Honest Critique (Hostile Waters)

Your writing is weak
and your conviction
even weaker.
You're a writer, are you?
Then what the fuck
did I just read?

A mesh of words.
Boring, bland.
And without direction.
Nothing to hold it
No structure, no skill.
Without personification.
No metaphors, either!

Go ahead and 'write'
With your piss weak rhymes.
I've seen
better 'originality'
from a brick.
You claim you want
honest critique.
Don't break down in front of me.

When I bring the hammer down.
Struck to anvil
and left in the water
to simmer.
I attribute the same method
to your words.
And you cannot take it.

When you sit back down
after calling out the teacher.
Always remember
that your writing
isn't for the honest critiquers.
You're too weak for this.

So, before you submit another 'masterpiece',
safeguard your shit.
And disable the comments
because it's too far gone
for a change
to feedback for the friendly.
You're in hostile waters,
and I'm not fuckin' friendly.
Written by AscensionES (Aptilneilrionaltion)
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