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The Grin And The Scowl
Taunting me,
with your evil tongue
I can only smile
when your words are flung,
the only tragedy here is you not me,
you are haunted and I, am free
you are bound by hate and I by love
there is nothing I can't overcome
no joy just a fucked up man-boy,
you wear your past like a hat
high atop your head
opened your heart once,
and oh how it bled
a blood soaked soul
stuck and forced to breathe,
happiness,
a word you can not conceive,
there's no way to bring me down....
I am the smile
and you....
you're just a frown
with your evil tongue
I can only smile
when your words are flung,
the only tragedy here is you not me,
you are haunted and I, am free
you are bound by hate and I by love
there is nothing I can't overcome
no joy just a fucked up man-boy,
you wear your past like a hat
high atop your head
opened your heart once,
and oh how it bled
a blood soaked soul
stuck and forced to breathe,
happiness,
a word you can not conceive,
there's no way to bring me down....
I am the smile
and you....
you're just a frown
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Re: The Grin And The Scowl
28th Mar 2013 9:13pm
re: Re: The Grin And The Scowl
28th Mar 2013 9:16pm
oh yeah oops sorry if me leaving off an E ruined your day...I'd like to say it wont happen again...but it will...time and time again...
and thanks!!!!! I will totally fix that now
and thanks!!!!! I will totally fix that now
re: re: Re: The Grin And The Scowl
28th Mar 2013 9:26pm
Actually I'm writing, posting and responding to keep a bum day from going totally to crap (maybe I stopped drinkin' too soon in this life).
About your nailer (the last line)- if you went with 'you are' rather than the contraction it (I think) would slow the flow to a 'smack the eye' speed.
Simply a typed thought, nikki.
About your nailer (the last line)- if you went with 'you are' rather than the contraction it (I think) would slow the flow to a 'smack the eye' speed.
Simply a typed thought, nikki.
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Re: The Grin And The Scowl
28th Mar 2013 9:57pm
Ok, I like the Idea of this , the two masks of theatre are a nice touch, the last stanza brings a more personal touch to the whole affair, letting the angry Nikkiemoe take the reigns. Tight write, Nikkiemoe, nice rhyme, some darkness too.
Hat tip to ya missus. Shine on :)
Hat tip to ya missus. Shine on :)
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Re: The Grin And The Scowl
28th Mar 2013 11:48pm
Your Writing Is So Amazing! I Swear i Get Excited Every Time I See That You Post Something New.
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Re: The Grin And The Scowl
Anonymous
29th Mar 2013 3:41am
I've heard the best revenge is to be happy ;) Seems to be some truth to this. I like it, Nikki. The "in your face" feel of taunting the tainted. Give'em hell girl!
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Re: The Grin And The Scowl
29th Mar 2013 8:50am
Another kick-ass poem.
I can only smile
when your words are flung,
the only tragedy here is you not me,
you are haunted and I, am free
you are bound by hate and I by love
there is nothing I can't overcome
I liked the optimism, confidence,
and strength in these words.
I can only smile
when your words are flung,
the only tragedy here is you not me,
you are haunted and I, am free
you are bound by hate and I by love
there is nothing I can't overcome
I liked the optimism, confidence,
and strength in these words.
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Re: The Grin And The Scowl
Anonymous
29th Mar 2013 10:19am
Its a nice concept to use the opposite faces of man,opposites are those that enlarge our differences as well as our likeness
Nicely written, Nikki!
Nicely written, Nikki!
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Re: The Grin And The Scowl
29th Mar 2013 2:36pm
nice rite --- butt eye must admit to having difficulty wit
anger/vitriol that just 'leaves it at that', without
a hint like-as-if "maybe i'm missing something here" as, at least a token of compassion, or a 'chance' at somekinda 'redemption' that even the most vile of idiots should be afforded....
but
y'v got an audience, &, being so voluminously "incomprehensible", i've got but a precious-few readers, of which i thank you for being one.
anger/vitriol that just 'leaves it at that', without
a hint like-as-if "maybe i'm missing something here" as, at least a token of compassion, or a 'chance' at somekinda 'redemption' that even the most vile of idiots should be afforded....
but
y'v got an audience, &, being so voluminously "incomprehensible", i've got but a precious-few readers, of which i thank you for being one.
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Re: The Grin And The Scowl
29th Mar 2013 3:18pm