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Us
You're forever here
I never leave your mind
I'm forever yours
And your always mine
You make me happy
And I make you glad
There is no way
I will ever
Leave your side
For I love you
And you love me
We are the two
Love birds that
Every one can see
I never leave your mind
I'm forever yours
And your always mine
You make me happy
And I make you glad
There is no way
I will ever
Leave your side
For I love you
And you love me
We are the two
Love birds that
Every one can see
Published 7th Mar 2013
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7th Mar 2013 5:46am
7th Mar 2013 10:39am
tender and sweet Imagery here Jamiee-Liegh,
it describes the wonderful feeling of mutual Love for one another, Pen on say I
Cheers! Scot.
it describes the wonderful feeling of mutual Love for one another, Pen on say I
Cheers! Scot.
27th Dec 2016 2:44am
The rhythm in the beginning, along with the half-rhyme, is quite comforting. I felt that perhaps a few stanza-breaks, or small rearrangement of words, would've made this piece even more pleasing to read. But your use of hyperbole is very cute, along with the personal narrative.
