone, I plan for what I wish I knew
In present, past trends now cease extending
I'm left to wander about, mapping out infinity
Tightroping, I wobble to futures impending
Pray the ground be closer, by His divinity
Should the rope snap, I fall to path below
Please guide my feet to night's stars aglow
Pinholes, the other side twinkling through
Atop my roof, where visits oft add salinity
Tonight, alone, I plan for what I wish I knew
In present, past trends now cease extending
I'm left to wander about, mapping out infinity
Tightroping, I wobble to futures impending
Pray the ground be closer, by His divinity
Should the rope snap, I fall to path below
Please guide my feet to night's stars aglow
#dreams
#God
#LifeGoals
#SelfDiscovery
#NaPoWriMo2024
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4 Comments
Foolish
sewn into the Earth specifically placed in California, a Valley girl...yeah
doing what I do, stick out and give the Man Himself a challenge
it turns him on to stir my ire
He comes close and then pulls back
letting his other wives know about me
sits back and watch the cats fight, meow
pretty men and women, throw in the mix the gender-neutral
he wants me to be honest with myself
I am as honest as I can be given the circumstance
He has thrown me in a situation more than once
just to take back his favor
after He tests my...
doing what I do, stick out and give the Man Himself a challenge
it turns him on to stir my ire
He comes close and then pulls back
letting his other wives know about me
sits back and watch the cats fight, meow
pretty men and women, throw in the mix the gender-neutral
he wants me to be honest with myself
I am as honest as I can be given the circumstance
He has thrown me in a situation more than once
just to take back his favor
after He tests my...
#God
#angels
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6 Comments
She believed everything I said
I took her up to the roof and told her she could fly because I asked God to grant her a special aviator's license.
Did you ever hear of something so goddamn stupid?
She did it
She fell like a fucking stone
Pretty stupid, even for a girl that was an amazing poet!
She was on this site from time to time
Did you ever hear of something so goddamn stupid?
She did it
She fell like a fucking stone
Pretty stupid, even for a girl that was an amazing poet!
She was on this site from time to time
#God
#LifeAsAWriter
#WritingPoetry #ignorance
#WritingPoetry #ignorance
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17 Comments
Double Cross
Disturb my fragile sensibility
Disrupt the expectations of my wanting
When I chase temporal things to a fault
I fall pray in my humility to the Holy Ghost haunting
Answering the warning signs with replies of faith imbued by the call
What if there is something to it
When we dismiss the claims for broken records on repeat
Discerning truth amid the chaos of another’s source of vain conceit
The word is alive and I’m dead to rights
When I live subject to something divine
Shadows cast of unseen lights
The end doesn’t answer to my...
Disrupt the expectations of my wanting
When I chase temporal things to a fault
I fall pray in my humility to the Holy Ghost haunting
Answering the warning signs with replies of faith imbued by the call
What if there is something to it
When we dismiss the claims for broken records on repeat
Discerning truth amid the chaos of another’s source of vain conceit
The word is alive and I’m dead to rights
When I live subject to something divine
Shadows cast of unseen lights
The end doesn’t answer to my...
#religion
#God
#Christian
#faith
#morality
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2 Comments
Fear is GOD
Ants think grasshopper to be numen
Grasshopper thinks bird to be demiurge.
Rat think snake to be divinity
Snake think eagle to be celestial.
Fish think shark to be titan
Shark think orcas to be icon.
Lamb thinks lion to be daemon
Lion think man to be immortal.
And man think emptiness to be God
Get it now?
There's no God, only that which we fear
Grasshopper thinks bird to be demiurge.
Rat think snake to be divinity
Snake think eagle to be celestial.
Fish think shark to be titan
Shark think orcas to be icon.
Lamb thinks lion to be daemon
Lion think man to be immortal.
And man think emptiness to be God
Get it now?
There's no God, only that which we fear
#God
#TruthOfLife
#LifeCycle #fear
#LifeCycle #fear
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Laden, Lay Down To Die
confession number one I am afraid of being alone in this world adrift
my mind plays mean tricks on me
it makes up alternate realities when people are cruel
or when things get too rough and I break
never to trust it to protect
the first breakdown I had was when I was a little girl
pretending Mommy hadn't left me again
my abandonment issues are all too apparent
my weaknesses lay bare
the wolves smell blood on the air
and they approach
the one I'm married to only eats my heart out
leaving me to die a little...
my mind plays mean tricks on me
it makes up alternate realities when people are cruel
or when things get too rough and I break
never to trust it to protect
the first breakdown I had was when I was a little girl
pretending Mommy hadn't left me again
my abandonment issues are all too apparent
my weaknesses lay bare
the wolves smell blood on the air
and they approach
the one I'm married to only eats my heart out
leaving me to die a little...
#love
#God
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1 Comment
I hope you think of me kindly when you come for my things
I don't believe in a god,
but when I am begging for him to save me,
it is your name that falls from my lips.
but when I am begging for him to save me,
it is your name that falls from my lips.
#sadness
#love
#loneliness
#God
#fear
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1 Comment
I don't see the face of God here...
All faith is false and all truth is faith
as if a mirror exploded and each one
chose a sliver to be his entire mirror.
as if a mirror exploded and each one
chose a sliver to be his entire mirror.
#religion
#God
#faith
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6 Comments
6-WORD RECIPE TO TRUE HAPPI NESS
GOD
MAN
WOMAN
MATRIMONY
PROGENY
PERPETUAL
MAN
WOMAN
MATRIMONY
PROGENY
PERPETUAL
#marriage
#God
#aging #pregnancy
#aging #pregnancy
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5 Comments
Christ the Gardner
Ever since my accident
I had Jesus Christ (JC) become my Gardner
he's a slaphappy messiah
all he wants in life is kool-aid, scratch-offs and cigarettes
oh and he enjoys calling up Lucifer (Satan) to meet him at the bowling alley
the priests throughout the neighborhood dislike him
probably because he don't follow all the rules and guidelines,
that are scripted in that fictional book called the Bible
none of the nuns don't like his message (nuns have no fun)
those wrinkled up penguins
flock to my home to get a glimpse of him
their turned...
I had Jesus Christ (JC) become my Gardner
he's a slaphappy messiah
all he wants in life is kool-aid, scratch-offs and cigarettes
oh and he enjoys calling up Lucifer (Satan) to meet him at the bowling alley
the priests throughout the neighborhood dislike him
probably because he don't follow all the rules and guidelines,
that are scripted in that fictional book called the Bible
none of the nuns don't like his message (nuns have no fun)
those wrinkled up penguins
flock to my home to get a glimpse of him
their turned...
#motivational
#religion
#God
#devil
#fiction
86 reads
6 Comments
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