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Cruelhandedwriter
He appeared to me in the beginning
to be a drunken brawler
given to rants of the most vicious kind
I loved his ways from the start they made me laugh
taking down this poet and that
drunk or not with his quick wit
secretly I longed for him to take me out
with his stroke of intellect
that would mean at least he noticed me
though he never did
when I got some positive critique from him
it felt as if I was kissing heaven
an ocean apart but his brutal yet for real raw writing
put him in arms distance my heart skipping a beat each time he was near
made me feel alive
a brawler a fighter for sure
also a lover and a faithful spouse to his beloved
a friend when you need someone to talk to
I feel as if i've touched the underbelly of a white shark
getting to know Judas
he can tear you in two with his razor sharp teeth
then lift you to heights unobtainable with his favor
he is a tender soul and i've come to care for him deeply
whether I understand it or not
he touches me with the way he writes
I can say he's made a difference
to my detached extistence
Cheers to you Jamie
who is quite unique
you have transformed yourself
into a fierce warrior of the finest kind
but then he was there all the time
much love Crim
(entered in Violet's Competition)
to be a drunken brawler
given to rants of the most vicious kind
I loved his ways from the start they made me laugh
taking down this poet and that
drunk or not with his quick wit
secretly I longed for him to take me out
with his stroke of intellect
that would mean at least he noticed me
though he never did
when I got some positive critique from him
it felt as if I was kissing heaven
an ocean apart but his brutal yet for real raw writing
put him in arms distance my heart skipping a beat each time he was near
made me feel alive
a brawler a fighter for sure
also a lover and a faithful spouse to his beloved
a friend when you need someone to talk to
I feel as if i've touched the underbelly of a white shark
getting to know Judas
he can tear you in two with his razor sharp teeth
then lift you to heights unobtainable with his favor
he is a tender soul and i've come to care for him deeply
whether I understand it or not
he touches me with the way he writes
I can say he's made a difference
to my detached extistence
Cheers to you Jamie
who is quite unique
you have transformed yourself
into a fierce warrior of the finest kind
but then he was there all the time
much love Crim
(entered in Violet's Competition)
Published 2nd Apr 2013
| Edited 4th Apr 2013
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Anonymous
2nd Apr 2013 00:28am
A beautiful write for a friend, a tribute indeed. Very beautiful crim :-)
2nd Apr 2013 00:46am
2nd Apr 2013 1:03am
i think he'd hate this, but what the fuck do i know? i'd like the kings and queens to gimme a red cross too... the kind sliced over your empty eye sockets. now that would be tribute.
2nd Apr 2013 1:07am
I think he will hate this too but I had to say what he makes me feel..thank you..peace Crim
this is a nice tribute to a not very nice person, haha, ironic. It's all in the name, of course, but once you look within a book you find pages and pages of facets waiting to be discovered.
Nice write
Caliban
Nice write
Caliban
2nd Apr 2013 1:31am
Anonymous
2nd Apr 2013 3:49am
great tribute crim
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2nd Apr 2013 4:55am
2nd Apr 2013 8:44am
Ballsy write crimson, it shows a softer side of calloused man from your prospective. It's neatly penned and any man better be damned honored you took the time to string a piece like this together so fluently. Very much enjoyed.
2nd Apr 2013 9:05am
Thank you Kourtni so much i'm still wavering on the edge if I should leave this posted but I was inspired to write it because his writing inspires me..thank you again..peace Crim
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2nd Apr 2013 4:40pm
Neatly captured - I have witnessed some of the transformation also.
Panama won't admit to liking it, lol... but secretly, he might.
A generous write, Crim. Well done.
Panama won't admit to liking it, lol... but secretly, he might.
A generous write, Crim. Well done.
2nd Apr 2013 6:38pm
Thank you Ataki..I hope he secretly likes it just a little..wishing you peace..beautiful lady..Crim
7th Apr 2013 10:19am
I'll surprise you now. It's obviously a tad odd for me to read such a thing, but nevertheless I am hugely honored to read it. "I feel as if i've touched the underbelly of a white shark
getting to know Judas" - That is an awesome line, and I suppose its all the better because its about me (I joke) I thank you sincerely Crim. All I ever wanted to do was hope that my take on things would be able to help others, and it touches me to know that it has. Thank you.
getting to know Judas" - That is an awesome line, and I suppose its all the better because its about me (I joke) I thank you sincerely Crim. All I ever wanted to do was hope that my take on things would be able to help others, and it touches me to know that it has. Thank you.
7th Apr 2013 5:21pm
You surprised me alright smiling widely..you touch my heart with your writing and willingness to give encouragement..you've transformed into a fierce warrior..you give me hope for myself Jamie..you touch a lot of hearts and minds with your writing..I'm so glad you liked this poem dedicated to you..much love Crim :)
