The Beginner's Guide to Writing

The Beginner's Guide to Writing (Just some basic shit I threw together to help out the new writers).

I'll come straight off the bat and say to you, don't rhyme for the sake of rhyming! It comes off very obvious and stops me dead in my tracks when I'm trying to enjoy whatever I can from your piece. Now, you need to structure your work properly. Break it down in stanzas (or paragraphs) depends whether or not you're going for prose or poetry format. Next, incorporate analogy usage and metaphors. Personification or alliteration even (But know when to use these techniques and when to stop.) There are many, many more poetic techniques that can be used to improve the quality of a piece. And there is much that needs to be cut away here, and the language comes off as contrived some. Write how you feel, not how you perceive you want to be read.

Punctuation and grammar can also use some work, take it to a word document and auto-correct the shit out of it, and pick up on your errors and learn from your mistakes and take from this what many cannot, where you have not done well, where you can greatly improve, and do not linger on one piece, keep writing, keep critiquing others work (You'll learn from that as well as being critiqued). Your voice is muddled, 'he and I'. There is much more that needs work here, but you need to learn from your mistakes and improve your writing with it. Write, throw it away, write again, burn that shit, and continue the process until eventually, you'll be at a far better standard with your poetry.

Another important point would be sentence structure and properly formulating your piece as it progresses. That was another blatant flaw to your work; the structure of your sentences has you confusing different verbs. Which in turn ruins the flow and structure of your entire piece; this may be a main factor to why the structure is so poor, that, along with your lack of paragraph structure, as you seem to be confusing your poetry format with prose format. While you continue to do this, you can never fully progress from this. And I will stress the point of clean, clear and relaxed rhyming, don't force your rhyming, it ruins the entire piece and absolutely destroys whatever structure you want to your piece, do not sacrifice proper structure for forced rhyming.

Something that needs to be remembered would be 'quality over quantity’ I don't want to read more of shit than I do less of brilliance. If you write something good and feel it is a little under fed, take your time, make your edits but don't expand on finished ideas for the sake of making your piece bigger. It takes away from whatever quality you'd have in your most powerful lines. Quality over quantity is a golden rule. And I always adhere to that in my poetry. Never write more for the sake of simply making a piece look bigger, readers would rather have quality over quantity, why read more of the same when I could read less of something unique?

Anyway, just keep all of these factors in mind with your work. You've got so many techniques that can be used to improve a piece other than forced, boring and generic rhyming. Have a serious, and engaging point to put forth and suggest to the reader, keep it subtle and either scream your emotions or downplay them according to the topic of your piece. And remember to contribute to others work and help others as you wish to be helped; it is a give and take process that works very well. Courtesy and generosity will take one very far in the deep underground.

Keep trying and keep writing.