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Red Gingers
I was like the jungle king,
She was like the jungle queen,
She was running nude,
Except wearing those flowers,
And I was wearing the waves,
That kissed me otherwise nude.
All those strange creatures on the beach,
They all ignored us for burning together,
Burning for sin,
Craving for sin,
Like the reptiles being swallowed by their dens,
The cock of a man,
Kissing the pit of a woman,
The evolution of thirst,
The ejaculation of burst,
Everything protected by the transparent curtains of water.
She was like the jungle queen,
I was like the jungle king,
I was fucking her crude,
Except my censored spermatozoon blushing out,
And she was nowhere to consume,
My sapid feelings in her faked frame.
Red Gingers is the wildest of my compositions. The picture of a lover lost in the dreams of his consumed heroine is hard enough to be expressed without true feelings. The composition required hallucinated images of the lover rather than rich metaphors. Another interesting feature of the poem is like the background nature explained parallel in the backdrop which even though looks vivid, yet vague in the eyes
of the blind lovers. I think I have tried to impart complete justice related to the script.
She was like the jungle queen,
She was running nude,
Except wearing those flowers,
And I was wearing the waves,
That kissed me otherwise nude.
All those strange creatures on the beach,
They all ignored us for burning together,
Burning for sin,
Craving for sin,
Like the reptiles being swallowed by their dens,
The cock of a man,
Kissing the pit of a woman,
The evolution of thirst,
The ejaculation of burst,
Everything protected by the transparent curtains of water.
She was like the jungle queen,
I was like the jungle king,
I was fucking her crude,
Except my censored spermatozoon blushing out,
And she was nowhere to consume,
My sapid feelings in her faked frame.
Red Gingers is the wildest of my compositions. The picture of a lover lost in the dreams of his consumed heroine is hard enough to be expressed without true feelings. The composition required hallucinated images of the lover rather than rich metaphors. Another interesting feature of the poem is like the background nature explained parallel in the backdrop which even though looks vivid, yet vague in the eyes
of the blind lovers. I think I have tried to impart complete justice related to the script.
Published 28th Aug 2010
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28th Aug 2010 12:52pm
it's a brilliant masterpiece
the nudity is described with such perfection it makes me want to run around nude as well!
my deepest and most sincere congratulations on this breathtaking piece
the nudity is described with such perfection it makes me want to run around nude as well!
my deepest and most sincere congratulations on this breathtaking piece
28th Aug 2010 1:07pm
I am feeling on the top of the world...I don't have words to this, but thanx...thanx...thanx...
Anonymous
28th Aug 2010 2:20pm
The last line of the second stanza is the best you've ever written, I feel, which is saying a lot. Erotic and fierce; one of the few poems which can stimulate areas both above and below one's belt. I adore this piece.
30th Aug 2010 7:47am
I think I am improving with your comments Jack...the result is evident and there is nothing more satisfactory to a poet than getting such a huge compliment from you and opheliac. Right now each and every future of mine should meet similar standards and I will take care of that. Thank you very much Jack:-)
30th Aug 2010 9:46am
this is incredible. i was swallowed up in the world you created just for the two of them. it's like everything you put in was essential to the piece, even the indifferent creatures on the beach were supposed to be there, not that anyone else may have thought to put them in...perfect. great read. [:
30th Aug 2010 12:25pm
Jacki, and I am glad that I have been able to stand upto my reader's expectations from different part of the world. Enjoy reading me. Thanx again.
1st Oct 2010 7:12pm
the way you describe the nudity is somewhat beautiful and creative. the last stanza puts a brilliant ending to this poem! a great read. i love it! :) x
3rd Oct 2010 8:54am
This one was a ventilation to my personal feelings at a time and the way I have penned the same is something very endearing to me also. Then each one of my readers compliment is a bonus. Thank you sarah for enjoying this upto an extent. Do reading me.
3rd Oct 2010 4:25pm
27th Nov 2010 4:50am
and at the top of the world after such a comment on this one. However, don't flatter me too much so that I forget to write. Never imagine to control half this great but twice as good as this one. If you are properly motivated, you will be able to do so. Thank you so much for such a comment. You made my day!
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17th Jan 2011 4:56pm
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18th Jan 2011 5:56am
Initially flattered with the kind of comments flowing in, but then started to believe it in real that this one is one of ma best. Keep reading me for more of such masterpieces:-)
13th Dec 2013 3:28am
well @ adult one
is better
and this one is best
anyway you like it
they are worth a virgin's imagination
but i can't believe it
incredible indeed
Indian virgin
at 33?or 32 maybe
is better
and this one is best
anyway you like it
they are worth a virgin's imagination
but i can't believe it
incredible indeed
Indian virgin
at 33?or 32 maybe
