My Greedy Lover

Excellent Lola, love the twist at the end, and yes it can do that if one allows it.

Thanks M! I like twists too!

Lola

yep, she's so seductive, get it everyday lola....strider!

thanks for reading strider!  appreciated!

Lola

I love this one! I am familiar with this feeling and the soft bed beckons...... :)

thanks for taking the time. I'm glad that you can understand, but not so that you can relate. People that don't suffer from it have a difficult time fully understanding just how debilitating it can be.

Lola

Intriguing, enlightened at the end, great.....Cassie

thank you cassie, I appreciate you dropping by and leaving a comment!

Lola

I do love the element of surpise! I enjoy shocking endings myself.
Im so glad you didn't allow that greedy lover get the best of you with his cunning ways!
AWESOME READ!

thanks Rain.  It kind of explains why I go MIA from time to time. It's a struggle some days, but I'm a tough bitch and I fight back.

Lola

Maybe just picky semantics but a few parts leave me with questions:

When you write, "You
you are like
my greedy lover..." are you comparing one person ("you") with someone already there? (my greedy lover"?  Making a comparison to a hypothetical comparison?

You have "you'll lick at me". Was the "at" intentional.

An enjoyable write---just things I wondered about.  

Jazz, so full of questions! that's good, because it shows you are paying attention!:)

I guess my answer is it is a hypothetical comparison. When one is in deep depression, they don't tend to cavort and frolic with a real lover, they shun human contact, they cease communicating or enjoying life on any meaningful level.

Lick at me? Yes, this was intentional. I see it almost like flames licking at something, the first few licks of the flame before an object is engulfed and consumed.

Glad you enjoyed, and I am glad you asked questions. I'm even happier I had answers! ;)
As always, grateful for your thoughtful comments.

Lola

Thanks for clearing that up. I am tempted to express my view on depression but that would take the message away from the poem.

go ahead and express! I'd be the last person to stop anyone from expressing an opinion, whether or not I agree with it. I'm always interested in what others have to say, how other people perceive things and the world around them.

AWESOME Twist on the piece Lola!!
Adored the write and content!!
PEN on!!!!!!

Sir Lancelott

thanks Lance!

Lola

Echo rain here.  I was expecting a twist at the end in that the apparent lover turns out to be a clinging infant child - which the description could also be read as.

damn, now that really would be depressing! being saddled with an infant child at my age! ;)
Thanks for dropping in!

Lola

Exactly how depression (the evil sadist) works! well penned expression of a dance I know well!

Thanks Miki. It's hard to say I am glad you can relate to this, but you know what I mean!
Those that don't suffer have no clue. Those that do, just have to learn to dance faster! ;)

Lola

I shared all that with you so well expressed