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Feel Me
I sense and feel
a presence on the page
my font vibrates
with the touch
of those eyes
lines and spaces
tingle
echo hollowness
and once again
I lay naked and exposed to you
open and willing
to be taken inch by inch
slowly and languorously
splay innermost folds
of my mind
tease with fingers deft
and plunge
slick depth
to my hardened core
fill me with your need
and I'll give to you my own
my longing is for your words
whilst others seek
to decorate with diamonds
drench me in pearls
of your heart's pen
let the words
roll off your captive tongue
and free your spirit
to feel me
touch me
know me
my release
shall be pleasure doubled
when shared
betwixt two
Published 23rd Feb 2013
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23rd Feb 2013 00:54am
23rd Feb 2013 2:13am
23rd Feb 2013 1:22am
Your disguise grows ever more transparent M'lady-
And I didn't peruse this latest until afterwards-
And I didn't peruse this latest until afterwards-
23rd Feb 2013 2:15am
shhhh, my errant knight. the others may not be on to me as yet. I'll not be the cause of tongues wagging. ;)
Anonymous
23rd Feb 2013 2:44am
Nice flow Lola.
Strider
Strider
23rd Feb 2013 8:25am
23rd Feb 2013 1:43pm
Anonymous
23rd Feb 2013 2:48pm
I love this
23rd Feb 2013 4:03pm
23rd Feb 2013 7:29pm
I would have classed this in the Erotic section unless there is another interpretation. Words of sensuous love here.
Thank you for your input solomon, I did debate that very issue. The tone is sensual, there are sexual nuances, but this poem is not about a sexual act, therefore I did not feel the need to place it in the erotic category.
The poem is about writing poetry, the release experienced upon penning, the feeling of showing our naked mind to the world via the written word, as well as the pleasures received and given between the poet and the reader.
Perhaps I am wrong, but I did not think that called for it to be classified as erotic. I'd be interested to hear others weigh in on this, as I'd not want to offend anyone inadvertantly.
lola
The poem is about writing poetry, the release experienced upon penning, the feeling of showing our naked mind to the world via the written word, as well as the pleasures received and given between the poet and the reader.
Perhaps I am wrong, but I did not think that called for it to be classified as erotic. I'd be interested to hear others weigh in on this, as I'd not want to offend anyone inadvertantly.
lola
The Bible's Song of Songs is erotic but the sex there is implicit more than explicit. Like your own poem, it draws more than one interpretation. I don't think it offensive.
23rd Feb 2013 9:59pm
Hey no worries. I did not think that you were implying it was offensive :) You merely made me question my own choice of where I decided to categorize it, and my reasons for doing so.
It's all good!
Lola
It's all good!
Lola
