Gasoline Skies

You're burning up, baby!

LOVE this.

Ahh, I had a good feeling about this one.
I do like fire :)

Thank you for your comments :)

"heaving out cigarette smoke figures", and "The sun sank into depression;
shipwrecked with muted gold ruins,
extinguished by guilt."  <---those lines are Amazing!
Where does your mind go when your pen takes control?? I want to visit there sometimes soon!:)

I can type quicker than I can write,
so my mental pen takes control.
I would love to know where it goes too :)
 
Thank you for your comment :)

An awesome write, Scribbler. Love the words/phrasing & superb imagery. Like this in particular:

The sun sank into depression;
shipwrecked with muted gold ruins,
extinguished by guilt.

A terrific finish to this wonderful read! Great job! :)

Carlene

P.S. Wanted to add to my reading list but it wouldn't let me!

No problem, thank you for all of your wonderful comments :)

I have read this 3 times and every time I'm like wow, your words are deep and your imagery is a dark circus of awesomeness :)
well done

Thank you kindly :)

burn it down scribbs!!!

Will do, sir!

Holy shit this is amazing. Sorry I don't have a valid comment just thought I'd let you know I think this,and all your writing, is fantastic.

Thank you, I feel the same about your work :)

"Gasoline skies contemplate suicide,
heaving out cigarette smoke figures
which fight the battles he never could." <-- For me, these lines really bring out this sense of the things so many of us do to try and mute the pains in our mind. And,
"Mourning pulls a few strings,
and a decision is made." really shows the impact deep, difficult emotions can have on a person.
It actually reminds me of something I've recently gone through: a brother of a friend of mine (21yrs old) passed away last week, and it really does causes decisions to be made in our head...

Not sure if my response is your intended reaction, but the poem was thought provoking. And I enjoyed it very much :) You're images worked well. Especially the "ship wreaked sun".

Thank you for your perceptive comment!

You can interpret it any way you wish to,
but I was definitely focused along those lines :)

I thought this poem was very profound but sad so utterly sad and desolate it made me feel, empty, light as a feather and floating above it all.
One of your best works!!!

Thank you, kindly Mourganna.
I'm so glad you think that :)

Thank you kindly :)

Whole lot of dark-loveliness goin on through out this poem! Gasoline Skies...Sweet burn;)

Ahh, thank you :)

Great! The feeling in it somewhat reminds me of this old poem of mine. Hope you don't mind I post the link.

http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/55140-mad-with-sunlight/

I don't mind at all, thank you for your comment :)

A struggling LIVE to fight another day...that's the message I got....if I got it wrong I'll change my comment a Confucius's quote lol....
I'm still learning poetry sorry I need education with this stuff....hmmmffff

You got that entirely right, that was
an aspect of what I was aiming for;
though your Confucius quotes are wonderful :D

This was a intresting read

Thank you, Redrose :)